Slavery, racism, oppression Equestria was founded on these principles. The tyrant of the sun refuses to do nothing whilst the males of her ponies are beaten. I wont stand for this change is coming be it peacefully, or forcefully
Please have it be the most gruesome slowest death for Blueblood. No matter what fanfic I read I want him dead because I have this image of this worthless little dumbass who only cares for what he gets and acts more picky than angel bunny x100. (BURN AND DESTROY THE DEAMON THAT IS BLUEBLOOD!)
That moment when you have great pleasure in thinking about reading how blueblood is sent to have 100 lashings with an even worse whiplash as his blood runs all around everywhere. c:
well then i hate Celestia, hate her hate her hate her, what the f*** is with this b**ch! I... there arent enough words, and applejack too! Sexist pigs.... What is this the medieval times? sheesh, im glad our gender equality stuff got put together, Celestia should burn in a hole, i wouldnt be surprised if Sombra was actually some good guy or something, and if Blueblood gets his way i swear, i hope he kills Blueblood or something and Luna uses her status to tell Celestia to f*ck off, maybe Blueblood killed the stallions out of mercy or sent them someplace safe and ticked off Celestia
what even warrents Celestia's hate and disdain for the males? what was she raped? so she has to put herself above stallions to feel safe?
makes me appreciate canon celestia more in comparion, canon Celestia would send her to the moon, then the moon to the sun, then the sun to like another galaxy in another dimension, then finally plunge it into a black hole
My thoughts half an hour ago: "oh good another terrible Scent story I can read, then rip apart to relax" and then...
wait, is this? it is, this is a good start, in fact these characters are actually believable instead of being emotionless dummies *sniff* I love the Piano Man, its my favourite song Is that a Zero Punctuation joke?! An immersive story behind the mistreatment of males? Am I reading The Scent Darker Paths here?
Umm Flare, are feeling alright? I'm not complaining but I suddenly feel the urge to remove my downvote and honestly make sure that this is really you and not someone ghost writing over your uncontentious body. I never thought I would read a story of yours I would not-hate, let alone enjoy and so far you have improved immensely. You have far fewer errors in grammar, the story is fantastic so far and you have some really good ideas here, and a goal for the main character!
Good lord, there's so much comeuppance that needs to hit this place. Blueblood still needs to die! Celestia has hit an all time low. Honestly, not only the blackmail but slowing Lachlan's recovery just to satisfy herself. her At least Luna is getting better.
Honestly, i can't help but think what really happened with Sombra. Considering that the information on the past is not reliable.as it will be slanted withing Celestia, Luna and Equestrian Society's favor. I just get the feeling that Sombra might have been more noble than one would think.
It's good to see that Lachlan is training and trying to get stronger as well as learn more to strengthen his argument. I just hope it will be enough.
Je, boy Celestia is playing with fire, if Lanchand don't make mayor changes by the time Discord appear, she will get the shit end of the stick. And what she is doing is idiotic, forcing him to sex in that condition, not only that will make his stamina, almost zero, she is risking killing him, and to the eyes of all he is a colt, she is awakening the wrath of so many, and who knows before something big happen because of that
Wow suddenly I'm imagining several scene where Celestia, and the guard that whipped Lachlan need his help which he does give ending in well (Insert gruesome scene here)?
Also I now picture Lachlan slowly crushing Bluebloods skull with his bare hands, and ending him.
Still this story is an interesting read though, and it's always exciting seeing a new chapter.
Truth be told... I am not a fan of dark stories in even the lightest sense of the word. That being said. I am enjoying this story to a surprisingly high degree and i await the next installment to come out.
so, someone dared do the "double standard rape" trope, eh? I dunno if I should read this one or not. i'm not one for the grimdark crapsack world subversions that seem to be popular with some fans any more than the sugarbowl happy candy-and-flowers stuff that Lauren Faust herself was trying to subvert with FIM. still might sample the starter.
20/10 :D Good stuff. I love the story-line. I liked how chapter 7 is like a mixture of Eragon in learning magic and gaining knowlege and Assassin's Creed-like in the swordplay.
will Grogar come back? he was a OP necromancer, plus the elements of harmony don't kill you, they seal you; so like with Discord and nightmare moon, it will eventually break. I hope I called it: the six male leaders of the revolution. Lachlan- human badass Discord- god of chaos Sombra- "evil" unicorn king Spike- magic dragon Grogar- the necromancer Star Swirl the bearded - (revived by Grogar) possibly the strongest unicorn ever. Celestia wont stand a fucking chance.
it appears that the elements are slowly realising what kind of mare celestia truly is here. does that possibly mean lach is gonna end up with a few of the mane six as his allies? i could also see luna developing actual feelings for him since he is slowly rising in strength, and from previous chapters i assume luna prefers a powerful stallion over a weak one. what also interests me is how many "villians" were male. i enjoyed that little tidbit of a hint that something isnt right with the history lessons of equestria.
