You are suddenly summoned to the wonderful world of equestria to take part in a study about humans. But will your fate be sealed within Equestria forever when Vinyl Scratch, your favorite pony, becomes "interested" in you?
All this talk of "purity" sounds really strange, and even a little insulting to most of humanity. Besides, there's war in Equestria as well- the last time Canterlot was invaded is only a few years back at most. No, I think the "purity", in this case, refers to the ties that bind a particular human to his or her home.
Think about it: If the Princesses brought a human to Equestria who wants to come at first, but soon grows homesick... that sort of misery could surely be called "impurity", no?
well... that was a strange story. good but strange.
as someone commented the "purity" was over used and could have been avoided ... "you have been chosen... now deal with it" not "because of you "purity" "
but i it is a good story, so far i do wait for the next chapter to see how it develops so as far as i go now worth reading and waiting to read more.
Thanks for the feedback guys :3 I can't say much about the whole "purity" thing yet, and I admit at second glance it does appear a bit cliche. I suppose all I can say for now is that a child molester or a thief or just a hateful person in general would lack the prerequisite to be able to enter Equestria. This would prevent Luna from accidentally picking the next serial killer or what not by her subjective judgement. Buuuut the definition of "purity", at least as far as this story is concerned, has a more complex meaning than that, which will be explained in detail later. For now, its not something to get bogged down about
3198200 That would be an awesome concept and I commend you for using your noggin But no, the definition, at least as it's explained now, deals more with morals than anything else. But as I commented earlier, the definition, as far as this story goes, is more complex than that. So don't get all bogged down and confused by the terminology, for now just take the word to mean what it says- being a moral and good person alltogether.
Do you have anyone pre-reading and editing your chapters before you relase them? It makes a world of a difference, trust me. Oh, and I'm likeing this fic.
I like this already. you know how to keep things detailed without blabbering on and on. barely a couple chapters in and, I love this already. you haven't even introduced Vinyl yet. you've got my full support.
Twilight eyes down at your body. If you didn't know any better, you'd think she had a bit of seduction in her eye.
... I know that Equestria is the land of happiness and acceptance and they know what humans are and all ,but really? Not even 10 minutes and Twilight's already got a lady boner for 'me'? Progressing a bit too fast for my taste but besides that and some minor grammatical errors, this is pretty good so far.
I SEE DISCRIMINATION, i have no abs 0-0. And plus i just turned 18 and ain't even in college yet :/. This is not accurate!! ((Jk, i know that it ain't gonna be me :P)) but still when do i get abs ^_^
4165485 The doctor doesn't travel through different dimensions all the time. Only in like five episodes,that is including the old episodes, dose he's ever travel to different dimensions. It's not also including the specials with the doctor meets the doctor, but still my pont is there. It is really rare for him to do such a thing.
only thing id of done different would be to ask if I could bring some of my stuff with me such as laptop with solar power charger, some books, game boy gen1(1987 f.t.w. baby!) more books, towel(never know when you need one) the rest of my books(216 of them) oh and some dvds (zombie films yay)maybe something to read but that's just me. (maybe that's asking to take to much I'll just put the towel back)
When it comes to Anonymous and second-person stories, the person is always a guy names "Steve". Probably because I don`t want to have sex with ponies, (Oh my god, a brony who doesn`t want to have sex with a pony, what a shock?!).
I know this is a bit irrelevant to this story but something that's always bugged me about Human in Equestria (or any non-pony in Equestria such as some crossovers) is the requirement of not hurting anyone. Maybe it's my criminal law class yelling at me because of the justification defense but my first response to all the "don't hurt anyone" requirements is: "what about self-defense?" Eh, it would be interesting if you actually respond to this comment over 40 weeks after this chapter actually came out :P
It wasn't like you to be scared, but that loud "pop" certainly came from this direction.
"So which do you think he'll chose?"
"It's difficult to tell for sure." Cadence retorted. Her eyes stared at the ground, deep in thought. "His heart and his intentions are both pure, that much is certain. But..."
Keep up the good work!
3194921 Thanks a bunch!
When's the next update?
when is the next update? i cant waitt!!!!!!
Working on the next update now, I'm in college so free time for me isn't abundant But don't worry, I'll have it done as soon as possible!
You know what I think?
All this talk of "purity" sounds really strange, and even a little insulting to most of humanity. Besides, there's war in Equestria as well- the last time Canterlot was invaded is only a few years back at most.
