Revelations II
"She's big, white, and a monster."
Twilight teleported all the way to her old room in the castle. It remained unchanged from how she left it so long ago, but she didn't notice past all the tears in her eyes.
She truly meant everything she said, and a small portion of her was happy to finally have revealed it. Another, larger, portion though was appalled that she would bear her soul out like that.
She knew that Celestia really wasn't her mother, so she knew she shouldn't have been so surprised when her mentor decided to side with Cadence, her own flesh and blood, as opposed to her student.
She knew that; but that thought only brought more pain via another thought: Why hadn't her parents done the same?
Celestia sided with her flesh-and-blood, and Shining had been under a spell, but why did her own parents rather side with the vicious false-bride over their own daughter! They had no pre-conceived notions of who Cadence was. She had met them before foal sitting appointments a few times, but they never spent the whole day with her or anything like she had!
Unless... They did…
Maybe they were looking to Cadence to replace their old and forgotten daughter? Maybe they decided that having a "perfect" princess as a daughter in law was much better than the old bookworm that they had been forced to raise? ...or at least drop off on someone else to raise.
Twilight cried, waiting for her mentor to come to her room to make up. Secretly she hoped Celestia would dismiss what she said and explain it away so Twilight could claim to herself that it was just nerves and lock those feelings away, never to come to bear again.
...but Celestia never came to make-up, she never came to put her fears to rest, she didn't even come to punish her.
She didn't come at all.
No one did.
Celestia was eating a salad in the royal dining room when she felt the tug of the sun warning her of its impending dismissal. She gave it the final nudge it needed, and waited until she felt the moon being pulled up by her sister's familiar aura.
"Twilight sure is taking a long time to come apologize." the thought crossed the monarch's mind as she continued to eat.
The stares of everyone at the table made her realized someone must have asked a question of her."I'm sorry, I was setting the sun, was there a question?"
"Ah' asked if you're sure Twi's alright, she's been gone an awful long time." Applejack looked to her from where she sat at the table, speaking a little louder this time out of concern.
"She's fine, it's nothing to be worried about. She just needs some time alone." Celestia thought back to her student's little spat.
From experience Twilight's little outbursts were as quick and short as they were violent. She continued to eat, "I'm sure that she'll be alright soon enough."
"Are you sure we shouldn't go to her? I mean she seemed awfully upset... If one of my mice friends lost a parent I know I'd want to be there to comfort them..." The shy pegasus squeaked just over the ambient noise.
"No, it's best we leave her alone for now. She's not thinking straight, you know how she gets when~ ...well, you know how she gets."
Everyone at the table gave a little nod.
"I'm sure she'll be fine, she always is." Rainbow Dash concluded.
After hours of sitting alone with nothing to do other than re-evaluating what she had said to her mentor, Twilight came to two startling realizations. The first being that when she had spoken the words they became more than an idea to her, now that she had finally said it, they were reality. She had been having those kind of thoughts for a while, always keeping them suppressed at the back of her mind, chalking up the seditious thoughts to one of her characteristic bouts of stress-induced paranoia. No longer could that be her claim. Now she had acted on the corrupting words, and it no longer felt like lies, the guilt she had expected to feel never came.
That led directly was the second revelation: She realized that with her secret revealed she no longer bore the oppressive guilt she had been feeling for so long. She felt good.
For the good or bad of it, Twilight Sparkle felt good to give up, to denounce everything she once strived so hard to gain, she felt like she no longer had to try to be the perfect daughter to the parents who forsook her, nor to the mentor who took her in.
She felt liberated. No longer would she have to sacrifice her happiness and time devoting herself to the pursuits that made those who did not appreciate her happy. With her "perfect student" mask now broken, maybe she could actually do what she wanted to for a change!
...which at this moment was to get some sleep. All that crying was a strain both on her body and her already exhausted mind.
Twilight fell asleep with one last thought assuring her conscience: If Celestia cared for her enough to apologize she would have done so already.
