(Based on my own headcanon and the mini series 'Just Keep Smiling', written for 30minuteponies) Fluttershy never had many friends...she was always just too shy, and not used to being in big places.
But when bullies continued to harass her, Rainbow Dash came to her rescue...it was almost like love at first sight for the friendless girl. But, how long can that childhood love last when cracks begin to form? (Trigger Warning: Hint of a forced kiss/intimate contact, no rape)
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2109642 o_o Is that a good thing??
2109715 *gives you an inhaler and performs CPR* ;o; BREATHE!
2109767 *PERFORMS TRIBAL RITUAL OF LIFE!!!*
2109820 ....HOW DID I EVEN DO THAT!? LookoutTwilightandCadence.
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I dunno, alicorn Dashie is pretty cute.
2109838 ...Oh my god, she kind of is.
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Um...can I pet her?
2109860 Is it just me, or is none of these comments about the story.
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The story is good, however somethings can be avoided. There are two exclamation marks in a sentence, when you should only use one. (My monitor is bugging out now.) There is the -end- which doesn't need to be there. For example in most story, they usually have stuff like:
and done. No -end-
Other than that, I found it to be quite enjoyable. I will be waiting for more.
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There is more, right? (I know there will not be a series. But when I saw this, I had to.)
2110040 ;u; Oh my goodness, thank you so much for an actual review.
Yes, of course there is more! The relationship between Gilda and Fluttershy is something I always like to explore, since my headcanon for it is rather....dark. So don't worry, there will be a lot more where that came from!!
Wow I like it
this...is...adorable...
I had to be sneaky
sneaky Charlie, sneaky...
Laughing, for one. You own the story, second. Hints of abuse and sexual assault, then state that there is. I would get rid of the first one.
Sorry for the delay, things happened. Got sick, etc. But boy o' boy, am I glad at what I see here. You capture Fluttershy's personality, Gilda's personality, and even Rainbow's personality. Props to you.
As for mistakes in grammar and spelling, I wasn't paying attention, I was focused on the story. However, mind I say, I didn't catch obvious ones.
I will be watching your activity and see how you do on other Genres. See you later.
2135362 ;///w///; I know I own the story, I just got so tired of repeating my long disclaimer (I get yelled at a lot otherwise) that I went a little lazy~ But I'm glad you enjoyed the content!!! I was worried if I had gotten Gilda's and Rainbow's personality down, since I'm the exact opposite of those two. You're so sweet though for reviewing again and making my day, thank you.
2135907 Welcome, I am mostly a editor/reviewer. My stories stick.
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And I am always happy to help someone. In fact I was a editor and now that persons famous. I don't speak with him anymore though. But yeah, I will always be able to help.
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2141454 :) Oh wow, that's so cool! I know a few famous people, one of them is a fanfiction writer and is probably one of the best I've seen! Oh gosh, your straight-forward reviews always cheer me up, I made a rather jackass of myself earlier this morning while trying to make friends with someone and I felt pretty awful.
2142038 Well, you could always apologize and say you were in a bad mood that day, for example.
"Hey, sorry for being a jackass earlier/the other day, I was in a bad mood. I hope you can forgive me."
(Just asking, since when did we start talking about life, not that there's a problem with that.)
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Oh gosh, that made me giggle so loudly!!! And by jackass, I meant that I joked about something and they didn't get it/gave me a curt reply over it and me go: "....and there goes my chances of friendship...^^;"
2142104 Ahh...
So... What was the joke and What Happened in the joke?
(TomSka is amazing.)
2142133 Well, I was on this blog that I tend to frequent and publish more stories and I came across another writer who wrote a story with the pairing I usually write about. I was really happy since until then, I was the ONLY one writing for them~ So, I decided to message them and compliment their writing, then joked: "Haha, I thought I was the only one who would write this pairing and just like how I envisioned it too, guess I inspired someone!" I was seriously just joking, even had a 'XD' at the end of it to let them know that I was being silly. Instead I got this: "Don't get your hopes up, I wasn't ever 'inspired' by you or your writing."
And this is why I shouldn't try to make friends.
2142160 Hey, I cant make much friends either, Jokes and puns? Nope. Talking? Anti-social. So yeah, I am not great at making friends either.
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Well, I have amazing friends (by some miracle) but I love trying to make more, being the weird person that I am. Sometimes I get it right, other times I make them look at me like I have three heads~ ^_^;