A human, named Trace, is guided by the mane six in learning the pony way. Fitting in is terrifying as everypony seems to be out to get him. Read on as he learns to fit in and ends up fighting off the immense loneliness of being the only human.
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what a lovely work of art, mate i thank you for your hard work for you made my day( well night)
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Really glad you liked it
This was freaking awesome!
Wait a minute... Lyra broke a Pinkie Promise!!!
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Haha! I didn't even realize Hopefully Pinkie wont find out
Flutter's Shyness was handled very well. It really annoys me to see Fluttershy say "That is, if you don't mind?" every other paragraph. A little bit of stuttering, blushing, and hesitation goes a long way.
I also suspect that in ten days, Trace and Lyra are going to LOVE HER!!
... You know, as in sex.
Yay!
Oh yes, that was definetely worth the wait. You practically nailed every detail on this two parter, and by god I enjoyed.
Great job dude
... Still going to reread these two, burnt finger distracting me making me skip parts and not notice. Yay Fluttershy+Trace+Lyra!
(Mfw burnt finger: )
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sorry to hear about your finger, hope it gets better soon
I like how the title of this two-part chapter can refer to two separate events (the unexpected, snowy weather or 'Angel' being pregnant).
Overall the update was fine (I'm saddened that Twi won't be a part of their herd, but that would probably be too similar to Xeno, so I understand your choice), however, I have noticed more than usual little grammatical errors and typos. It was nothing that hindered my understanding of what you wanted to convey, but still... a certain proofreader needs a thorough whipping
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I'm glad you got that little bit about the 'white surprise' I wanted the reader to wonder if the snow or Angel was the white surprise, but really it was one for part one and another for part two.
2031006 Yeah, I honestly shouldn't edit when I'm tired.
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The same thing happens when I try and write while tired. I had to rewrite a couple paragraphs cause of it
Great job on these last two chapters! I loved them both.
Saw Fluttershy joining from a mile away, even so I was personally hoping for Pinkie. (She never gets any human love) I suppose that's why I'm writing it myself, Anyway still a good choice, so don't mind me. Also the way you brought Flutters into the herd was well done, so kudos to you. As always keep up the good work and I await your next chapter eagerly.
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Yeah, I like Pinkie, it's just her personality gets tiring to write. especially as long as I'm hopefully going to make EGF. I actually had trouble because the ponies I wanted in the herd, meant making it too much like Xenophilia. So, Flutters it is
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Meh, it stopped bothering me when the burn decided it was cold enough. Reread the chapters, pretty good, no critical mistakes.
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huh I noticed that myself that Pinkie hardly ever has romance fics with humans its quite sad.
Pretty cool to see Aj hit it off with the one she likes. Curious on what Lyra is going to plan when she tries to get trace and shy closer.
I loved it all it was a awesome and sweet chapter.It just keeps getting better and better I can't wait to see what happens next to them all and what happens next to them all.I loved how you made Fluttershy part of the herd.And I can't wait to see who is next to join.
3457353 I've actually read quite a lot of Pinkie Pie romances.
4508584 I think he (or she) meant Pinkie Pie x Human romance fics. True, there is a good amount of Pinkie Pie x Any other pony fics, but not many Pinkie x Human fics. "Pretty in Pink" is the only real romantic fic with Pinkie and a Human I can think of at the top of my head, and not a lustful fling. There was a Hearth Warming Eve one shot that was considered romantic, and the fic "No matter what they say"... I'm sure there is more, I just can't find or think of anymore right now. If you have more I (and perhaps others) would appreciate it.
So it was Angel's sister, Fluttershy is in the herd, and Bon Bon and AJ are together. Great, and looks like I was partially right about the relationship between Bon Bon and Lyra, even though nothing much happened between them. Hope the date with Fluttershy goes great, and the commingle could happen. Even if the commingle doesn't happen, I hope the individual relations between everyone in their herd become strong. So Twilight, Pinkie Pie, Rainbow Dash and Rarity needs to get in a herd, not necessarily with each other though.
2028094 What Pinkie Promise was that?
It's the inbreeding.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~