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Poniebro2013


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Lyra wants to buy a book for her dad for his library for the upcoming fathers day, so she goes to Twilight for assistance. When Lyra starts to visit her dads library to check which books he has, she realizes that he has every book that Twilight does, so Twilight orders a shipment of books. When the shipment doesn't arrive, Lyra goes to investigate and realizes that she can't trust everyone she meets...

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I thumbs down when I read the first freaking paragraph! I mean, I can't even explain what was wrong with the whole thing! Grammer, and a whole bunch of things that writers need to know before writing a simple story!:facehoof:

2714049Thanks for the critcizm, dude. It was my first story, so cut me some slack.

2714049 but i guess i should have tealized all the grammar mistakes. Oops

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