just added chapter 3 (probably the end.)

Good story. If any new chapters are posted, expect me to come running!

440894no no no no no no not the end please not the end

>>brony_power well i guess i can add more, but im pretty much out of ideas.

>>Sothile yeah a friend of mine told me it would be sorta funny to make people think they were already having sex, but just tricked them into doing something else

Formatting issues are my biggest concern. The dialogue of different characters should never-ever-ever-ever-ever be in the same paragraph. New character speaking always equals starting a new paragraph. There should also be a blank line between each paragraph, with the ultimate effect being that it looks something like this:

"Blah blah blah, blah blah? BLAH!" Character One shouted.
[blank line between paragraphs]
"BLAH BLAH. BLABBLE BLABBLE BLABBLE," Character Two replied.

Other than that, I have no idea if anything's missing, because I won't read a story unless it's formatted correctly.

MOAR!!!!!!!! NOW!!!!

end it here, and i will kill you... (jk... but seriously, dont end it...)

943373 well like I said before, I dont know how to keep this going after what I already wrote... I guess I'll try.

well just keep it open, but don't stress about it would be what I said, if you ever get inspiration get back on it on the double.