Woah you're almost breaking the 20.000 word mark! This chapter seemed like it would never end! (the good way) Good 'ol Kiro tossing even more drama in the story I see? When can we see more explosions and grosh ships?
Repairing relations and strange situations Fluttermac averted and relation striations We see Moon's life once again on the Mend Everypony knows this will soon end But how will this come about Anyone wanna give Purdue a shout And when will she come to be When will the other's get to see The little Filly in Mender's head The little filly, most likely dead Together forever in, or til death do them part At least Mender be hard to tear apart Beauty of life and insanity creeping Mender be having fun when he should be sleeping Linked in with Twi, she trusts at last And all his friends know of his past Yet Gear Butt will not find peace, until his sanity is no longer on lease A confrontation creeps closer to him Soon staring out in from the Dark's very rim And when it breaks, that tiny limb All will come to climax, all we will see All will be revealed, and Moon will be free.
It took 61 chapters, but Mender finally got laid! Celebration time everyone, Kiro's bringing the beers!
The best part is Mender has finally thrown all his emotional baggage out there in the open for everyone to see, so hopefully he can now get some much needed emotional healing. I just wonder what these trust exercises will be, Twilight's got some major work ahead of her if she wants everything to work. We've also finally added Twilight to the finalized version of the link, so more celebration time!
I thought it was about time I checked in again with a comment. I have to say, it took a bit of getting used to last chapter that in this so far mostly T-rated story, sex scenes suddenly pop up. You are one hell of a clop writer though! Those scenes were HOT! I'm also happy that Mender is finally throwing out his frustrations for all to see. No more bottling everything up! Let them know how it is! Let it goooooo! Let it g-.... Sorry about that... I really hope they start thinking about what Mender wants more now, but I think things are getting better.
As you might have noticed: Yet again, I loved the chapter! Keep up the great work! Read you next week! ~Baasz
another great chapter! and long too which was sweet
only thing that could of made the clop scene better was if Mender played on some romantic background music for them. he must have some in his hard drive somewhere im sure
I bet it would be pretty awkward seeing all the animals come out of the walls right after getting some. you know they have been listening the whole time.
poor Mac got friend zoned. I kinda wonder if he had a crush on Twi also which is why he loves the Smarty Pants doll soo much. Mender be crushing his heart over and over. at least he still has Cheerilee which according to Filli Vanilli episode still has a big crush on him.
4 ponies linked up, 2 to go. Rarity seems pretty reluctant but willing but AJ seems neutral to the idea. I have a feeling Rarity is going to link up when they go to see the princess and right before AJ gets peer pressured in, there's gonna be a big problem with the connections and AJ is going to save the day. then Mender an AJ will be even again
this chapter ended too good. sure there were alot of issues they just fixed but now it seems like Mender will have a lot less problems in the future. something big must be about to happen when they go to see the princess. cant wait!
oh and I forgot, MENDER IS OFFICIALLY NOT A VIRGIN ANYMORE!
3984077 My interest in Purdue has been super high since the special for Christmas. That was back when she didn't have the nickname and revealing who this new filly was was a moment of "WAIT WAIT wait... WHAT." and I felt we got our main potential spoiler that will happen. Even if she manifests, she'll likely remain unaging, but it'll be an extremely interesting event.
Though we have so much to go and there are all the side stories lined up, I'd almost want to see Kiro write out Mender's explanitory monologue here in a seperate thing. Some fics are guilty of 'explain x to y' about a previous event. It's fine when done rarely and only works if the audience knows what is being told. Pending has been great at having some explanation written out and/or having a conversation on the conveyed info afterwards. I actually more want the monologue because I'd like to hear how Mender would describe it all and the level of detail and whatnot. It is way too much to have in detail normally (especially in the already biggest chapter), but if would be interesting.
Mainly I thought this because I was curious about explaining parts like psychoMender and Purdue and the Nirru corpse thing to them. And if he mentioned older bits like the Mirror Pool or not.
... thank you... I never allowed myself a chance to experience it like this... and just throw my first time away... These kind of stories are important to me because they remained me of what I never experienced and how important and beautiful your first time actually can be. This is why I love erotica, because they do not turn me on and never has... but they are the best why to tell you pure emotions... and this story gave me hint of what I missed... so thank you... thank you from all my heart, even though you will never know how much these kinds of stories mean to me.
While twilight taking control of the herd without talking could be a breach of trust, it doesn't mean they don't trust him if it goes that way. I'm sorry, but twilight and applejack SHOULD run the finances for his business. They have a much better head for that stuff than him, and if makes him lose a little pride, well guess what, that's what needs to be done. Just like when applejack tried to harvest the entire crop by her selves, you need to acknowledge your short comings. Twilight would make a good lead mare.
Well, some would argue Twilight already did, but I broke her hymen.
Ah, so he's either extremely rough or Fluttershy isn't actually consenting and doesn't want it, and it's not the second given the empathy link. Yeah, hymens don't actually always break the first time you have sex. I said that in the last chapter, I say it again. It's really just a nitpick.
Worse yet, Apple Bloom looked surprised as well, but then started blushing and looked away from the two of us really fast. Oh crap. She knew what that meant?!
Of course she did. Did he forget that Sweetie Belle knew about it because of school? If she knows from there, Apple Bloom knows.
Awww yeaaahhh!!!!!
Gettin' some Shy tail, cyborg style!
Yikes. Mender still has some serious subconscious rage issues. And when you're a Pony of Mass Destruction, that's scary.
Woah you're almost breaking the 20.000 word mark!
This chapter seemed like it would never end! (the good way)
Good 'ol Kiro tossing even more drama in the story I see? When can we see more explosions and grosh ships?
