[THIS STORY IS CANCELLED. I HAVE LEFT FIMFICTION AND WON'T COMPLETE IT HERE. PERHAPS I'LL FINISH IT ON DEVIANT ART. SORRY FOR NOT COMPELTEING IT. -TigerSwirl]
For many years the city of Cloudsdale changes and now it's going through the biggest change of all. City wide surveillance and security all thanks to a mysterious group of mysterious terrorists that attacked Cloudsdale twelve years prior and left a horrible scar on the people. One of those scarred souls is Rainbow Dash. While the street level fills with fear and corruption, Rainbow stays up high above the streets in the roof tops where there is peace and freedom. It was here in the roof tops that she and Applejack created a big courier business for those that the security calls enemies of the city. Whatever the message or parcel the client sends, it will be delivered discreetly and on time.
One day Rainbow was given a parcel from a mysterious new customer with a huge pay check. Without a second thought she delivers the parcel herself only to help in putting away an innocent woman behind bars for the disappearance of one of Equestria’s Princesses, Princess Mi Amore Cadenza. Rainbow Dash must right the wrong she caused and save the whole city from the ones that want to ruin Equestria.
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Edited by: Xhoral1865 (First few chapters) & An-Twan Star
(This story is inspired by the game: Mirror's Edge by Dice and EA games.)
(Rated Teen for language and some adult themes)
(Cover art drawn by me. Not my best but, hey it's better than nothing right?)
Is this an Appledash story?
Pretty good concept so far, even though I've never played that game.
One thing though: You might wanna use a few more pronouns instead of people's or place's actual names. That repetition does get a little tiring, eventually.
4928896 It was added to a Twidash folder and a rarijack folder.
4928912 Oh ok
Just read the first two chapters... and it's looking very good so far
makes me regret not playing the game :p
4928897 ah alright, I was told on another story that I had to do more names and such in paragraphs, I'll go less on names in future chapters then.
4928896 no sorry.
its mainly a TwiDash story with RariJack and OctaScratch on the side. Hope you like the story regardless. (I like AppleDash too. 
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4928982 I'm happy you like it so far. I haven't played the game either but it sure looks awesome. Chapter 2 will be out in the next couple of days.
You know, this seems like an interesting premise—and I adore TwiDash—but there are so many tense and syntactical errors that I just couldn't get passed the 1/4 mark of this chapter. Frankly, I'm surprised I made it through the prologue.
There are several editing groups on the site that are more than willing to help with problems like this if you ask—just go to the Groups section and you'll find at least five on the front page.
Rainbow blaze told his six year old daughter that her gunshot wound is worse than it looks... pretty sure he meant that it looks worse than it is.
Just seemed kind of odd, so i wanted to point it out.
4934239 Ah, well drat I thought I was doing better. Oh well I guess I'll look that up.
4935583 That sounded better in my head than on paper it seems.
I'll get all that fixed.
YAY I really like it and glad we got to see why AJ left I CANT WAIT FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER!!! I wonder how the girls will react when they see each other again....
4992139 Glad you like the chapter.
Chapter 3 will be out soon.
4992241 YAY ok!
I got a good kick out of that Easter Egg. Freaking loved it.
4992886 I'm thinking of adding more Fanfic Easter eggs into the story.
Now I have to pick good ones though. Hmm, what should I pick next?
Vinyl
FOR THE WIN.
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Let me be the first to congratulate you on this great new chapter and all the wonderful new options for the future you opened up. I can't wait to see where you go from here. oh, and I also want to slap AJ and hug rainbow. THE FEELS!
5045023 I'm happy you enjoy the chapter. More coming soon.
And, I caught up on that story too... damn so much drama and suspense going on :p
So many winks at other fictions.... I'm not sure about which story is related to the Treasured sweetheart.... Will have to check in your story list
5119536 It's the first TMS side story about Lyra and Bonbon. It's a one shot story so not that many TMS readers caught it or read it. Maybe it's because I didn't put up a cover art? (I need to work on that.
