What do you do when the possibility of losing the one you love most presents itself? Fluttershy, a timid pony, has had feelings for her best friend Rainbow Dash since the two went to Flight Academy. Now, years later, Fluttershy finally feels like she's ready to open up to her friend. But tragedy strikes as Dash falls ill, and it becomes a game with time as Fluttershy and her friends must travel to the Dragon Lands in order to find the cure.
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Hey Discord,
First off, thanks for the link. I appreciate it. OOC for a sec, I love reading fics.
Anyways, back to your story here. I like the set up you've got. Its a little short, but that doesn't make it bad. I do hope that future chapters you write will be a little bit longer, at least to the 1000 or so word mark.
There's a few grammatical errors littered about, but nothing that makes this unreadable. One or two areas could be rewritten for clarity's sake, but overall it has a good flow. Always important.
As for the story, its cute. FlutterDash is one of my favorite shipping couples and from what is written here, you seem to have a decent grasp on how both of them act. While that doesn't mean too much now, so long as you keep it up, later on you should have some rather accurate character portrayals. And that always makes for really good reading.
After all, nothing's better than reading a fic and forgetting that you're not actually watching MLP. But thats so rare, for many obvious reasons.
Keep it up. Tweet at me when you've got the second chapter done. I've set you on follow, and I'm gonna go ahead and keep up with this. I wanna know how it turns out.
~My Little Dashie
Thanks for the feedback, i really appreciate it. Ill get to fixing the mistakes and i should have Chapter 2 up by tomorrow! Stick to me, cause this stories gonna go far.
O.O good story, must keep reading! For FlutterDash
A promising start--I will be keeping an eye on this one.
Thanks for that guys. I appreciate any feed back, and I add a chapter almost daily.
so good....i want more
Can do Trex :)
In one of the paragraphs, there seems to be a line break that should not be there. as for the story itself... i have no comment, good or bad, because the story isn't complete yet.
Thank you for pointing that out. When I find the time I will correct the mistake. Good eye.
FOR RAINBOW DASH
Hey fans! After the whole "OMG I HATE ZECORA DIALOGUE" fiasco, I'm going to take a few days away from the story to mentally recover. In the meantime ill be writting a one-shot for all of you Grimdark lovers. The title will be Sour Apples. Have fun imagining what it's about!
Hello fans! IM back from my little vacation and ready to get back to work on Shattered Wings! Also, sorry i couldnt fall through with the Sour Apples fic, got a litte too busy! No worries, itll be a project for later on! SO, without further ado, i begin chapter 5!
Just reread the chapter and found a few errors, and realized that an entire sentence was missing. Problems fixed.
Yup, you read correctly. That's chapter 5 up there. Bout time, right? Well, no worries, if things go right, ill try to get through chapter 6 tomorrow for all of you awesome ponies.
oh god the tears
Why do I have the feeling that Scootaloo is gonna be the one to die?
This was a sad chapter! Feel bad for Fluttershy though, her and Dash were best friends since the race with the young colts.
Hope she pulls through! Will read next chapter tomorrow but for now, goodnight 
Good chapter! Can't wait for chapter 6.
How about a tear jerker like chapter 3? Yes. That sounds perfect *manly tears will be shed*
Heh... This is my 5th flutterdash fic. I just can't stop reading em, keep up the good work (me gusta)
Oremorenoremoremoremoremoremoremrormromoremoremoremoremore I need more of this story!!!
I think discord found his way to this story... Am I the only one who notices that chapter one came out January 27 and chapter 2 came out January 16?
Who knows? #ReadFirstComment lol
Dammit fluttershy nooooooooo
Loving the story though ~~
wait a minute... sacrifice and death... and success.... hmm... *Closes eyes* I wonder... but it never said whom would die, just that success will be made at a great...sacrifice.... hmm.. i wonder if death is actually life-changing. anyway, good story.
Feverishly awaiting the next chapter to this. Man, got me biting my nails.
Lovin the praise guys, Thanks for the support. Just remember, not every prediction should be taken for face value ;3
YES
THIS
IS
WIN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.