There are some things in life they don't warn you about, such as your wife asking to try new, rather unique things in the bedroom. But to please her, Shining would do damn near anything.
2537646 While I didn't actually try to find a name to it, it's true that I have no idea what it'd be called. Yeah, that thing does seem somewhat similar to it.
There were a couple spelling and grammar errors, nothing really bad though. Nice showing of there relationship, paired along with a bad movie. I still don't understand those romances flicks.
“I supposed,” said Aegis, not really sure if that meant that she currently had a good figure or that she needed to work on it.”
"I suppose," and drop the ending quotation mark?
“I the textbook last night to give us a head start.” She batted her eyes a bit after saying that.
I blank the textbook. I'm gonna go with blew here. Yep. I blew the textbook.
I'm half-tempted to vector up the Eros/Aegis pair, but I realized that I have no mental image of Aegis's size compared to normal mares. On par with Twilight? What about Eros? About Blue-blood's shape with wings?
2537841 Fixed. It was supposed to be Spic's butt. 2537940 Fixed. For Eros, I linked a r63 Cadance pic in the author notes a chapter or two ago that matched how I saw him. For Aegis, she'd be bigger and bulkier than the average mare. Think like Fleur, but not nearly as skinny.
Once I saw the line “Teacher's Pet? Odd name for a romance but sure, why not.”. I could have sworn it was going to be a terrible porno film. I mean seriously that line practically screams it. But I guess I'm just dirty minded.
Very sexy at the end. However, I am curious; what does the rest of the Crystal Empire, or even Equestria, think of Shining Armor living as a mare? Given no other instances, at least public instances, have occurred, I don't believe it's commonplace, but Aegis has been seen among other pony staff several times. Surely word would spread, especially after she was out and about in public several times.
"Also, he apparently gets rather lewd towards mares when inebriated. He went so far as to pinch Spic's butt.”
But... How? It shouldn't be possible to pinch with hooves, so... Wait. Wait a minute... Mother of Celestia, BluebloodBITher, didn't he?! Somepony should teach that stallion some proper, gentlemanly behavior... preferably with an iron poker.
This is no big deal, but the transition for this chapter was kind of rough. I can understand (or guess, rather) that Eros probably changed back into Cadence so that she could appear in public. It wouldn't do to show up to court genderbent, now would it? Even so, the suddenness was rather jarring. I think the chapter would have flowed more smoothly if you'd included the scene where she changes back to a mare instead of leaving the reader to fill in the lines. Just my two cents.
I liked this chapter. That movie sounded painfully awful and reminds me of some of the crap I've sat through for my wife's sake I liked Aegis and Cadance just spending time together without there being the need for sex. Not that I'm complaining about the clop mind you
2538044 Personally I'm partial to terms like nectar and honey. I know they're a bit flowery and kind of innacurate since it doesn't really taste like that but whatever *shrugs* Other options I'm a fan of is to just ignore the term specifically while still drawing attention to it, ie; 'Cadance delicately drew her tongue over the hoof, tasting Aegis' ecstasy.'
There was some other small thing somewhere, but I can't remember what it was.
The mention of blueberry wine, made me think of the rare few times I had blueberry soda. What I mean by blueberry soda, is not some stuff with artificial flavorings and blue food dye, I'm talking about the good stuff. It was a tad on the expensive side, and came in a brown glass bottle (it was made by a brewing company, so they probably figured they could use the beer bottles for their soda too), but it was really good. Mmm… I want some of that stuff now.
2538207 I do believe that was covered by a few lines in chapter 2. Something about the two of them not only being past hero's for saving them from Sombra, but the two who basically keep everything running. And therefore they "didn't really care what the two got up to in their free time"... or something like that.
Turns out, it was horn cancer. And much like finger cancer, it can't be amputated. Ponies can't be horny without horns. So they died. I feel for Aegis here, since my normal mode of movie watching, even first-time-through, is to riff it. It gets even worse if it is a bad movie or show. Gets me in trouble if I'm riffing good movies like The Avengers. And the happy ending is "the teach died. She was implied to be pretty young, so that's funny too", and Cadance calls it a happy ending.
Unless it actually was a porn, and she was talking about a "happy ending" and the scenes were just skipped in narration.
Update?
Artists? Well, okkk
*Sees update*
Buck yeaaaaah.
*Sees chapter name*
Is it. . . finally?
*Reads chapter*
BUCK YEAAAAAH! ! !
2537646
While I didn't actually try to find a name to it, it's true that I have no idea what it'd be called. Yeah, that thing does seem somewhat similar to it.
The "Chest Thingie" is properly a "peytral."
2537646
also possibly a torc, maybe
...Horn Cancer
Spic wasn't pinched, Span was.
There were a couple spelling and grammar errors, nothing really bad though. Nice showing of there relationship, paired along with a bad movie. I still don't understand those romances flicks.
Identical?
"I suppose," and drop the ending quotation mark?
I blank the textbook. I'm gonna go with blew here. Yep. I blew the textbook.
I'm half-tempted to vector up the Eros/Aegis pair, but I realized that I have no mental image of Aegis's size compared to normal mares. On par with Twilight? What about Eros? About Blue-blood's shape with wings?
Yay a update !
I give up...
