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Discord could roam the castle of Canterlot to his heart(if he had one, of course)'s content, but instead he chose to stay secluded in his chambers whenever possible. Why? Because he was experimenting. Experimenting with possibilities that up until that moment had never even been considered. At first he had been desperate for revenge against the elements who had trapped him in stone, but when he was released he encountered a devious mind even more clever than his own. He introduced his plan to her, and she gladly accepted.

His experiments still had everything to do with revenge, but in an evil and twisted way that would enslave the elements to his will. All but the one who had assisted him. So he need a replacement, and chose a pegasus with powers beyond her own knowledge, powers that could rival even the great Princess Celestia. Discord had finally perfected his dark magic. Dark magic to create Dark Ponies.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 10 )

Hm. Interesting concept, I must say.

In the first chapter, Fluttershy doesn't seem to care about her friends. But in this chapter, she does care and it's slightly confusing. Also, there are a lot of spelling mistakes. If you can't get an editor, then at least give it a once-over when you're done.

2661704 I love your profile pic. Mistakes are forever, although that thing that looks like Rarity should've never existed.

2661871 Agree completely.

It's a good start, but what paintsplatter said is true. She seems to change emotions a lot. Fix that, the grammar, make this alternate universe (Fluttershy's not evil in canon), call it Debbie and you're good. Liked and faved! :pinkiesmile:

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Yeah what i'm trying to say is that Fluttershy has a serious case of a split personality, she is naturally a shy and loving pony, but she hates that. So, she tries to force herself to be tougher, and sometimes she is, but when it comes to her friends it is hard for her to convince even herself they aren't her weakness. Just wait, it'll play out eventually;)

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Took me a second to figure out what you meant, but yes I did. If I ever get around to finishing this story then you'll find out why.

Wait what!?! :pinkiegasp: she is going to kill her freinds!?!?! This is awesome so far. I love it. And wow flutters is evil! Thats new.

I think this should be a tragedy becaus those are awesome. I cant wait for more.

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