No, I think the "purity", in this case, refers to the ties that bind a particular human to his or her home.
Think about it: If the Princesses brought a human to Equestria who wants to come at first, but soon grows homesick... that sort of misery could surely be called "impurity", no?
well... that was a strange story. good but strange.
as someone commented the "purity" was over used and could have been avoided ... "you have been chosen... now deal with it" not "because of you "purity" "
but i it is a good story, so far i do wait for the next chapter to see how it develops so as far as i go now worth reading and waiting to read more.
Thanks for the feedback guys :3 I can't say much about the whole "purity" thing yet, and I admit at second glance it does appear a bit cliche. I suppose all I can say for now is that a child molester or a thief or just a hateful person in general would lack the prerequisite to be able to enter Equestria. This would prevent Luna from accidentally picking the next serial killer or what not by her subjective judgement. Buuuut the definition of "purity", at least as far as this story is concerned, has a more complex meaning than that, which will be explained in detail later. For now, its not something to get bogged down about
3198200 That would be an awesome concept and I commend you for using your noggin But no, the definition, at least as it's explained now, deals more with morals than anything else. But as I commented earlier, the definition, as far as this story goes, is more complex than that. So don't get all bogged down and confused by the terminology, for now just take the word to mean what it says- being a moral and good person alltogether.
MOAR!!!!
Almost done with chapter 2
That was amazing i will definitely follow this story.
They should've asked me for a smoother spell I am superior after all
Dun dun daaa.
Do you have anyone pre-reading and editing your chapters before you relase them? It makes a world of a difference, trust me. Oh, and I'm likeing this fic.
I like this already. you know how to keep things detailed without blabbering on and on. barely a couple chapters in and, I love this already. you haven't even introduced Vinyl yet. you've got my full support.
Oh never mind, characters probably built like Arnold Schwarzenegger so he's not much like me XD
Okay. Um. Liking it. Really I am. But one little, teeny, tiny, itty, bitty, teensy, weensy thing. Why are so many HiEs' named Alex?
It just....bugs me.
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Hur fucking dur... He just said your name faggot!
3605960 I don't mind my name is Alexander
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I know that Equestria is the land of happiness and acceptance and they know what humans are and all ,but really?
Not even 10 minutes and Twilight's already got a lady boner for 'me'?
Progressing a bit too fast for my taste but besides that and some minor grammatical errors, this is pretty good so far.
dude, is this supposed to be 2nd person or an oc? intriguing story though
3783204 My name is Alexander its too great of a coincidence
Really good
I SEE DISCRIMINATION, i have no abs 0-0. And plus i just turned 18 and ain't even in college yet :/. This is not accurate!! ((Jk, i know that it ain't gonna be me :P)) but still when do i get abs ^_^
Traveling to different dimensions is not that exciting the doctor does it all the time
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Love the story man, good work
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The doctor doesn't travel through different dimensions all the time. Only in like five episodes,that is including the old episodes, dose he's ever travel to different dimensions. It's not also including the specials with the doctor meets the doctor, but still my pont is there. It is really rare for him to do such a thing.
only thing id of done different would be to ask if I could bring some of my stuff with me such as laptop with solar power charger, some books, game boy gen1(1987 f.t.w. baby!) more books, towel(never know when you need one) the rest of my books(216 of them) oh and some dvds (zombie films yay)maybe something to read but that's just me. (maybe that's asking to take to much I'll just put the towel back)
3798625 so is my brother. His name is Alex lol
When it comes to Anonymous and second-person stories, the person is always a guy names "Steve". Probably because I don`t want to have sex with ponies, (Oh my god, a brony who doesn`t want to have sex with a pony, what a shock?!).
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Most of us don't, dude. Most of us don't...
I know this is a bit irrelevant to this story but something that's always bugged me about Human in Equestria (or any non-pony in Equestria such as some crossovers) is the requirement of not hurting anyone. Maybe it's my criminal law class yelling at me because of the justification defense but my first response to all the "don't hurt anyone" requirements is: "what about self-defense?" Eh, it would be interesting if you actually respond to this comment over 40 weeks after this chapter actually came out :P
4732512 you know what in the game i am making off this story i'm going to add something related to that question just for the fuck of it
4330991 Take the towel... You need it more then anything else
4985663 but of course! Towels are by far the most useful tools in the universe!
Twilight, not twilight.
Well that explains why Cadence is there.
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