After a good portion of the evening and into the night with no sign of Twilight returning, the Elements of Harmony had decided to leave Twilight in Celestia's capable hooves and to leave Twilight to come back to Ponyville when she was ready.
Celestia, meanwhile, had gone to her office to finish some work that had been put on hold for the funeral. After some time, Celestia decided her duties should conclude for the night and began making her way to the royal chambers.
On the way she had intended to check in on her student, but didn't for fear Twilight might not have had enough time to sort herself out.
In her room Twilight had had enough of being left alone and ignored. Now that she was rested her mind was clear. Now that she had nothing to lose, she no longer feared the consequences. She was going to do something she should have done a long time ago…
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2043545 Nope.
She was Discordified.
She was trying to disown her by sending all the letters back.
It just so happened to have the exact opposite effect.
always
Really like this so far! I hope you write more.
2058278 Fixed!
Thanks!
1. FUCKING AGREED!
Buks buks buks!
2. We need more stories about purple rage monsters.
A great read thus far!
I'm eager to see just how far Twilight will go on her tirade for answers.
Will she challenge the all-knowing mind of the princess? Only time will tell...
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Tell her friends not to go and comfort her...because that won't come back and bite anyone in the ass!
2058277 Where did you find that information, 'coz I like the idea :3
Nice story, I love thus kind of Twi :D WRITE MOORE :>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
2058689 My headcanon, lol
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...Why has no one done a story about that?
I am serious,that is a better idea for an story than most stories in this site,if Twilight found out that was the case,she would be devastated,if i had any writing ability i would totally do a story about that.
On the story:So Celestia is an idiot in this story,she knows that Twilight does not have the best mental health and yet she decides to not allow anypony to comfort AFTER she revealed that she thinks nopony really likes her
,also i guess this really is a Twilight becomes an villain story.
2058916 Well..... This story is going to have alt endings, soooooooo...
Any other suggestions? I'm loving all the input.
~In the Immortal words of La Barata "We need more stories about purple rage monsters."~
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Alternate endings you say...
this was absolutely horrible (I don't mean badly written mind you), twilight literally JUST said how bad an idea it was to "give her space", and let things fester, and yet that's her first response, no tears, no "oh my god what have I done!", just, "why hasn't she apologized yet?", didn't even consider she may have placed the burden of responsibility on the wrong person.
*this does feel a bit OOC though, it's one thing to ignore the rant of someone who's so overstressed they look like they had a caffeine overdose, and another thing to completely disregard a tear-filled heartfelt confession after the funeral of an estranged parent; I also would think the elements would be a LOT more worried.
2048076 'Disown'. You keep using that word, I don't think you know what it means. LOL, sorry I couldn't resist that reference!
But in all seriousness, at what point did Shining Armor or the others outright tell her or imply, "You are no longer my sister/friend/student"? What SA did was reprimand her for verbally assaulting and accusing who he believed to be the mare he was going to marry and tell her not to come to the wedding, the latter of which many people seem to forget was entirely reasonable because why should be invited to a wedding she has clearly made herself opposed to even happening, let alone be made the Best Mare. It was less "you are no longer allowed to come as a punishment" and more "if this is how you feel, then don't bother coming".
...This is giving me a "Faith and Doubt" vibe. It suckered a lot of people in with a Twilight calling everyone out and starting a new life and then turned her into a dark alicorn with an over phylosophical uber alicorn OC that is always right, which lead to the mane 6 become alicorn and dethroning Celestia.
I hope this goes to a more down to Earth route, but the Dark tag worries me.
2060047 No worries mate, I felt the same way about Faith and Doubt. (still liked it though)
Hope this doesnt end up like faith and doubt
2060206 If you would mind reading the comment RIGHT BELOW YOURS, you would notice that this has already been referenced, but if you didn't pick up on that, I will say it now: There will be no grand plot twist introducing "over philosophical uber alicorn OCs" or anything of that nature here.
Sorry if i'm being blunt, but this is not Faith and Doubt
Anyway, thanks for reading!
