Equestria: Underground Assualt

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Listie The Scribe Maid

Listie The Scribe Maid #1 · Dec 16th, 2012 · · · Prologue: The Seeds are Sown ·

(Joke) Alt. Title: In (Apple)Bloom

Mordecaiser

Mordecaiser #2 · Dec 25th, 2012 · · · Prologue: The Seeds are Sown ·

insta-fave movement has been carried

DaveMan1000

DaveMan1000 #3 · Jan 4th, 2013 · 2 · · Loyalty: Ferret interrupts Boredom ·

Pretty good so far, just one thing:

If this is ment to be an alternate ending to Ponyville Confidential, where they don't write an apology, then why is everypony (particularly Rainbow Dash) not still mad at them?

oneweirdpegasister

oneweirdpegasister #4 · Jan 5th, 2013 · · · Loyalty: Ferret interrupts Boredom ·

1904522 You do have a point there, but I figured that as Applejack's hospitalization and the burning down of Sweet Apple Acres would be a sort of... distraction. But as you pointed out, most ponies would likely still be mad at them for the events in Ponyville Confidential.

And hey, have the Crusaders ever struck to anyone that they would be capable of something as serious as arson? Or whatever people call that? I see them as the three most innocent fillies like most people would (I assume), so I put that into affect.

While I try my best, there are obviously going to be some (if not many) mistakes. First story after all, but I appreciate people's feedback, wether it be good or bad. I've got to work out any kinks in the story and that chapter may be rewritten later.

Mordecaiser

Mordecaiser #5 · Jan 5th, 2013 · 1 · · Loyalty: Ferret interrupts Boredom ·

would you SERIOUSLY still be pissed off and not worry about your SIBLING that you've been living with for the past 8 years or so, being placed in a potentially life threatening situation, JUST because they embarassed you?(this does not apply to scootaloo)

i wouldnt

you'd have to seriously not give a fuck to hold on to that rage and wave them off and let them wander around god-knows where, associating with whoever

admittedly, id still be annoyed, but their well-being comes first

Matthew Malysza