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I'm planning on adding more fanfics Easter eggs I the future.
well, looks like AJ has officially turned into a violent bitch. figures.
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Yeah ... This is just the beginning though, things will change.
Flash living in the sewers... Seems legit.
Can't wait to see Twilight meeting Rainbow.
5247672 I'm still (slowly) writing the next chapter. My plan is to have Twi and Dash meet up for the first time in Chapter 8 or 9 ... That's the plan anyway.
Ok just asking but I have my own oc or in this case 2 called Redsopine and shadow derivara think you could I don't know put them in a few chapters just asking coz I think it be cool to have a element that actively attacks the griffs and knows what happened 12yrs ago just asking if you want more on them please pm me
5121366 Na she's scared and trying to please the griffs so they don't hurt rarity
Self advertising much?
at least she eventually decided to take the warning seriously.
Things are about to start... I wonder what's going to happen on her experimentation site... Probably some bad stuff....Anyway, good chapter
Hmmm, who could that hooded girl be?... I'm feeling towards Sunset or one of the Dazzlings (maybe Adagio). Time will tell.
So far so good, though Twilight should be more careful when she's on her own
finally i really like these keep it up
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Unfortunately, flash was right when he said she's naive.
Hmm, I really like this story and where it is going. But without a proofreader, I also feel that the quality may suffer. I have a lot of free time and would be willing to take a look at your story. I'm pretty good with grammar and I have a few ideas that could benefit the story.
PM me if you are interested.
5859647 Nope she doesn't.
yay big macs alive thats gonna be fun when AJ meets him that will happen right?
when i read scootaloos part, i broke my phone when i clenched my hand. the only reason i'm tolerating this kind of writer to reader mental torture is that i know that every fucking griff will die. i'm particularly eager for the traitor AJ and her sick psycho little sister to die a horrible death. traitors beget betrayal.
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Oh dear. I always wondered how far I or my editor can go in writing and wow, I guess we went a little far.
oops.
AJ's no traitor, she's just .... in a hard place. I have something planned for her, Apple Bloom, and Big Mac later in the story. And I hope people will be pleased with it once it's written.
5901085 maybe it was just me, but i've been in a very similar situation to scoots', and reading that brought back some very dark memories. i'm not saying got drafted into an army. but i did get forced into some bad situations by people just like that, and i kind of lost it for a second. i guess that says just how well you guys write your story!
5901774 Oh ... I'm sorry about that.
I just wrote what I saw in my head and some of this was inspired after seeing some movies a while ago. Along with the wicked add-ons by my editor that made it more dark.
Oh and don't worry, I always give the bad guys a run for their money. And I got something in the works for Scootaloo to get payback.
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I enjoy payback. especially the bloody kind. i just hope AB get's what's coming to her. i don't care if she is forced to do what she does or not; she's taking far to much enjoyment in it. and i know you said that AJ isn't a traitor, but she really is. yeah, she's in a tough spot now, but she put herself there. 'you reap what you sow' and all that jazz. she chose to join the very organization that she knew was causing all the hardship in the city, and even mistreats people for shitty reasons, so she has no right to complain when they fuck her over.
If only I were better with history...
I so hate you... I hate Apple bloom..
Oh my god this story!
Serioously not even sure what to say about it...
5902169 Yeah that is true. And you just gave me an idea.
5904779 really? well your welcome! hope it's a good one!
Yay, time for tea and crumpets.
Question 1: You gonna make more now?
Well, all kill Gila
awsome and wat the hay both ab abd big mac are bad guys cant wait for the reuinion for all three apples
You know, you don't have to make your villans Nazis to make people hate them, it's a copy out and not very creative, but that's just a nit pick.
More suspense, keep me waiting... Lots of information so far. Seems to be piecing bits together.
Holy shit. Did Rainbow senior adopt the dazzlings and take over the underground? You had my curiosity, now you have my attention.