“By the way, I saw you grab that other mares breast…” Trixie says to mess with you further.
I believe you need to add a word here or redo the part after what she said. Since if "I" know that she said that to mess with me straight out there would be no reason to be flustered in reply. I'd have to figure it out after replying like that, or my mouth would be moving before I even thought of what to reply with which seems sort of in character this chapter but still not completely so your call.
2439279 Hmm, I see what you mean. If I think of something I'll mess around with the sentence. Also, I redid the second chapter at the injury scene. Not sure if you've looked at it. Thanks again for the advise.
Another well done chapter. Man I love when Trixie is drunk. I might as well get drunk myself. Now if only I can manage to drink more then half of bottle of beer or do I pass out after half of bottle . Oh well I guess I just stick with soda. Keep up the amazing work.
“That won’t happen; it isn’t even that type of spell!” Trixie says, slightly flustered.
So she does know that kind of spell.
“Well, since you didn’t want to play along, we’ll just have to rough you up a bit and take whatever we find valuable on you,” The mare says in a threatening tone.
Holy escalation batman! What just happened?
Roughly, two hours later, Trixie is on her seventh mug, while you’re on your fourth. It was really starting to show just how much of a lightweight Trixie is.
Just how little is there in that cider for seven to qualify as lightweight?
More to come as I finish. Edit: actually the rest played out as I expected. Final thoughts: I'm reading this awkwardly if everyone but me is enjoying the story flow.
2439539 suspension of disbelief broken. I also like how you pointedly ignore all my other stuff for the alcohol comment. Have a little something on your mind there?
2439691 oh please. You give me too much credit. True evil would be posting a story marked everyone. Then; after it passes moderation, going back and posting a mature clop story in place of the original chapter and yes, you could do that about a month and a half ago.
2439791 it would also get flagged so much it'd look like (insert witty joke here) but that's another point entirely. Now imagine the looks on readers faces when they saw it.
Well, it looks like Trixie has really warmed up to 'you'. She certainly seems eager to convince 'you' to stay with her. I hope that does go somewhere.
...I have a sudden mental image of Trixie getting into a situation where she is unable - for some reason - to wield her magic (either it gets blocked, she's knocked unconcious, or she isn't given time), and then 'you' end up saving her. That would be a pretty dramatic moment.
Trixie is has to be one of the most interesting characters that has not been explored. One moment she hates this guy like their is no tomorrow, then the next thing we see is she is worried about him.
So that means Trixie actually likes him and she is wanting him to stay.......
I need to stop reading such good fiction at 3 in the morning... my comments make no sense
2439987...Whelp that's another scene I have to rewrite to kep people from guessing it...Lol! j/k something like that, though, not what you would hope for.... possibly...lol
Can't wait till they reach Ponyville......getting her some of AJ's hard cider should be interesting.....and then maybe she'll put on a little show....with a certain librarian....
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You are lucky!
2433885
Yup, it's intentional! Anthro! I honestly didn't notice it until I was halfway through editing the second chapter.
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FINALLY! I've been waiting for this FOREVER!
Aaaaaawwwww!!! Drunk Trixie is best Trixie or at least more honest Trixie.
2439140 Yes, she is adorable drunk.
I believe you need to add a word here or redo the part after what she said. Since if "I" know that she said that to mess with me straight out there would be no reason to be flustered in reply. I'd have to figure it out after replying like that, or my mouth would be moving before I even thought of what to reply with which seems sort of in character this chapter but still not completely so your call.
2439279 Hmm, I see what you mean. If I think of something I'll mess around with the sentence. Also, I redid the second chapter at the injury scene. Not sure if you've looked at it. Thanks again for the advise.
Moar drunk Trixie please.
Y'know.. I just thought this would be just another normal clopfic.
Boy, was I wrong, and surely glad for it.
Keep up the amazing work on this, dear person.
2439309 Haha, Drunk Trixie is fun.
2439337 Thank you, I try my best.
Another well done chapter. Man I love when Trixie is drunk. I might as well get drunk myself. Now if only I can manage to drink more then half of bottle of beer or do I pass out after half of bottle . Oh well I guess I just stick with soda. Keep up the amazing work.
Drunk Trixie is Fun Trixie!
