Princess Luna's Big Dream

by BabyLuna123

Princess Luna in Paris <3

It is December 07,2012, and Princess Luna and her dad are already in Paris. Princess Luna couldn't believe that she was actually in Paris. Immediately, Princess Luna wanted to go see the Eiffel Tower and asked her dad if he could take her. So, her dad decided that he would take her. When they got to the Eiffel Tower, Princess Luna gave her dad her iPod and asked him if he could take a picture of her, and he sure did take the picture. Princess Luna told her dad that she will always remember that day for the rest of her life.

Princess Luna asked her dad how long they were going to be in Paris for. Her dad said that they were going to be in Paris for only three days because that's all he was able to afford. Of course Princess Luna was okay with that because she was able to catch a plane to Paris with her dad. The next morning, Princess Luna wanted her dad to buy a plane ticket to fly Rainbow Dash to Paris to spend time with them. Her dad said yes but the only thing was that they were all going to spend time as a family.

It's their last day of being in Paris so Princess Luna asked her dad if he could take her and Rainbow Dash to the Eiffel Tower, and her dad said yes. So they got there, Princess Luna gave her iPod to her dad and told him to please take a picture of her and Rainbow Dash in front of the Eiffel Tower.

It's already night time, and unfortunately that meant tha they had to pack up and catch their plane back home. Princess Luna and Rainbow Dash had lots of fun with Pricness Luna's dad. They said that they couldn't wait to see where they're traveling for Princess Luna's next big surprise.

Comments

[Bad_Seed_72]

Hey there. As promised, I read your story, and I give you a thumbs-up for effort.

If you would like to grow as a writer, my best advice for you would be to read. Read as much as can, both online fics and published books. Don't worry about what kind of books or stories they are--just make sure you like them enough to read them all the way through, and that they have good punctuation/grammar/spelling. By reading other folks' material, you'll be able to pick up a lot of tips and tricks.

Have a great night!

[Demon_Cloud]

It was good.
I liked it very much.
Just fix it a bit. Has a few things to correct.

[BabyLuna123]

what do i needto correct?