A stay in Equestria to spend quality time with her dearest friend turns awry when Gilda learns of a secret Rainbow kept from all of her friends. Even worse, a moral dilemma forces Rainbow to face a difficult decision, her only confidant in this situation being Gilda. But Gilda is determined to do whatever it takes to help Rainbow see this through, and has the ability to do so as long as she adheres to one important rule:
Don't give in.
Entry for the "A two-faced charade" contest.
Proofreaders/life savers: Midnight Quill and Setokaiva
Rated and tagged for implied suggestive situations and themes of cheating (don't try this at home, kids!).
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This seems like a good contender.
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Fixed. Good catch!
This was really good.
Appropriate that noone considered asking Applejack for advice, since Honesty is what was missing in this situation from the start. Great writing and great job of making the situation both sympathetic and completely believable.
Alright then, this is it. Good luck my friend, and may the shipping be with you!
Wow, so much drama.
This story was really deep, and got into some very difficult situations for everyone involved. While I'm a major Flutterdash shipper most of the time, I can definitively feel Gilda's plight throughout the story, as well as Rainbow's struggle with temptations vs loyalty.
Overall, a nice read that I thoroughly enjoyed.
Great story!
Good god, such a great story. Also, thank you, chaospaladin, you wrote a story with gilda. On top of that, you wrote a gilda story where she is just gilda...no humanization, or anthro, or some other third annoyance. It was just gilda. An awesome griffoness just as she is. Awesome.
I Wanted to say how much I appreciated that.
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I really appreciate that feed back, and I'm glad I hit several things spot on!
I admit, the things about Fluttershy and the ending I never caught until now. I didn't have the time or money to get commissioned art, so I went for the cover art that moreso encapsulated the side of Gilda I wanted to keep at the forefront. This review does shed light on how much I need to pay more attention to smaller details to create a stronger overall impact.
I swear, it's always the little details that get me. Every damn time XD.
I do feel like I've become a better writer overall from this experience, though I still have a lot to learn about micromanaging so many easy-to-overlook details into a more centralized, synergistic story. Though I will say writing Gilda turned out to be a very successful experiment, so I appreciate the opportunity. I look forward to any more contests that come up in the future so I can further improve my craft.
Again, I appreciate the feedback and thank you immensely for taking the time to review this fic.
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That sounds great, actually. I'll keep you in mind.
No simple answers for the kind of questions raised here. And I'm glad that you didn't try to answer all the questions. And I appreciate the way Gilda handled herself, always trying to do the right thing in spite of the temptations. It does make one think again about our favorite grumpy griffon, and what she might be capable of if given the chance. Good job!
Wow, you really did nail this. It leaves me hungering for more, which is never a bad thing. I can easily see how GildaDash could work, given the childhood friend angle. Same with Fluttershy. And it makes total sense for the concept of love to confuse best pony. Great story!
I feel sorry for Fluttershy.
I do like how Gilda and Rainbow navigated their way through things while not crossing the line.
A really intense story :)