Cloudsdale was at its peak of production, from rainbows to clouds and snowflakes and every shade of weather between. However, in the midst of their finest hour, the factory producing rainbows explodes, and with it, the other factories. Many pegasi were injured in the explosion, even the Wonderbolts won't fly for a long time after this. What will become of Cloudsdale, is far too terrifying to imagine.
The story is told in the point of view of Nurse Redheart, as she investigates the not-so-normal-for-an-explosion-injuries. Mysterious, fresh injuries on pegasus ponies continue to appear, even as they are hospitalized.
Chapters (2)
...read-later
Sorry, I am very picky about spelling and grammar, and I couldn't help but notice that the word should have been spelled "Changeling". The difference being you forgot the "e".
Other than that, great fanfic-- hope to read more chapters in the future!
1603781Oh, thank you so much! I can't believe I didn't catch that myself.
1603788 A common mistake, though I take it that in being a fluent writer like you are it is not one you commonly make.
1603901 Either way, feedback is very helpful, I don't have the best spelling or grammar or someone to review my work.
Good sir, or madam, thank you.
1603915 Sir. And you most certainly are welcome! If, in the future, you're writing more chapters (or other stories) I'd be more than glad to proofread them for you.
1603922 I'll get back to you on that as soon as I finish writing the second.
1603941 Wonderful
Pretty good, cant wait to read the rest
Definitely will be keeping an eye on this!
very interesting-
MOAR!
Hm... I'll definitely be keeping track of this one; just to see where you're going with this.
Hmm... While I am interested in where you plan to go with this concept, this particular chapter felt a bit rushed. Actually... A lot rushed. Many events such as the peculiar accusation of Nurse Redheart stealing Pegasus bones, felt very rushed; almost unnecessary and actually sort of odd. There isn't enough explanation of certain events that certainly need explanation. Without it, it feels incomplete, and unneeded. Another thing would be the amount of grammatical and spelling errors in this chapter that need some fixing. Just some honest, constructive criticism that will definitely help you avoid down votes. If you need help Taxi, you know that I will certainly do so.
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I told you that already.
It's supposed to be rushed, Sparky.
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Nu-uh, don't lie to me, woman.
...Maybe I'm just too much of a perfectionist.
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If this were in third person, then it would be slower, and make more sense, but you are only supposed to know what Redheart does.
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B-Bu-But what about GRAMMAR!? AND SPELLING!? And... GAH!
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Congratulations, you dug yourself a grave, Brand-New-Editor.
Correct it, love. 
... Ah, but what if I end up changing your precious writing style, eh?
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Then I'll fix it.
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Couldn't understand this sentence.
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"I began my long journey(around the block) to my lonely cottage where my impatient puppy would wait by his food bowl, after a tiring day of being dogsat my the lovely mare, Scootaloo. "
Nurse Redheart is referring to Scootaloo as a mare because some children adore when they are referred to as "young adults" or anything a bit older than they are, so she is saying that to please Scootaloo, even though she isn't there, almost as a joke to herself.
It is as Astral Spark said.
Your Grammar really..... well.... sucks!
Do not want to be really harsh, but there were parts of your story where I couldn't understand what the conversation was about or follow the plot. Not only because of grammar mistakes, but also sort of because of a ..... lack of details.
I really wish you would get proofreaders because your concept is th08.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/f/2011/351/4/0/awesome_rainbow_dash_wallpaper_by_bluedragonhans-d4jfj4s.png
Interesting story so far!
I was thrilled to find this in my Nurse Redheart group. I really enjoy reading stories about her, not to mention writing them too! 
I'll be tracking this and reading the next chapter later! 
I don't think the colors come from the Everfree, I blame the rainbow factory. It's more than an Equestrian conspiracy.