Hi I'm Derpy but carrot top likes to call me by my real Ditsy. I would always start my day off by brushing my teeth like the tooth doctor said, then id take a stroll through town sometimes with dinky my little muffin... oh ah? sorry let me get back on topic! Right now... uh? i forgot what i was gonna put! just great and the author said if i posted more then 50- words? i-i did it! im going to get a muffin!
Hi derpy!
Wait how did u get im my text?!
Just did! Well i needed to remind u about the chapters u were in this so long i was worried!
No need to worry! I got it covered!
Chapters (3)
Ok, you definitely have an interesting twist on this, I'm going to use a format of review that one of my groups uses.
! I noticed a few spelling mistakes but it was more that you got the wrong form of the word as opposed to you just misspelling it. You need a little bit of work on your paragraphing, I would think that every time you change colors, make a new paragraph. And if the end of the third chapter was supposed to be a cliffhanger... You need to work more on the buildup 
. Also, make the story's long summary an actual description of what you plan for your story, not a conversation between characters. Now for the good things, I like where you're going with this, I'm not a big minecraft fan but I can see how an Endermen coming to Equestria would be entertaining/interesting. Mother daughter interactions are always fun and cute, keep it up. And finally, Lyra+hands scene= squee 
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Group: Authors Helping Authors, go check it out
Name of Story: Friendship Is Crafty
Grammar score out of 10: 4
3 Pros:
1) Unique.
2) Interesting use of colored text to tell who is speaking/thinking. Though it can be a con.
3) The speed at which you wrote the chapters is really good.
3 Cons:
1) You should point out in the intro that this is a minecraft crossover, more than just implying it with the name endermen, some may not get it.
2) Faint colors could make some text hard to read for some people.(Derpy's)
3) Colored text in general will put some people off. Though it's still a pro.
Notes Section: Very good for your first try, and it only took you 2-3 days to write it! My main suggestions would be to work on capitalizing your I's, and putting in a ton of commas where needed. Other suggestions include: keep the colored text, but make them stand out more (use darker colors). Try working more on character development, I have next to no idea who Nela is other than that she's an Endermen... I thought she was a guy till halfway through the second chapter
Enjoy your review! Please help me out by looking at my story: Puppets of Darkness
Keep up the good work! And as a fellow new writer, brohoof /)
FYI: Her name isn't "Carrot Top" it's "Golden Harvest" - period.
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It can be either, same as Derpy/Ditzy, one is just more popular
2700671 well i wanted to call her by her fan name i mean it doesn't matter if its fan or real