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The Summer Sun Fantasy

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Aggron

Aggron #1 · Jun 7th, 2013 · · ·

Good story, but I guess some don't think so. Were you so jittery that you accidentally messed up your typing while you wrote this? There were a lot of careless errors. Anyway, good job!

Lord Stratos Eclipse

Lord Stratos Eclipse #2 · Jul 11th, 2013 · · ·

I enjoyed it, a bit fast but whatever, definitely not a bad story.

Uncr3at1ve

Uncr3at1ve #3 · Jul 11th, 2013 · 1 · ·

It was pretty good, the dialogue was a little choppy and the descriptions could have been better and as a whole the story needs to be fleshed out a bit more... and since it was trying to be more romantic I'd avoid the use of the word 'pussy' while fine in strait clop it doesn't work for more romantic works and is quite jarring.

So 6/10 not bad by any means but could use some work.

Golden Scrolls

Golden Scrolls #4 · Jul 13th, 2013 · · ·

2857666 Yeeeah... This story was my first clopfic I written. Still quite new to this but at least I'll improve next time

Uncr3at1ve

Uncr3at1ve #5 · Jul 13th, 2013 · · ·

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Well, the more you do it the more you improve... Can I say that when I haven't published a single story? But I'm good with a lot of the more technical side of things so if you want me to edit sometime just send me a link. (Take that with a grain of salt as my schedule is wonky at the best of times.)

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