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I'm from Brazil, and i eventually plan on bringing crossover Fics to the spotlight. Yeah, i think that's all you need to know...

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After Pinkie Pie opens up her own Entertainment Venue, her friends inexplicably go missing. An intrepid investigator, by the name of Guarding Grape, tasks himself with working at the Place in an attempt at finding out what happened to them, but what he doesn't expect is what horrors lie within those walls...

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Director's Commentary: https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/1040101/pinkies-fun-palace-directors-commentary

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It is rather mess up that Pinkie Pie have just allow her bestest friends to be "sacrificed" by this version of quite possibly William Afton ( Aka Springtrap/Scraptrap/Glitchtrap/Malware/Burntrap. ).

Than just defy him, and tell Twilight and the others the truth before it was too late.

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Well let's just say she tried to resist, but HIS control was too strong

"Sanity and Fear" Bars on his Name Tag? Is that going to be updated during later nights?

And I'm a bit confused that they still mistake regular and innocent security guard ponies as the "murderer" like in the games?

Didn't Pinkie Pie actually killed her bestest friends, but against her will?

I thought they would rather start distrusting and hating her, instead of Grape or the other previous security guard ponies?

"Oh no, no, no!" , Pinkie interrupted, " "You can come too! Come on! Let's go, girls, follow me!" , she said, as she opened the door to the Staff Only Hallway, to the left of the Kitchen Doors. They then arrived to a door on their left, which led to the Storage Room. "I-it's right here! Come on, let's go in!" . "Okay, but can we please not take too long? I still have to feed the animals, and Discord's coming over for a sleepover..." . "Oh, don't worry darling!" , Rarity said, "This will probably only take five minutes! You'll have plenty of time!"

I don't know how somebody powerful like Discord didn't resolve this or find Fluttershy and the others sooner?

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To answer each of the questions

1- I'm not sure, maybe i will, but i'm still unsure.
2- They're only really aggressive towards Grape, as for why, that will be explained later. They mostly left the previous nightguard alone, but they were really freaked out by their behavior, so they left.
3- To quote William Afton in The Silver Eyes, "The dead do forget.", they don't remember exactly who killed them, they only remember that they were killed, with the only exception being Rainbow Dash (who is yet to be introduced), who remembers Pinkie, but doesn't remember her killing her, but instead, trying to save her. (this will be explained later as well.)
4- Discord is busy trying to take care of Fluttershy's animals. He doesn't have a lot of free time anymore. He's so focused on "trying to make Fluttershy proud of him" that he doesn't even think of the possibility of using his magic to find her.

HE DID IT AGAIN
Yes... we were too late... we couldn't stop him...
AS IF TAKING THE LIVES OF OTHERS WASN'T ENOUGH, HE ABUSED THEIR TRUST ON THEIR FRIEND, AND USED HER TO KILL THEM
He must be punished... for what he did to them... I will give them... a gift... I will give them... new life...
LIKE YOU DID TO US
Yes... that is correct...

Cassidy and Charlie ( The children spirits of Golden Freddy and Puppet/Marionette )!!??

So, this story does have a connection with FNAF?

And I'm almost hoping that the Royal Alicorns ( Celestia/Luna/Cadence. ), Discord, Spike, CMC, Shining/Big Mac/Zephyr, Maud/Marble/Limestone, the parents/Granny Smith all get their own revenge/vengeance against the purple p**ck for what he did.

I also just realized that he also jeopardized Equestria's safety because most of the heroes are tragically died.

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To answer the first two questions, yes, it is them. I plan on explaining how they and he ended up in the MLP universe eventually.

For the vengeance part, i'm saving that for a possible sequel

And as for the jeopardizing Equestria's safety part, I'll confirm this now, most of the villains have already been dealt with, or are just straight up dead. For example, Starlight has already been redeemed, Tirek is still stuck in Tartarus, Chrysalis died in this timeline's version of "To where and back again", and Sombra died after this timeline's version of the season 3 premiere. The only villain that is still around is Cozy Glow, but again, i'm saving her for a possible sequel.

Edit: Finished.

Grape woke up screaming from his dream. It had been the same dream from the previous nights, but now he could remember everything about it. He was in a black void, surrounded by ghostly apparitions of the five missing mares, all of them staring at him with hatred in their pitch-black eyes. Suddenly, they lunged at him, all screeching, as flashes of their pained faces flashed in front of him. It was so frightening, that it forced him to wake up. "*Huff* *Puff* What the hay was that?!", Grape asked himself. As he ate his breakfast, he continued to think about it, and eventually, he realized something. "Wait... What if the reason i'm having these dreams has to do with them thinking i'm their murderer?"