Thanks for updating mate
keep them coming
It looks like some other commenters have talked about Twilight seeming OOC in this story. I'd have to agree with that, though I think it's a very fixable problem. As someone else said, in the grief over a loved one's death, a lot of things can happen. People can say things they wouldn't normally say, or even realize truths they've kept themselves from realizing for years. I think this could explain Twilight's actions pretty well, but I think it needs more set-up in the story. We start at the end of the funeral, and that's fine, but we only really read about Twilight going through the motions. There's no indication that something's eating her up until the dam bursts, and then she immediately seems OOC to me. A few extra lines in the first 300-500 words showing us that Twilight is in a sort of shock or having trouble resolving her feelings would help the transition into a purple unicorn rage-bomb.
OOC-ness aside, I enjoyed the writing here and I like the idea of Twilight having a poor relationship with her parents (although the vindictiveness toward the others kind of took me aback). The sentences were smooth and flowing, and your writing was never in any danger of taking me out of the story. Good luck with the rest of this!
I guess Twilight screaming about being left alone and ignored was not enough of a clue for Celestia to understand that Twilight did NOT want to be left alone and that leaving her alone was not the best choice on Celestia's part...
Please tell me this won't lead to the deaths of millions of ponies...
No, it's really because you came off as a huge jerk at that wedding rehearsal. You didn't even know she was an imposter you just had a nebulous claim she was evil with no proof (seriously, she's evil because she threw an apple away when the person who gave it to her wasn't looking? And she was less demanding about her dresses than the Elements of Harmony were about theirs for the Gala. Your only two points of real evidence were: She didn't seem to remember you and you saw her cast a spell- you didn't even take the time to figure out what spell it was, on Shining Armor). And you decided the best course of action was to interrupt the rehearsal with public accusations you couldn't back up instead of further investigation.
Basically, you were acting crazy. And doing so right after you had a psychotic break about being possibly tardy. Of course no one listened to you. It's not like you have a great track record at realistically predicting the actions of authority figures from your youth, Twilight Sparkle. You were right by accident.
Imagine for a second that you were wrong. You had no real proof, you easily could have been. Imagine Cadence didn't turn into Chrysalis, she was just acting like a jerk under the stress of preparing for her wedding, the same way you Twilight Sparkle, have been rude and demanding under stress yourself. Now think of what a horrible person you would have looked like.
5040635 It's really strange, because on the contrary she was going for real evidence in episode concerning the bitten off Mmmm in episode 24 during the train ride, you know where Pinkie falsely accused all of the chefs?
It's like everything she taught Pinkie about, was forgotten at the wedding.
5040635 True, but somebody should have talked to her. Obviously she had something really bothering her--enough that she blew up at Cadence with no evidence at all. Her parents should have been there to say "Don't worry Twilight, Cadence can never replace you. There will always be room in our hearts for you, and Shining will always be your big brother!" Instead they replaced her with Cadence and confirmed all the fears that would have made Twilight do that in the first place, if she hadn't really been concerned with exactly what she told them she was concerned with.
Cadence
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I find it messed up that Celestia after hearing all that decides to leave her alone, and talks the others into doing likewise with the whole "you know how she is" thing. Especially when Twilight's points were valid ones.
You half expect this to happen:
Okay. Okay. This is just gold. You, like, shut up any complaints that could be had by a reader about Twilight being OOC with one line. Thought this rises Celestia being OOC(or stupid), but who cares about that anyway.
Twilight about to do something crazy.
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Yeah but exactly what evidence could she bring in such a short time and not knowing about changelings. The only proof she was seeing a spell put on her brother and that wasn't good enough to at least check out.
Because you just SPAT IN HER FACE that she is a monster.
You think she won't feel anything from that!!?
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Ok this is ridiculous.
Both Celestia and Twilight is being stupid.
Celestia should go to Twilight's room and apologize or talk.
And Twilight should go to Celestia to apologize or talk.