I wonder how things will go from here...
Trixie has been a bit bipoler...
2439384 Thanks, I thought it would be nice for her to cut loose a little.
2439387 Lol You'll have to wait and see.
2439384 Woah, talk about a lightweight.
So she does know that kind of spell.
Holy escalation batman! What just happened?
Just how little is there in that cider for seven to qualify as lightweight?
More to come as I finish.
Edit: actually the rest played out as I expected. Final thoughts: I'm reading this awkwardly if everyone but me is enjoying the story flow.
Oh boy oh boy! Next come the-morning-after drama/character developement! Oh how I love the few chapters before the confession.
2439488 Lol Very...
2439516 Just picture beer... and having family that can chug a case with little effect. Lol
2439518 The next morning will be funny....
dawww
2439539 suspension of disbelief broken.
I also like how you pointedly ignore all my other stuff for the alcohol comment. Have a little something on your mind there?
I LOVE THIS STORY!!!
2439563 Lol That was the one that stuck out the most....Lol Also,
Possible. Glad you are at least trying.
2439562
2439570 Glad you're enjoying it so far!
2439563 Lol That one just popped out at me, forgot the rest...Also,
Possible.
2439562
2439570 I am glad you are enjoying it!
2439581i mean why else would she be flustered? it couldn't be that she actually likes him. This isn't that kind of story.
2439594
Not at all.....
2439603 I see no indication that they are going to be anything other than completely platonic friends by the end of this.
Wouldn't that be a twist.
2439614
Oh Yeah, then I could change the rating to teen and remove the romance tag!.....
Much awesome was had while reading. Keep up the greatness.
2439632 no, you'd keep it there just to mess with everyone reading.
*gets to the end* hang on a sec; where was it?! I call hijinks.
Oh my god! I was cracking up with the whole hat incident!
2439641 Thank you, I am glad you're liking it so far!
2439649 You, you are an evil guy aren't you...?
2439671 Nothing like getting punched in the nuts to make you less disobedient, eh?
Awesoem chapter addition! =D Can't wait till the next one comes out! =)
Yeah new chapter!
Kinda drastic development we got here eh?
But it's so good, gonna wait for the next chapter
2439691 oh please. You give me too much credit. True evil would be posting a story marked everyone. Then; after it passes moderation, going back and posting a mature clop story in place of the original chapter and yes, you could do that about a month and a half ago.
2439708 Thanks, I will try not to make it quite as long, but who knows.
2439715 Lol of course, Trixie detests slow plot devices.
2439731 Lol! That'd be hilarious.
2439791 it would also get flagged so much it'd look like (insert witty joke here) but that's another point entirely. Now imagine the looks on readers faces when they saw it.
Well, it looks like Trixie has really warmed up to 'you'. She certainly seems eager to convince 'you' to stay with her. I hope that does go somewhere.
...I have a sudden mental image of Trixie getting into a situation where she is unable - for some reason - to wield her magic (either it gets blocked, she's knocked unconcious, or she isn't given time), and then 'you' end up saving her. That would be a pretty dramatic moment.
Trixie is has to be one of the most interesting characters that has not been explored. One moment she hates this guy like their is no tomorrow, then the next thing we see is she is worried about him.
So that means Trixie actually likes him and she is wanting him to stay.......
I need to stop reading such good fiction at 3 in the morning... my comments make no sense
2439987...Whelp that's another scene I have to rewrite to kep people from guessing it...Lol! j/k something like that, though, not what you would hope for.... possibly...lol
2439992 Lol Indeed. I had to go wild for this one. It is funner that way. Plus, Trixie is the perfect Tsundere
nice one!
I Sense Awesomeness Happening
2440031 Thanks!
2440045 Indeed, some minor awesomeness will happen...
2440059 YES
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Tsundere Trixie is best Trixie.
2440101 Yes, Just... Yes. Someone should make this relevant to the MLP fandom. Lol
Can't wait till they reach Ponyville......getting her some of AJ's hard cider should be interesting.....and then maybe she'll put on a little show....with a certain librarian....
almost there. almost
Mmmmnnnice, but will be about 20% cooler when you actually get to the secksy part :3
Another chapter at its finest :) good work bro