He didn't know if that was true or not, but it did make some amount of sense. Maybe they were tormenting them in his sleep because they didn't realize he was innocent. "I need to find a way to communicate to them that i'm not the killer... But how?".

I still don't get HOW they HEAVILY mistake Grape as William!?

I mean, not only is the REAL Killer doesn't even have a pony body of his own, and just possesses Pinkie Pie to do the killing.

Grape himself wasn't even at the restaurant one year ago back then?

I know that being dead and possessing the animatronics messes with your memories, but come on!? Have some common sense?

At least the original five kids have a viable "excuse" to mistake the many innocent security guards with Will. Afton.

Because, at least the five kids vaguely remember that it was him wearing a security guard uniform as a disguise, and was dressed in his Spring Bonnie suit.

The Mane Five doesn't have this excuse, when Grape wasn't even there, and the main villain doesn't even have a body and just possesses Pinkie Pie?

Do you understand my frustration by this?

Oh! Speaking of Twilight, did you know she helped me design the Animatronic's Endoskeletons? Or that she created a mechanism that allows the Animatronic based on me to be worn as a suit?". That part intrigued Grape. What did she mean by that? An Animatronic that could be used like a suit? That was new. "Yeah, Twi always was a bit of a genius... before she... dissapeared... A-anyway! That's all for today! See ya!" *Beeeeeeeeep*

A freaking spring lock suit exist? Twilight WOULDN'T be a genius if she realized how it's a literal death trap of a Iron Maiden those spring locks are! :facehoof:

And it's a deadly coincidence that this suit is specifically for Pinkie Pie?

.............. [ Realization ] OH NO! :twilightoops: :pinkiegasp:

Pinkie Pie is not going to survive this either, does she? :pinkiesad2:

After listening to the message, Grape took out the Spirit Box from under his hat, and turned it on. As soon as he did, garbled static started to come out of it. "Alright time to see if i remember the instructions correctly...", Grape thought to himself, before bringing the Spirit Box closer to his face, and speaking into it. "Hello? Is anyone there?", he asked.

Suddenly, a voice came through the device's speaker. "Yes...", it said. Grape could tell that it was Twilight's voice, as it didn't sound like any of the other Animatronics he'd seen up to this point. "Oh by Celestia! It works!", Grape thought before speaking into the device again. "Ummm... Hello, Twilight... I assume that's who you are... I'm Guarding Grape and-", before he could finish, Twilight spoke again. "Guarding Grape...? Well... It's good to finally have a name... to pin on the one that killed us..."

"What?! No! I'm not the-", before Grape could finish his sentence, Twilight cut him off

"Did you hear that, girls... his name is Guarding Grape..."

Suddenly the voices of the other missing mares came over the speaker. Grape recognized it as the voices of the Animatronics, once again confirming his theory.

"So that's what yer called...", Applejack said, "Ugh... Why does such an awful pony... have such a beautiful name...?", Rarity asked herself, "Why did you do this... to us...?, Fluttershy asked, "Where's Pinkie...? What did you do to her...?!", Rainbow Dash asked, demanding answers.

"No! Listen to me! I'm not the Murderer! I-I don't even know who the Murderer is!", Grape said, trying to explain himself. They didn't seem to believe him.

"Quit playing dumb...!", Dash said, clearly angry. "We know you killed us... And you probably killed Pinkie too...!

"N-no, i swear! I'm not the one that killed you five! You have to believe me!", Grape said, but they wouldn't listen.

"Oh... would you look at the time...", Twilight said, "It's almost 12 AM... I hope you are ready... We are coming for you... MURDERER... MURDERER... MURDERER...".

As soon as she stopped speaking, the Spirit Box stopped working. "W-what?! What's going on?! Did it break?!", Grape thought. He opened the back compartment of the device, discovering that the batteries had inexplicably burst. "What?! But i put those batteries only three hours ago!", he thought to himself. But he didn't have time to worry about that. 12 AM had arrived.

Like I said before, Grape wasn't even there back then?

Plus, He possesses Pinkie Pie, and forced her to kill them. So, I still don't know how they will know not only Pinkie is innocent. But, also learned the very vague prescription of William, when he doesn't even have a original body in the first place!?