I want the resident human to tie blueblood up in such a way that he's hangin perpendicular to the floor, and make thousands of shallow cuts on him, leading to blueblood slowly exsanguinating/bleeding out, letting him feel all the pains that come with the package. Oh and when he's on the verge of death I want his testicles smashed. Or rather, have that first, but in such a way that there's no external bleeding.
THEN kill him slowly.
Mmmmyes, that seems sufficiently evil. I have spawned my evil plan for the day, so I shall retire to bed now.
I'm curious... will Lachlan ever have any manner of 'ascended form/berserker state' that he goes into under certain circumstances? That would be awesome despite being if only a tad cliche.
I hope that, if the elements of harmony (the actual artifacts) were made/left by a human, they will side with Lachlan should shit really hit the fan. I would also love to see Celestia confronted by her mother because of some elements-of-harmony side effect, and said mother (Faust) gives Celestia the tongue lashing she has been in need of for the past millennium. dashie.mylittlefacewhen.com/media/f/rsz/mlfw5653_small.jpg Daughter, I am dissapoint
Com on man just make blue balls get humiliated and killed already! He doesn't need a huge battle chapter man let it go! At least make the next chapter the part where blue blood gets finally get K.Oed man hurry up!
3081526 Dude I already have chapter eight and nine finished and two thousand words into chapter ten. You will get it but it will be once a week and no more. Luckily for you that is only three days away
kill bluebllood ja!
I..is...that what I wrote in the comments earlier?
Where is Discord?
Why is Celestia such a ***** ***** *** ******** ****?
Why is it that Blueblood's plan is so easy to figure out?
Is Spike raped and all because he's male?
I will just have to wait.
Please have it be the most gruesome slowest death for Blueblood. No matter what fanfic I read I want him dead because I have this image of this worthless little dumbass who only cares for what he gets and acts more picky than angel bunny x100. (BURN AND DESTROY THE DEAMON THAT IS BLUEBLOOD!)
GGGRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR!!!!!!! BLUE BLOOD I WILL HAVE YOUR FU*KING TOUNG FOR THISvery great chapter
that cover is sure creepy
I want blueblood dead before he even thinks of using that love poison or so help me I will end u
So many questions, so few answers. Dammit I need answers Can't wait for the next chapter
That moment when you have great pleasure in thinking about reading how blueblood is sent to have 100 lashings with an even worse whiplash as his blood runs all around everywhere. c:
Only thing I have to say is, Blueblood must explode.
Needs sex with Florenza and when is the next chapter in Lust of Mares coming out?
Definetly not. History is written by the victors after all.
3065270 That is the exact words I use later on well done my friend
well then i hate Celestia, hate her hate her hate her, what the f*** is with this b**ch! I... there arent enough words, and applejack too! Sexist pigs.... What is this the medieval times? sheesh, im glad our gender equality stuff got put together, Celestia should burn in a hole, i wouldnt be surprised if Sombra was actually some good guy or something, and if Blueblood gets his way i swear, i hope he kills Blueblood or something and Luna uses her status to tell Celestia to f*ck off, maybe Blueblood killed the stallions out of mercy or sent them someplace safe and ticked off Celestia
what even warrents Celestia's hate and disdain for the males? what was she raped? so she has to put herself above stallions to feel safe?
makes me appreciate canon celestia more in comparion, canon Celestia would send her to the moon, then the moon to the sun, then the sun to like another galaxy in another dimension, then finally plunge it into a black hole
My thoughts half an hour ago: "oh good another terrible Scent story I can read, then rip apart to relax" and then...
wait, is this? it is, this is a good start, in fact these characters are actually believable instead of being emotionless dummies
*sniff* I love the Piano Man, its my favourite song
Is that a Zero Punctuation joke?!
An immersive story behind the mistreatment of males? Am I reading The Scent Darker Paths here?
Umm Flare, are feeling alright? I'm not complaining but I suddenly feel the urge to remove my downvote and honestly make sure that this is really you and not someone ghost writing over your uncontentious body. I never thought I would read a story of yours I would not-hate, let alone enjoy and so far you have improved immensely. You have far fewer errors in grammar, the story is fantastic so far and you have some really good ideas here, and a goal for the main character!
Good lord, there's so much comeuppance that needs to hit this place. Blueblood still needs to die! Celestia has hit an all time low. Honestly, not only the blackmail but slowing Lachlan's recovery just to satisfy herself. her At least Luna is getting better.
Honestly, i can't help but think what really happened with Sombra. Considering that the information on the past is not reliable.as it will be slanted withing Celestia, Luna and Equestrian Society's favor. I just get the feeling that Sombra might have been more noble than one would think.
It's good to see that Lachlan is training and trying to get stronger as well as learn more to strengthen his argument. I just hope it will be enough.
I was one of the pre readers, did anything get changed? i want to know so i dont miss anything
3065378 not really no
3065380 k thanks for telling me.
