Mask Q. Rae, a pegasus from Mareami who had high hopes and dreams after finally opening a small mask shop. Once she finally saved enough and had her name spread in whispers around Equestria, she finally moved to Canterlot in hopes of making it big. She quickly became a successful entrepreneur as the high-status ponies adored her ravishing creations and demanded more and more of her. When the ideas of galas in themes of masquerades spun, other mask-makers began popping up all around Canterlot. Mask needed to find a way to keep herself in business... even if it meant ripping apart the competition... literally.
((Critiques requested. Constructive criticism adored))
I suggest you change the description into a description and not a small snippit of what will happen.
Summerize the character, their motivation, what they're planning to do.
Aside from that it sounds like an interesting start.
I can't even
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Does that mean it's no good...?
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Thank you so much for the suggestion. I'll hop straight to it! I'm not so used to the styles used here.
2310463 No. just needs editing.