Wait? If they got their clue of knowing William being Violet Purple?

Do they heavily mistake Grape, just because he is coincidentally a slightly purple earth pony!!?? 🍇 🟣 :trixieshiftright: :rainbowhuh:

The rest of the night went by, and after one more encounter with Twilight, 6 AM hit, and the haunted Animatronics went back to the stage. Grape was relieved, this was the hardest night yet, so how bad could the next one be, he wondered.

Really, Grape? 🍇

You just had to jinx yourself!? :facehoof:

And believe me, Night Five will definitely not be easier. Or Night Six or even Night 7/Custom Night/20 Difficulty Mode!!! :twilightoops:

"See ya..." , Pinkie said. "Oh, dang it Pinkie!" , she thought to herself, "Now how are you going to tell him? No, Pinkie, don't think that! You can tell him tonight, you just need to be confident, maybe he'll believe you if you tell him the truth."

Considering the fact that he already knows that the Mane Six ARE the animatronics ( Somehow. Still doesn't know about the evolvement of Golden Freddy/Puppet as of yet. ), there is a high chance that he will most definitely believe you.

But, him believing you about your "innocence"? Being possessed by a heartless monster of a iconic mascot horror villain?

It will be a bit harder to believe that, without evidence. But then again, it will be a total danger if you-know-know takes over once again.

It seems it was about time Pinkie blew his whole scheme out of the water. She was done with him, and it was time she told someone what actually happened that day...

Finally! Unlike with Vanny/Vanessa, Pinkie Pie is now going to expose the truth and talking about William Afton.

Comment posted by EnvironmentalText850 deleted April 28th

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Don't worry, just too busy watching YouTube right now.

I will eventually finished what I have to say before today ends.

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To answer each question:

I still don't get HOW they HEAVILY mistake Grape as William!?

There will be an explanation for it. It's kind of stupid, but it's the best i could come up with, unfortunely.

A freaking spring lock suit exist? Twilight WOULDN'T be a genius if she realized how it's a literal death trap of a Iron Maiden those spring locks are!

Twilight's invention is not exactly a Springlock suit. I can say its safer than one (She did think of the potential danger of such a suit, unlike Henry and/or William in the original Fnaf story), as she made sure it was absolutely safe to wear.

Wait? If they got their clue of knowing William being Violet Purple?

Do they heavily mistake Grape, just because he is coincidentally a slightly purple earth pony!!??

No. They mistake him for a different reason. An arguably equally as stupid reason, but a different reason never the less.

You just had to jinx yourself!?

Yes. You know what they say, give your characters a few Ls every now and then.

And believe me, Night Five will definitely not be easier. Or Night Six or even Night 7/Custom Night/20 Difficulty Mode!!!

There won't be a night 6 or custom night. Not a canon one anyway.

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A "stupid reason" you say?

Would Grape rightfully be upset at them for attacking him for a very dumb/stupid reason, and call them out for it?

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Probably yeah. Although i'm trying to come up with a better explanation, because as i said, the current explanation is kinda dumb. :/

"There you are worrying again..." , Monster Dash said. "First off, if he knows that the Animatronics are possessed, he'll believe you, because possessed robots are as believable as saying you were forced to kill your friends by an evil shadow creature, and second, even if he finds out, who cares! At least you got the truth out there, which means, others will know of his *existence*!"

It makes some sense of logic for if you're believing possessed robots, then you could rightfully believe the possession by an pure evil spirit.

And secondly; That means that the likes of Discord, Celestia/Luna/Cadence, and the Mane Six's families will finally know what's going on, and will hopefully all work together to find a way to take Him down permanently!

While she wasn't able to tell the truth to Grape, Pinkie did record a message saying that she wanted to talk after his shift. Then she left the office, and went into the Storage Room. She took out her own Animatronic, as well as it's Blueprints. Pinkie had remembered how Twilight said that, when she was making her Animatronic, she had to install two mechanisms on it. One for switching between robot and suit mode, and one to prevent the other mechanism from malfunctioning. It was time to make some alterations to that.

Oh, a plan to not only finally tamed the Animatronic Mane Five's hostile behavior, but also using your own animatronic suit to your advantage. Nice~~~ Pinkie.


P.S. and a sequence feels like FNAF 4 with the Nightmare Animatronics. But this time, their friendly allies and some sort of pretending to be psychologists to ease Pinkie's mental/emotional guilt?

