Every year ponies display their sexual prowess by competing in the Ponymon league. This year, Dash aims to train her own pony and win the championship. Arriving to Twilight’s library late, there is only one ponymon left for her to choose. . .
*Me going into this* What the fuck am I doing with my life? Again.
... Right, winning. *Shrugs* *Reads* I'm going to hell for enjoying this. But I'll go laughing because this is darkly fucking hilarious. (No pun intended.)
*laughs at the beginning* *rolls eyes at Dust* *smiles at the closeness of Dash and Scootaloo* *glares at Pinkies attempts at such a dirty blow... only to smirk at her 'dirty' punishment.... through shuddering a little* *cant wait for the next chapter*
Yeah, I do feel saggysmith was a bit disgusting, but at the same time it makes sense (even her 'shapeshifting' due to the ponymon magic). Also, giving Pinkie that "Cupcakes" 'kink'..... I'm just gonna say I was appalled by the video and glad you didn't touch on it too much and leave it at that. Something I'm really interested in though is where Luna plays in all this. Spectator? Trainer/Elite? Ponymon?
Lastly, the one 'hiccup' in this chapter that I noticed is that you didn't exactly touch on how Dash escaped that ball. You put her in a stalemate position without external (no pun intended) influence yet she suddenly manages to get out. Other than that, keep it up.
Dashie without a bondage fetish? I'll let it slide simply because this looks like so much fun, but don't fall behind in your updates! Also, I hope to see a real fight and lose Also, I'd be willing to do grammer edits, but only those. I never touch another writers narrative flow.
Scootaloo wiped a tear away. “I failed you, Dashie, I failed my master. I love you so much and I nearly let that mean Dust capture you. I. . .” Scootaloo looked up at her. "I couldn’t make Cloud Kicker cum faster enough.”
I LOVE SAGGY GRANNY. I was laughing so damn hard at that of the sickest most fucked up things I've ever read I loved that so much.
and yeah i read all the commercials and i failed the who's this ponymon >.< I guessed scoots. oh and ya know those numbers no longer work they won't let me order the emo balls. I soooooo need those right now.
"Applejack smiled as Saggy’s eyes glowed and she used her Ponymon magic to turn into a large blob of sagging flesh. It literally devoured Lyra hole" should be "whole"
"From the unicorns horn shot a blob of latex, hitting Saggy without her even trying to dodge. The many loose folds of her skin and her large breasts—which were dragging on the ground—we tucked in." should be "were tucked in" PS I like applejack's honour
Scootamoves
what if I play porno jazz and pokemon battle music
*Me going into this*
What the fuck am I doing with my life? Again.
... Right, winning.
*Shrugs*
*Reads*
I'm going to hell for enjoying this. But I'll go laughing because this is darkly fucking hilarious. (No pun intended.)
I'm loving the little interludes you place smack dab in the middle of these chapters.
They don't take from the flow and are just AWESOME.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Okay...Saggy Smith was disgusting. Not entirely sure I want to see where this is going to go anymore...
.....y does shy have a dragon?....
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why why why why why why why why why why why why why
Everything was going good....then granny smith happened...now i just dont even anymore.
Also i love the little breaks you do.
i see you used ny idea of how the brainwashing works...
I think my favorite part was actually the author's notes.
also where'd you find those bitchin' pokeball pictures?
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Why do I enjoy reading this? Oh well, keep it up!....See what I did there!
great story so far. if your looking for editors id be happy to help
*laughs at the beginning*
*rolls eyes at Dust*
*smiles at the closeness of Dash and Scootaloo*
*glares at Pinkies attempts at such a dirty blow... only to smirk at her 'dirty' punishment.... through shuddering a little*
*cant wait for the next chapter*
Yeah, I do feel saggysmith was a bit disgusting, but at the same time it makes sense (even her 'shapeshifting' due to the ponymon magic). Also, giving Pinkie that "Cupcakes" 'kink'..... I'm just gonna say I was appalled by the video and glad you didn't touch on it too much and leave it at that. Something I'm really interested in though is where Luna plays in all this. Spectator? Trainer/Elite? Ponymon?
Lastly, the one 'hiccup' in this chapter that I noticed is that you didn't exactly touch on how Dash escaped that ball. You put her in a stalemate position without external (no pun intended) influence yet she suddenly manages to get out. Other than that, keep it up.
Oh, and I saw what you did there with scoots ponymon type. Funny, but personally I would have done something different. To each their own though.
What. The actual. Fucking. Hell.
Wat is this I don't even
*ragequits existence*
Stupid stupid stupid stupid stu- like...
Another good Chapter - I didn't know you knew anything about "Mature" Porn i mean Granny Smith.... ewww
Typo's only i could see - Gummy chewing on the knots. Dash pulled the alligator off, and then untied the notes.
CB
What the everfree am I doing with my life?
Is it bad that the only reason I'm still reading this is because of the sheer audacity of it?
i saw only one and it was aligator instead of alligator
Dashie without a bondage fetish?
I'll let it slide simply because this looks like so much fun, but don't fall behind in your updates! Also, I hope to see a real fight and lose
Also, I'd be willing to do grammer edits, but only those. I never touch another writers narrative flow.
I didn't skip the commercials, because I am a somewhat cool kid.
I need to rethink my life, Kaidan...
Sorry
I'll let someone else find the other one
I LOVE SAGGY GRANNY. I was laughing so damn hard at that of the sickest most fucked up things I've ever read I loved that so much.
and yeah i read all the commercials and i failed the who's this ponymon >.< I guessed scoots. oh and ya know those numbers no longer work they won't let me order the emo balls. I soooooo need those right now.
I do believe we require more of this story...
srsly? Y U DO DIS
YES
Her special talent is living in a pony ball and getting laid.
"Applejack smiled as Saggy’s eyes glowed and she used her Ponymon magic to turn into a large blob of sagging flesh. It literally devoured Lyra hole"
should be "whole"
"From the unicorns horn shot a blob of latex, hitting Saggy without her even trying to dodge. The many loose folds of her skin and her large breasts—which were dragging on the ground—we tucked in."
should be "were tucked in"
PS I like applejack's honour
Holy Crap old ponies got moves!
Looks like the ponymon background music has been taken down.
Here is an alternative.
--Sollace
Bread, eggs, breaded eggs.
OH so much quality clop....