Yeah, I'm pretty sure it's called a "torc". I'm not gonna bother looking it up though, that's up to you.
Scraped, not scrapped.
Desserts and choose, not deserts and chose.
Stared, not starred.
Obvious typo is obvious.
Gah. Was your editor awake? ... Actually, that was mean, but still.
2537841
Fixed. It was supposed to be Spic's butt.
2537940
Fixed. For Eros, I linked a r63 Cadance pic in the author notes a chapter or two ago that matched how I saw him. For Aegis, she'd be bigger and bulkier than the average mare. Think like Fleur, but not nearly as skinny.
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I had no idea what else to call it.
2538022 Same regal face-shape?
2538014
Currently it doesn't have an editor and yeah, I suck at catching my own mistakes at times.
2538033
Yeah.
2538023
Feminine Juices...
2538022
If you would like, I could go through it looking for little spelling mistakes.
Quick one that I remembered.
Alright.
2538075
Sure.
Once I saw the line “Teacher's Pet? Odd name for a romance but sure, why not.”. I could have sworn it was going to be a terrible porno film. I mean seriously that line practically screams it. But I guess I'm just dirty minded.
Very sexy at the end. However, I am curious; what does the rest of the Crystal Empire, or even Equestria, think of Shining Armor living as a mare? Given no other instances, at least public instances, have occurred, I don't believe it's commonplace, but Aegis has been seen among other pony staff several times. Surely word would spread, especially after she was out and about in public several times.
Wasn't Principle Prickly the name of the principle in Recess?
clop till you drop
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Eyep. I wondered who was going to get that.
It's not mine, but it seems appropriate...
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2538144
Don't worry that's where my mind went too xD
2538144
I thought that too... xD
I was expecting the film to be porn.
But... How? It shouldn't be possible to pinch with hooves, so... Wait. Wait a minute... Mother of Celestia, Blueblood BIT her, didn't he?! Somepony should teach that stallion some proper, gentlemanly behavior... preferably with an iron poker.
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Keep in mind, we're talking about MLP hooves. The type that can grab onto sticks and other small things somehow.
aww , was hoping for follow up with twi :/ .....
2539799 In later episodes they usually show them using the, er, pastern? The little knob thing behind the hoof. To hold things.
This is no big deal, but the transition for this chapter was kind of rough. I can understand (or guess, rather) that Eros probably changed back into Cadence so that she could appear in public. It wouldn't do to show up to court genderbent, now would it? Even so, the suddenness was rather jarring. I think the chapter would have flowed more smoothly if you'd included the scene where she changes back to a mare instead of leaving the reader to fill in the lines.
Just my two cents.
2539361 I was slightly disappointed it wasn't.
2539361 Ha, didn't we all?
teachers pet really lets all just admit we all thought is was porno
Horn cancer? Really!?
2537736
I call it an ornate yoke.
2539361
"Teacher's pet", what else do you expect with a title like that?
2540946 Yes I'll admit it I thought it was going be porno because the beginning reminds me a bit of a movie I watched not too long ago, that's my boy.
2540537
Well, Cadance was regular old Cadance rather than Eros in the last chapter as well. And this takes place awhile later, like a week or so.
I liked this chapter.
That movie sounded painfully awful and reminds me of some of the crap I've sat through for my wife's sake
I liked Aegis and Cadance just spending time together without there being the need for sex.
Not that I'm complaining about the clop mind you
2538044
Personally I'm partial to terms like nectar and honey.
I know they're a bit flowery and kind of innacurate since it doesn't really taste like that but whatever *shrugs*
Other options I'm a fan of is to just ignore the term specifically while still drawing attention to it, ie;
'Cadance delicately drew her tongue over the hoof, tasting Aegis' ecstasy.'
Principle Prickly? I see what you did there!
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“Are you drunk already?”
Redundancy.
There was some other small thing somewhere, but I can't remember what it was.
The mention of blueberry wine, made me think of the rare few times I had blueberry soda. What I mean by blueberry soda, is not some stuff with artificial flavorings and blue food dye, I'm talking about the good stuff. It was a tad on the expensive side, and came in a brown glass bottle (it was made by a brewing company, so they probably figured they could use the beer bottles for their soda too), but it was really good. Mmm… I want some of that stuff now.
2538207 I do believe that was covered by a few lines in chapter 2. Something about the two of them not only being past hero's for saving them from Sombra, but the two who basically keep everything running. And therefore they "didn't really care what the two got up to in their free time"... or something like that.
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....i cant help but read this in that voice
Excuuuuuuuuuse me, Princess!
Turns out, it was horn cancer. And much like finger cancer, it can't be amputated. Ponies can't be horny without horns. So they died. I feel for Aegis here, since my normal mode of movie watching, even first-time-through, is to riff it. It gets even worse if it is a bad movie or show. Gets me in trouble if I'm riffing good movies like The Avengers. And the happy ending is "the teach died. She was implied to be pretty young, so that's funny too", and Cadance calls it a happy ending.
Unless it actually was a porn, and she was talking about a "happy ending" and the scenes were just skipped in narration.
I feel for Aegis.
The mere mention of 'horn cancer' made me want to drink myself into a stupor as well.
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I've come up with worse.
Umbilical cord cancer.
hey is this all the mare on mare action we get? or will there be more later on?