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Seriously man! What happened to the Alt. Universe tag!? How can you not know that this is a bad idea!? New Alicorn? RLKMASKFNIEFNI:LNESIOFRNEI:UORNJ :IUOENJRAI:OEWNVOAIWDVIOWNVIULENJBFAYUKNCW! Gots to remember that Alt. Universe tag, bro.
NVM......Time for me to GTFO
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It to me is a good idea. Alternate universe? Its not. Im new to this and idk about tags and that happy stuff. I apologize. Its in the future to where Fluttershy and Twilight are older now. And think about it. If you were raised by someone for 10 years wouldn't you call them your parents and not the ones that left you for dead?
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And I think you came here for porn didnt you
2770826 It's more of the physiology and all that comes with being an alicorn! How big was he when she found him? Did the princesses intervene early on as he grew? Where did the 2000 years ago come from? It's really confusing! Why would she hide something so important? and yes there is a grueling lack of porn.
All joking aside, it's an alicorn and I don't think that ponies leave those lying around. It would also help if you described what our hero looks like. Or describe a bunch of other things as well.
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Well i suck a writing :P
And well if its porn ya want. Ive wrote stuff on Overwhelminglight s account before thats clop. Ill try to make some things clearer later on.
2770860 Take your time and just read it again, it might be confusing because you could of read it too quickly. Don't judge a book by its cover, give the story some time.
Please.
2770894 You're telling moi to read an alicronzszs oC fic rite now? You get le slap
2770900 I was just stating, it is early in the story. Don't hate until you know everything about it.
Listen Hasbro added new Alicorns. Everyone hated. You get time to learn about them and BAM you like them cause you understand them.
Ok, the whole story make no sense.
First, the pacing is off, lots of things happen too fast. Seriously, the MC got kidnapped, and three lines later Fluttershy and Twilight found him and knock Chrysalis down, just like this. Where are the others changeling or where exactly the castle is to be found so fast and easily ?
Second, the characters act OoC. Watch the show, none of the characters you're using act like you're writing them at all.
Last " Dark Monarch "
I don't think you can have a name more unponylike and cliché than this.
2770916 But early on is possibly the most important thing that stories have to take account of. How do YOU expect people to react to the alicorn cover art? To the odd dialogue and the unrealistic reactions of the main cast of characters? To the lack of detail? We can help y'all improve, but you can't honestly expect us to stay and wait for those improvements to kick in! Do you see my most pop story? Do you know how hard those 9,000 words were for me? They were a pain in the ass, but I kept at it and so far I've gotten decent results. It's all about looking for improvement, not likes and praise.
>> I can understand. I really can.
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I know... I rush a lot of things v.v
Hi guys. XD -Ashley.
It's not a bad story. A pace will come eventually, relax. And the tags made me laugh really hard. After you develop the story, depending at which age you really want to focus on, this can be prologue . But.. Why would you make a baby alicorn have sex? I recommend letting some "aging" happen...
Anyways with what you have so far isn't too bad. It's easy for me to understand even though I'm not a huge brony. :3
2771014 It's k. He's/She's hard on everyone.
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um well of course they are gonna age. no filly pornography here! (hides pictures of r 34 cmc)
2770934 si0.twimg.com/profile_images/1242583612/meanie_super.jpg
2771096 rule 34 is scary. But uhhh... I like the fact I can draw. Enough said
Hopefully did a lot better with this chapter.
You did :)
It's nice seeing some romance, and that you used the last chapter as a memory of the past. I had to sit and laugh for a moment when I read the word "erect." I'm just perverted. Anyways, it's looking good :D
2776036 Herp-A-Derp
So far im loving the story. Keep up the good work!
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Thanks /)
yay!, another awsome chapter. i cant wait to read more! ~Moon Shine
...So sad....
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Wanna hug?
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Nah. I have pretzels instead.
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(\
You sure? hugs be free
/)
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you know you want too!
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...Boot to the head.
(Search, "Boot to the Head" on YouTube and click the first video to see. I am on a mobile device, and FiMfiction doesn't like mobile YouTube.)
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Phoenix Wright video?
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Yep.
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Well played.
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I would do an Elvis Presley video, but I can't because FiMFiction doesn't like mobile YouTube....
So, thank you, thank you very much.
...What the b*** just happened? You are going to explain that, right?
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Sure will
At this rate, you are going to have more comments than viewers.
But its okay because I love this stowy.
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tis fine. almost have 69 :3
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Good. That just made no sense there. Or, in another word, it was supercalifragilisticexpialidocious.
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It will make sense soon to everypony
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Sorry for not putting out a chapter in a while.
Ive been thinking of all the ways to go with the story.
But ive been too busy to write.
But no worry. Ill get one out tomorrow or soon.
Big mcthankies, from mcspankies
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Yay got one out.
Pictures are comming soon for the fanfic to help you to see some of the charactors and other fun stuff.
meh. found a few grammar errors
but thats what ya get when it 3a.m
All of a sudden It's the Last of Us...
Unexpected
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sort of. I kind of wanted to make a Last of Us MLP cross over. But at the same time make it another story.