Slavery, racism, oppression Equestria was founded on these principles. The tyrant of the sun refuses to do nothing whilst the males of her ponies are beaten. I wont stand for this change is coming be it peacefully, or forcefully
Uh, oh, gawd The rape, the horror! I think I'm gonna be sick... This dark version of Equestria... just makes me wanna puke at how disgusting and perverted it is I bet Celestia had something to do with this!
This story has some good ideas but, well... it needs a face lift. An editor and a Pre-reader would do this story justice. Also, Dis story is 2 Edgy 4 Me! Honestly Take a step back and look at what you're writing. Allot of it is just bullshit that's Edgy for the sake of being Edgy. It's lacks substance.
Why does AJ enjoy kicking Lachlan when he's down after defending himself or others? I know he sedated her once to get away, but at least he didn't punch her out like she has to him.
The leader growled as she and the other standing member dragged me into the alleyway. I was fucked... there was no way I could fight of two mares if I could barely fight back against one.
But fighting an fully grown Griffin? Psh hold my beer.
She shook her head. “It might help her short term, but the problem with that is what memories would I substitute the tragedy she suffered through to convince her nothing is wrong? Not only that, but its just... wrong. I couldn't do that to her without feeling terrible,” Twilight confessed, stepping aside as the hospital staff arrived to pick up the now healed mare and the injured human.
that's rich, coming from your kind, BLOOD FOR THE MOTHAFUCKING BLOOD GOD!!!!!!
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DO MOAR OF DIS FIC
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This. Fucking this.
Blue lightning? Lachlan has got psyhic powers?
I could only imagine what his leg looked like .__.
MOAR!
You have something for scars in the face do you? Why you always put at scar in all your human characters?
Maybe he should move in. just build a small room right next door to it and make it his home.
So Lachlan pissed off the Equestrian version of the Tunnel Snakes and now Lachlan is Cole Mcgrath?
I'm cool with that
Uh, oh, gawd
The rape, the horror! I think I'm gonna be sick...
This dark version of Equestria... just makes me wanna puke at how disgusting and perverted it is
I bet Celestia had something to do with this!
i likie tis me wants MMMOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAARRRRheheheheheehehhehhe
great chapter
2962624 Seems legit
Should be: unintentionally arousing me as I tri...*
should be: Filth and grim*
Well then, I'm cool with this!
do they all know that he was raped by nightmare moon?
2963415 Nope but they know he was rapped
give him dragon powers man and why let the bitch live
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also, how many things are you planning to change with the story this time?
Is it possible that his power came from his encounter with moon.
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*Trollestia
2963503 Applejack is a b big time,SHAWTY!!! make her pay, and I am intrigued by his power this story gets better with each chapter dude
damn amazing, i applaud thee... sir Distorted Flare
He got Cole's posts from infamous?
That's pretty
Puts on shades
Shocking
Yeah!!!!!!!!!!!!
*ahem* carry on.
What a shocking development.
Lachlan...is........Cole magrath!.....or has pikachu for a heart!
I wait for the next installment of awesomeness
2962958 I have never made as much sense as i have today
It's a little sad lachlan almost killed someone but but it was so badass he shot a blue lightning blot through that mares chest
love the new chapter but that new cover pic. dang that's creeptastic.
Chapter 3 was cool but I don't understand how magic was used
This story has some good ideas but, well... it needs a face lift. An editor and a Pre-reader would do this story justice.
Also, Dis story is 2 Edgy 4 Me!
Honestly Take a step back and look at what you're writing. Allot of it is just bullshit that's Edgy for the sake of being Edgy.
It's lacks substance.
The one huge difference I see between this one and the other one is Fluttershy loves him in the main one, But in this one she wants to be his mom.
Wat?
And in this one Lachlan has more balls and actually stands up for himself, while in the other one..........I don't even
But a moustache for your amazing work anyways
plasmids!!
Why does AJ enjoy kicking Lachlan when he's down after defending himself or others? I know he sedated her once to get away, but at least he didn't punch her out like she has to him.
But fighting an fully grown Griffin? Psh hold my beer.
that's rich, coming from your kind, BLOOD FOR THE MOTHAFUCKING BLOOD GOD!!!!!!