Allow me to properly apologize for my last comment. I'm sorry for being so rash before. I should have known better, but your story truly convinced me of what happend, so I say you should consider that a win in your book my friend. Next allow me to say that I was every bit right about your talent, and lastly let me say. Well played! I think you have rightfully earned a thumbs up and a new follower. I wait anxiously for your next chapter
1906106 You have no right to say that your still rough around the edges. You have a way of making cliche original, your story telling ability is outstanding, the chapter titles make me keel over from the pain of laughter, and most of all you would forgive some random jackass who jumped the gun and insulted your story when he had no right to. Your a better man than you give yourself credit for. Don't you ever sell yourself short again, do you understand me?
Sure fooled me For a dream, that made some awful sense Time for some real Mac shenanigans I hope Twilight makes this extremely hard for him (Oh! Pun...intended?)
I was seriously hoping that was just a joke, but then I read the chapters. Yeah, the story is about as bad as I expected. Worse, actually.
Let's see, there's the typical double standard (males can't be raped! Anything coming close to it must be played for laughs) , the completely retarded heat plot device , using said plot device as an excuse to shove horrible characterization into the story to the point the characters might as well be OCs , and having the badly made plot that comes from using those terrible plot devices.
No, that was not an overuse of emoticons. That was just showing how I had to facepalm after seeing the same story for the millionth time.
I directly say in that exact same sentence that the double standard (the stupid idea that males can't be raped) is one of my main problems. I even have the facepalm at the end of that exact sentence to show how annoyed it made me. I made that sentence as sarcastic as possible, while throwing in every hint I could that it was sarcasm.
There is no way that sentence could have been more sarcastic.
How? There is a difference between expression and prescription. I said nothing more than my opinions on the matter, and therefore my original statement still stands.
I'm honestly not surprised. Although not as bad, FIMFiction is starting to have the same problem FanFiction has. Basically, no matter how horribly written a story is, you'll usually find a bunch of comments left by people ("omg bst evr moaaaarrrRR!!!111!" - Usual comment) who can't seem to figure out that throwing down a bunch of words doesn't automatically make a story the best thing in the world. Then again, those same people probably don't understand the concept of characterization, so I've learned to just ignore 90% of the comments I see (on FanFiction. FIMFiction is not as bad).
“See ya tomorrow ya lug!” Applejack waved as she left.
... I suppose this is just the sort of attitude that comes of a species that has to deal with estrus cycles. "Oh, you attacked my brother for his foal-fuel and he hurt himself in the escape? Shucks, ain't that a hoot! Catch ya'll later!"
Except with Fluttershy. At her cottage. And that weird little rabbit watched.
Angel has needs too. Don't judge him!
Her ride up was swift and quiet, until the doors bonged when they opened. She let out a squeal and ducked behind the bushes nearest the elevator doors on the third floor.
... I know this question may not be exceptionally relevant to the overall themes presented, and as such only serve as a meaningless distraction, but... bushes? In a building?
Macintosh just hung his head even lower; he wasn’t good with any kind of poker face.
You forgot to include the notification about living yourself in a cellar with tranquilizers and guns but yet still not being able to sleep for the whole night.
Ah! I say, much better!
…Damn Fluttershy, you scary.
you're Mine![:yay:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/yay.png)
Man, we are living in the wrong world.
...cheater.![:trixieshiftleft:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/trixieshiftleft.png)
It was a dream.... FFFFFFUUUUUUUuuuu
ok ok I'm good now.
Allow me to properly apologize for my last comment. I'm sorry for being so rash before. I should have known better, but your story truly convinced me of what happend, so I say you should consider that a win in your book my friend. Next allow me to say that I was every bit right about your talent, and lastly let me say. Well played! I think you have rightfully earned a thumbs up and a new follower. I wait anxiously for your next chapter
I'm not a fan of clop, but the rest of the story is hilarious![:rainbowlaugh:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowlaugh.png)
1905933
It's all good. This is my first time writing stories like this, so they're a little rough still.
1906106
You have no right to say that your still rough around the edges. You have a way of making cliche original, your story telling ability is outstanding, the chapter titles make me keel over from the pain of laughter, and most of all you would forgive some random jackass who jumped the gun and insulted your story when he had no right to. Your a better man than you give yourself credit for. Don't you ever sell yourself short again, do you understand me?
I normally don't like clop, I just think this is hilarious....
Wow. I was laughing so hard I ended up falling out of my chair. I'm not normally a fan of clop fics, but this is just downright hilarious. Keep it up!
ARRRRGGHHHHHHHHH, cliffhanger... (kinda)
The next chapter probably won't be out for a few days since it incorporates a complex issue...
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Pinkie Pie.
this is a pretty funni clop story
Rape everything.
