The Village Within The Sands

by TheTenthDoctor10

Chapter 2: A New Companion?

It’s Monday now, and everypony is out and about, but I am looking for information regarding The Village Within The Sands. I decide to check the local library to which a nice pony by the name of Twilight Sparkle, she helped me look at some more books over the village. The village is, according to legend, still somewhere in the center of the Equestrian Desert! I hurry home to write about my new findings in my journal that i keep to write about my adventures. Serafina doesn’t seem to be around so i trot into town to buy more apples from Applejack. There is quite a long line so i wait for a few minutes until I am interrupted by a young pony. His coat is pure white, blood red eyes, and an orange/yellow mane! I am amazed by his appearance, he looks at me with a blank expression on his face. He does this for a minute or two just studying me as if he has seen me before.

I start to get nervous, i can feel myself sweating so i yell out “WHO ARE YOU!’ With a blank expression still on his face he smiles.

He looks at me and calmly asks “You’re Phoenix right?”

I am surprised he knows its me so I answer “Why yes, yes I am.”

He proceeds to tell me that he has a dream, the very same one i had when I was just a filly! He wants to become a treasure hunter, the best in all of equestria, I can tell this pony wants to follow his dreams so I ask him if he wants to be my second companion. He looks at me with his eyes tearing up, i can tell how happy he is, and he gives me a huge hug!
We both walk back to my Ponyville house, he tells me more about himself. His name is Torch, and his parents were both murdered by an unknown killer, he has lived his life in an orphanage, he was bullied by the other kids, he was never adopted because of his strange fiery colors, he wanted to be a treasure hunter because he has heard of me, and he is happy that I took him in. Torch has had a terrible life, and I warned him many times that it might get worse. He doesn't seem to care at all, happily walking into my house and sitting down on my couch. I proceed to tell him about the new adventure we are going to embark on.

Serafina finally comes to my house, she has brought everything we need, water, turbans, guns, and last but not least a map of the Equestrian Desert. Serafina packs the stuff we need into bags, while I carefully look over the map.

Torch is looking at guns when he tells me “Phoenix, i’ve.......i’ve never shot a gun before.”

I’m not surprised, how would an orphan know how to shoot a gun. I tell him “Torch we only carry guns to protect ourselves from other ponies or creatures we encounter, we probably won’t need to use them.” He looks at me with an understanding face, but still says nothing.

I study the map, and it’s confusing a bunch of trails crossing into each other, but i noticed one small mistake, its in the left hand corner of the map, its torn.....

I think i just found the location of the Village!

Comments

[Lonepone]

This is brilliant! You have a slight problem with run on sentences, but they're actually not that bad. That's the only thing wrong, other then a few uncapatalized I. I love your writing style. I knew it was a good idea to encourage you to write.

[TheTenthDoctor10]

Thank you for helping me out with getting back into writing,i will work on the run on sentences in my next chapters.

[firestripe]

This story feels rushed...ALOT

[Bad_Seed_72]

Pony adventurer Phoenix dreamed of becoming a Treasure Hunter since he was a filly,

A young stallion (the equivalent of a boy or a teenager) is a colt, not a filly.

[TheTenthDoctor10]

Thank you everybody for watching out for mistakes. I will revise my work and thanks you again