Tick Tock. The unicorn head, and founder of a branch serving under Celestia's royal guard. Armour? Spears? Swords? No, no, no! This... this is the way it has always been done. Equestria's hidden blade. One has to wonder why Celestia's enemies never got so far as assassinating the princess as of late, and of course, Tick's job is a very... Special one. But when Twilight finds out of this organization, one must wonder what she will do with such information, and what questions she'll ask. Tides will turn, secrets revealed, and blood spilt. Welcome to the future.
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Well, you description intrigued me enough to give this a read, but I have to say, you could use some improvement. You really need an editor - not a proof-reader, an editor. You have a few spelling and grammar mistakes, but nothing particularly objectionable; your real problem is flow. You really, really need to work on how you structure your sentences; the bulk of what you have written here comes off a really abrupt.
Other than that, this seems like an interesting setup. Touch up your readability, and you'll have some pretty good stuff going.
You didn't just take the idea of an assassin called Tick Tock from me...did you? I wrote a story a long time ago, originally to be part of a series of stories following the escapades of a group of assassins that were working from the shadows to eliminate threats to the new regime of Nightmare Moon. Tick Tock himself was an assassin who eagerly threw himself into the fray and devised stratagems for taking out various targets.
This story could use some work, you got that first wall of text and you have a few cases of misspelling and letters missing. Also black hole magic? That just sounds silly, a black hole spell would crush the magnum into non-existence. What I think you meant was a pocket dimension spell.
2112259 As for knowing about your OC, I had no idea it existed until now. If you like, i could change the name? Plot is entirely different, by the way. POCKET DIMENSION FUUU- That was what I was thinking of.
2111634 Thanks. I kinda wrote this at 1 in the morning with a candy bar and a monster. So, remake soon I suppose... The intro I had thought of ahead of time, but the story was made when I was out of it so... Yeah. Logic
Great feedback from the both of you, and I appreciate the suggestions.
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Well you can change the name if you want. There can always be more than one Tick Tock.