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Memories Can Be Replaced

Princess Luna once had her very own special somepony. But after getting sent to the moon for one thousand years will she forget and or replace her lost memory.

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Crystal Secret

Crystal Secret #1 · Oct 15th, 2012 · · ·

Very short and quickly paced.

HyperRandomness

HyperRandomness #2 · Oct 15th, 2012 · · ·

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You've described hardly anything.

Dialogue makes up most of the story. I can hardly tell what anypony is doing or feeling.
Give a bother to describe things. Where are they? What color are they? Are they sweating? Are they happy? Are they mad? Are they arguing? Describe THEM, describe their FACIAL AND BODILY REACTIONS, describe ENVIRONMENT IN PARTICULAR... in fact, describe anything. I'm scrambling for details.

Give it an actual storyline instead of making it all talk.

So, yeah. Go back, put actual effort into it, and then submit it. If you do that, I might consider giving it an actual review and MAYBE an upvote. Maybe.

Operation Brony