Mender has that paperclip thing from Windows in his OS. I laughed my ass off.
Makes me wonder, can Mender get a "Blue Screen of Death" of sorts? That would be terrifyingly hilarious.
Haha, mender has acquired a flutterhugger! I swear, all she did this chapter was hug him to death, seems things are on the up for a bit now though
Repairing relations and strange situations
Fluttermac averted and relation striations
We see Moon's life once again on the Mend
Everypony knows this will soon end
But how will this come about
Anyone wanna give Purdue a shout
And when will she come to be
When will the other's get to see
The little Filly in Mender's head
The little filly, most likely dead
Together forever in, or til death do them part
At least Mender be hard to tear apart
Beauty of life and insanity creeping
Mender be having fun when he should be sleeping
Linked in with Twi, she trusts at last
And all his friends know of his past
Yet Gear Butt will not find peace,
until his sanity is no longer on lease
A confrontation creeps closer to him
Soon staring out in from the Dark's very rim
And when it breaks, that tiny limb
All will come to climax, all we will see
All will be revealed, and Moon will be free.
~Black Sun Eclipse
It took 61 chapters, but Mender finally got laid! Celebration time everyone, Kiro's bringing the beers!
The best part is Mender has finally thrown all his emotional baggage out there in the open for everyone to see, so hopefully he can now get some much needed emotional healing. I just wonder what these trust exercises will be, Twilight's got some major work ahead of her if she wants everything to work. We've also finally added Twilight to the finalized version of the link, so more celebration time!
That love scene was wonderful. Well done.
~Have a good one.
I thought it was about time I checked in again with a comment.
I have to say, it took a bit of getting used to last chapter that in this so far mostly T-rated story, sex scenes suddenly pop up. You are one hell of a clop writer though! Those scenes were HOT!
I'm also happy that Mender is finally throwing out his frustrations for all to see. No more bottling everything up! Let them know how it is! Let it goooooo! Let it g-.... Sorry about that... I really hope they start thinking about what Mender wants more now, but I think things are getting better.
As you might have noticed: Yet again, I loved the chapter! Keep up the great work!
Read you next week!
~Baasz
another great chapter! and long too which was sweet
only thing that could of made the clop scene better was if Mender played on some romantic background music for them. he must have some in his hard drive somewhere im sure
I bet it would be pretty awkward seeing all the animals come out of the walls right after getting some. you know they have been listening the whole time.
poor Mac got friend zoned. I kinda wonder if he had a crush on Twi also which is why he loves the Smarty Pants doll soo much. Mender be crushing his heart over and over. at least he still has Cheerilee which according to Filli Vanilli episode still has a big crush on him.
4 ponies linked up, 2 to go. Rarity seems pretty reluctant but willing but AJ seems neutral to the idea. I have a feeling Rarity is going to link up when they go to see the princess and right before AJ gets peer pressured in, there's gonna be a big problem with the connections and AJ is going to save the day. then Mender an AJ will be even again
this chapter ended too good. sure there were alot of issues they just fixed but now it seems like Mender will have a lot less problems in the future. something big must be about to happen when they go to see the princess. cant wait!
oh and I forgot, MENDER IS OFFICIALLY NOT A VIRGIN ANYMORE!
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Never knew you could fit so much clop and cuteness in one chapter.
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My interest in Purdue has been super high since the special for Christmas. That was back when she didn't have the nickname and revealing who this new filly was was a moment of "WAIT WAIT wait... WHAT." and I felt we got our main potential spoiler that will happen. Even if she manifests, she'll likely remain unaging, but it'll be an extremely interesting event.
Though we have so much to go and there are all the side stories lined up, I'd almost want to see Kiro write out Mender's explanitory monologue here in a seperate thing. Some fics are guilty of 'explain x to y' about a previous event. It's fine when done rarely and only works if the audience knows what is being told. Pending has been great at having some explanation written out and/or having a conversation on the conveyed info afterwards. I actually more want the monologue because I'd like to hear how Mender would describe it all and the level of detail and whatnot. It is way too much to have in detail normally (especially in the already biggest chapter), but if would be interesting.
Mainly I thought this because I was curious about explaining parts like psychoMender and Purdue and the Nirru corpse thing to them. And if he mentioned older bits like the Mirror Pool or not.
... thank you... I never allowed myself a chance to experience it like this... and just throw my first time away... These kind of stories are important to me because they remained me of what I never experienced and how important and beautiful your first time actually can be. This is why I love erotica, because they do not turn me on and never has... but they are the best why to tell you pure emotions... and this story gave me hint of what I missed... so thank you... thank you from all my heart, even though you will never know how much these kinds of stories mean to me.
While twilight taking control of the herd without talking could be a breach of trust, it doesn't mean they don't trust him if it goes that way. I'm sorry, but twilight and applejack SHOULD run the finances for his business. They have a much better head for that stuff than him, and if makes him lose a little pride, well guess what, that's what needs to be done. Just like when applejack tried to harvest the entire crop by her selves, you need to acknowledge your short comings. Twilight would make a good lead mare.
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Excellent.
Waiting anxiously for Twilight's chapter...
Sadly I don't think it will come out any time soon
The Microsoft Paperclip lives....
Ah, so he's either extremely rough or Fluttershy isn't actually consenting and doesn't want it, and it's not the second given the empathy link. Yeah, hymens don't actually always break the first time you have sex. I said that in the last chapter, I say it again. It's really just a nitpick.
Of course she did. Did he forget that Sweetie Belle knew about it because of school? If she knows from there, Apple Bloom knows.