Je, boy Celestia is playing with fire, if Lanchand don't make mayor changes by the time Discord appear, she will get the shit end of the stick.
And what she is doing is idiotic, forcing him to sex in that condition, not only that will make his stamina, almost zero, she is risking killing him, and to the eyes of all he is a colt, she is awakening the wrath of so many, and who knows before something big happen because of that
Wow suddenly I'm imagining several scene where Celestia, and the guard that whipped Lachlan need his help which he does give ending in well (Insert gruesome scene here)?
Also I now picture Lachlan slowly crushing Bluebloods skull with his bare hands, and ending him.
Still this story is an interesting read though, and it's always exciting seeing a new chapter.
That's it somebody get me a buster sword. I'm gona omnislash Blueblood's ass until Hell won't have it.
Please kill Blueblood as brutally as possible, if you decide to kill him.
Truth be told... I am not a fan of dark stories in even the lightest sense of the word. That being said. I am enjoying this story to a surprisingly high degree and i await the next installment to come out.
so, someone dared do the "double standard rape" trope, eh? I dunno if I should read this one or not. i'm not one for the grimdark crapsack world subversions that seem to be popular with some fans any more than the sugarbowl happy candy-and-flowers stuff that Lauren Faust herself was trying to subvert with FIM. still might sample the starter.
It's gonna get vicious.
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That pretty much sums up my feelings for this story...
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Derpy needs to save the day!
20/10 :D Good stuff. I love the story-line. I liked how chapter 7 is like a mixture of Eragon in learning magic and gaining knowlege and Assassin's Creed-like in the swordplay.
3065593 wowee! Somebody sure smells like tvtropes!
will Grogar come back? he was a OP necromancer, plus the elements of harmony don't kill you, they seal you; so like with Discord and nightmare moon, it will eventually break.
I hope I called it: the six male leaders of the revolution.
Lachlan- human badass
Discord- god of chaos
Sombra- "evil" unicorn king
Spike- magic dragon
Grogar- the necromancer
Star Swirl the bearded - (revived by Grogar) possibly the strongest unicorn ever. Celestia wont stand a fucking chance.
kill blueballs now damnit now.
3065759 He was a necromancer from mlp generation one along with tirek he is an actual character and scared the crap out of me as a kid
why, pray tell is Prince Blueballs still walking?
Hm I like this story a lot, though the grammar is not really that good. It's improving a bit throughout the chapters though.
it appears that the elements are slowly realising what kind of mare celestia truly is here. does that possibly mean lach is gonna end up with a few of the mane six as his allies? i could also see luna developing actual feelings for him since he is slowly rising in strength, and from previous chapters i assume luna prefers a powerful stallion over a weak one. what also interests me is how many "villians" were male. i enjoyed that little tidbit of a hint that something isnt right with the history lessons of equestria.
I want the resident human to tie blueblood up in such a way that he's hangin perpendicular to the floor, and make thousands of shallow cuts on him, leading to blueblood slowly exsanguinating/bleeding out, letting him feel all the pains that come with the package. Oh and when he's on the verge of death I want his testicles smashed. Or rather, have that first, but in such a way that there's no external bleeding.
THEN kill him slowly.
Mmmmyes, that seems sufficiently evil. I have spawned my evil plan for the day, so I shall retire to bed now.
I'm curious... will Lachlan ever have any manner of 'ascended form/berserker state' that he goes into under certain circumstances? That would be awesome despite being if only a tad cliche.
Every revolution/social upheaval requires blood to be spilled.
3066701 Perhaps any tortures banned by the FBI/UN/NATO? Like Bamboo under the nails or shocking the genitals?
Personally, I blame the author for getting me riled up. Foreplay must be a specialty of yours, isn't it?
I hope that, if the elements of harmony (the actual artifacts) were made/left by a human, they will side with Lachlan should shit really hit the fan.
I would also love to see Celestia confronted by her mother because of some elements-of-harmony side effect, and said mother (Faust) gives Celestia the tongue lashing she has been in need of for the past millennium.
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Daughter, I am dissapoint
... Still waiting for Luffy to show up...
and Asura, don't forget that guy.
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Sooner or later I'm going to make a simple kill blueblood story
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I may have to join you in that
Same here dude fuck blueblood, the pompous asshole.
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TVTropes will ruin your life, after all!
Something is not right with this story.
Makes me feel like the likes were only earned because of cloppery.
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It's worse for me. My pontoons/main maired Luna and sunnybuts cousin so he's related to that bastered blueballs!
Gilda what happened to her?
Com on man just make blue balls get humiliated and killed already! He doesn't need a huge battle chapter man let it go! At least make the next chapter the part where blue blood gets finally get K.Oed man hurry up!
3081526 Dude I already have chapter eight and nine finished and two thousand words into chapter ten. You will get it but it will be once a week and no more. Luckily for you that is only three days away