Scootaloo gets herself pregnant by a complete accident, her life begins to crumble around her, but will the gift of birth build her back up and help her to realize what is true and untrue?
Scootaloo gets herself pregnant by a complete accident, her life begins to crumble around her, but will the gift of birth build her back up and help her to realize what is true and untrue?
meh
good idea
bad execution
not sure why you put words in between slashes, and the whole mention of "rough, painful sex" is an image I could do without, but beyond that, it's interesting.
After reading the description, and this might be unrelated since I haven't read it yet, but I keep asking myself who the father is.
Ok, where do I start...
A plus is that it's based off one of the few "ask ponies" blogs that I follow.
But we have problems. The first is that you didn't split your paragraphs enough. You need an extra line between them.
The second is too little description. I know who Sandy is, but not everyone will.
The third is that there are a few errors that a second go over would have caught. I make a point of doing one last go over before submitting.
I'm not trying to put you down, but give you a few tips in order to get better.
wow good man ! more please
1890158 The father is Rain Catcher, read the story it says in the italic texts.
1891071 Thanks
An interesting story about SCOOTS to the LOO woohoo
This gives Scootabuse a whole new meaning.
1891888 Glad I could help with your problem!