1895339 I want to cum inside.
...![:rainbowderp:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowderp.png)
Oh.
Sure fooled me![:twilightsheepish:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsheepish.png)
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For a dream, that made some awful sense
Time for some real Mac shenanigans
I hope Twilight makes this extremely hard for him (Oh! Pun...intended?
1906306![:pinkiegasp:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiegasp.png)
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OOOOOOOOHHHHH SHEEEEEIIIIIIIITT!!!!!!!
1901805 That's sexist. Just pointing it out.
1906879
Welcome back from banland, Regi.
1906892![:moustache:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/moustache.png)
"Dark tagged for semi-rape-turns-into-consent-because-he's-a-guy."
I"m assuming you're joking, as rape can go either gender. Welp, off to read this...
QUICK!!!! Douse her in water and see if she evaporates!!!!!
The comments are much nicer than what I expected.
They're lucky Big Mac has a lot of patience and resolve.
1900574
I have lost all ability to can.![:facehoof:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/facehoof.png)
Big Mac in hospital......TARGET AQQUIRED!
My word Fluttershy you ninja! o_O
*shaking fist to the sky* Damn you! DREAM TROLLED. Love it. Eager for potential TwiMac
Ok I admit it, you got me. Well played sir, well played.
I was seriously hoping that was just a joke, but then I read the chapters. Yeah, the story is about as bad as I expected. Worse, actually.
Let's see, there's the typical double standard (males can't be raped! Anything coming close to it must be played for laughs)
, the completely retarded heat plot device
, using said plot device as an excuse to shove horrible characterization into the story to the point the characters might as well be OCs
, and having the badly made plot that comes from using those terrible plot devices. ![:facehoof:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/facehoof.png)
No, that was not an overuse of emoticons. That was just showing how I had to facepalm after seeing the same story for the millionth time.
1909522if some one where to hold you down and repeatedly shoves there item of choice in you bum that would be rape.
1909712
How does that have anything to do with my comment?
fc01.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2012/004/6/d/ninja_fluttershy_by_swomswom-d4l9e02.jpg fc01.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2012/338/4/b/fluttershy_rape_face_by_cordeliachan-d5n1o4l.jpg
also, This fits perfectly (warning nsfw!)
1910762males can't be raped...how so? No what dont answer that I don't care.
"Disclaimer: this may make you need to poop"
I'm sorry, but it's too good an opportunity to pass up.
Is it because it's crap? :D
1911858
What?![:rainbowhuh:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowhuh.png)
Are you serious? That was sarcasm!
I directly say in that exact same sentence that the double standard (the stupid idea that males can't be raped) is one of my main problems. I even have the facepalm at the end of that exact sentence to show how annoyed it made me. I made that sentence as sarcastic as possible, while throwing in every hint I could that it was sarcasm.![:facehoof:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/facehoof.png)
There is no way that sentence could have been more sarcastic.
1907655
How? There is a difference between expression and prescription. I said nothing more than my opinions on the matter, and therefore my original statement still stands.
1912238calm your tits bro just a little bit of fun at your expense.
1909522 I love how you're getting downvoted to hell for pointing out crucial problems in a decently popular fic.
Kind of like how my comment criticizing the content and writing style of my little dashie was downvoted to the point of it being hidden.
all in all though >opinions
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(Joke) Alt. Title: MEANWHILE! Every Summer Gets Darker
1914013
I'm honestly not surprised. Although not as bad, FIMFiction is starting to have the same problem FanFiction has. Basically, no matter how horribly written a story is, you'll usually find a bunch of comments left by people ("omg bst evr moaaaarrrRR!!!111!" - Usual comment) who can't seem to figure out that throwing down a bunch of words doesn't automatically make a story the best thing in the world. Then again, those same people probably don't understand the concept of characterization, so I've learned to just ignore 90% of the comments I see (on FanFiction. FIMFiction is not as bad).
Though like you said: opinions.![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
1905556 That is the understatement of the century.
hay big brother
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by twilight
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Rape is bad m'kay... don't give in, or you'll be showing weakness.
... I suppose this is just the sort of attitude that comes of a species that has to deal with estrus cycles. "Oh, you attacked my brother for his foal-fuel and he hurt himself in the escape? Shucks, ain't that a hoot! Catch ya'll later!"
Angel has needs too. Don't judge him!
... I know this question may not be exceptionally relevant to the overall themes presented, and as such only serve as a meaningless distraction, but... bushes? In a building?
Say what? Mac should have the BEST poker face.
You forgot to include the notification about living yourself in a cellar with tranquilizers and guns but yet still not being able to sleep for the whole night.![:facehoof:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/facehoof.png)
1905423 http://mamandil.deviantart.com/art/Y-all-don-t-say-325993979
This says one thing twice.