When a new filly who calls herself Rarity is in town, Fluttershy tries to be friends with her when she can't fit in with the other ponies.
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I'm sure they are! But don't worry, things will be better by next chapter! (Or at least that's what I have plotted."
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I'll make sure to. She sure is. Next to Fluttershy.
This is quite a promising story. You have a writing style which provokes interest, few typos/errors, and the way you threw in a dash of humour with the name confusion at the end shows a good understanding of both the characters at hand and your audience. I give this an 8/10.
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Thank you so much! I really appreciate it. I tried hard with this and I'm proud with the outcome. It makes me even happier to see others enjoy it, too! Again, thank you so much.
New pony in Ponyville who isn't Twilight Sparkle? I think I'll be keeping an eye on this one... ^^
There are a few minor errors in here, but nothing mindblowing. I would gladly quote them and all that, but I am on a phone right now, so... Just be cautious not to capitalize the "he/she said" parts when they are following the quote, although it seems you know that already, so perhaps it was just a slip.
Anyway, I'm liking this, so I'll just be tracking this now. ;)
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Oi! Thank you. I know there's a few grammatical errors I would love to clean up, but, frankly, it's quite hard hence I do this on my phone. Thanks for reading! I really didn't expect to get as much feedback as I did on this.
Thanks for following it! Woooo.
Huh...honestly not to bad, be sure to separate when others are speaking, other then that very enjoyable though it's Roseluck, Rose could be a sort of nickname, you done well, I like it, hoping to see more
It's not bad, for the most part. However, it wanders around a little and Fluttershy doesn't exactly act like Fluttershy.
2532676 yeah, she doesn't. I noticed that after rereading it and I'm going to fix that in the next update. Thanks for the feedback, anyway. It is very appreciated.
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Thanks for the feedback! I am working on the chapter and made sure to separate the talking characters.
2534011 Never a problem, that's good to hear and I'm glad
you're taking advice to heart
Hmm, I'm liking what I'm seeing here. Interesting to see Rainbow finding a book about flying.
Anyhoo, carry on!
2534686 Always! Advice is great! I'm always looking forward to bump up my skills!
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Yeah, I really don't know why I chose to put her in the library. I needed her to cause unneeded destruction somewhere, and that seemed like a good place.
I will indeed!