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Correct! This entire chapter was mostly based around FNaF 4. As for what Pinkie is planning to do with her Animatronic... You'll see... ;)

Also, today's my Birthday! That's pretty cool, right?

When Grape arrived home from his shift, he immediatly went to bed, as usual. As soon as he started sleeping, he had the same nightmare he had the previous three days, only this time, it was worse.

He was once again in a dark, seemingly endless void, surrounded by ghostly apparitions of the five missing mares, who then lunged at him, with faces filled with hatred. Except, the dream didn't end when they lunged at him, instead, they started to rip him apart. Despite it being a dream, Grape could somehow feel everything as the apparitions started to forcefully remove his limbs and insides. He woke up screaming, sweating like he was in the middle of a desert.

By this point, he will be so tired of this BS and just kick all of their asses.

Despite being very messed up nightmares, this is still his own mind. And would imagine to defend himself and actually tear them apart as karma at least.


P.S. And I just realized something; Where the Hell is Luna?

She deals with nightmares, so why doesn't she finally show up and actually see the real truth of how the Mane Five become tormented spirits and are wrongfully torturing an innocent pony like Grape?

Spooky's living room was relatively normal looking. Grape had expected it to be full of paranormal trinkets and supposedly haunted objects, but it had none of that. Instead, the only thing that related to the paranormal was a framed picture of Spooky, and three other ponies, all holding ghost detection devices. "Who are those guys?" , Grape asked. "Oh! That's my old ghost hunting team." , Spooky said. "We used to hunt for ghosts together, but we disbanded due to the fact that we all wanted to do our own things. I still keep contact with them though, they're cool guys. So, you said you wanted to talk about ghosts and dreams, right?"

Pony Ghostbusters? Or those regular guys from paranormal ghost hunting shows?

"Alright. So... You know the five missing mares?", Grape said, a bit nervous. "Well, yes, I heard of what happened. What about them?", Spooky asked. "Well... I think their ghosts are tormenting my dreams.", at this remark, Spooky raised an eyebrow. "Ummm... Okay... What do you mean?", he said taking a sip from his coffee.

"You see, I've had this dream for four days now, where the five of them attack me and-", before he could continue, Spooky projectile-spat his coffee all over the floor in shock. "F-FIVE OF THEM?!", he asked, clearly surprised. "Uhhh... Yeah. Is that... not "normal"?", Grape asked, a bit confused. "Listen, Grape, I've heard of ghosts entering other ponies dreams, usually only one, at most, two. But FIVE?! That's off the scale!", Spooky said. "How in Tartarus did you get five ghosts to invade your dream?!", he asked, clearly shocked. "I... I don't know! It just happens...", Grape said, not understanding it either.

I hope the Mane Five feel like total A-holes when they finally realized that Grape is just innocent this whole time. While the real killer is actually possessing poor Pinkie.

And have a epiphany, thinking they are probably no better than him for tormenting innocent victims.

"W-well... In any case...", Spooky said, regaining his composure. "You said the ghosts were that of the missing mares, how do you know it's them?", he asked, curious.

"Well, you see... It's because I may have figured out what happened to them... I think they were murdered.". Grape explained his theory to Spooky, that the missing mares were killed by somepony, and that their spirits somehow managed to possess their Animatronic counterparts. He also explained that they insisted that he was their killer, despite him being innocent. "Hummm... Interesting.", Spooky said. "Now, I don't know exactly if your theory is correct. But if it is, I may know why they think you're their killer."

I'm actually surprised that Grape only revealed all of this to this OC Ghost Hunter? But not actually informing the Mane Five's own family, and other friends/acquaintances like the three alicorn princesses, Spike, Discord, Starlight, Trixie, etc.....?

At the mention of this, Grape perked up a bit. "Really? What is it?"

"You see Grape, from what I've learned, the ghosts of murder victims usually have trouble remembering what their killer looks like, with only a few rare exceptions.", Spooky said. "I don't exactly know why, but it's as if their minds try to "erase" the full image of what the killer looks like, possibly as some sort of strange defense mechanism against trauma. This causes the spirits to only remember vague details of their killer's appearence, such as their eye color, size, voice, and gender. It's possible whoever killed them shared one or more aspects of their appearence with you, and that is causing them to mistake you as their killer, despite your innocence. As for the dreams, it could be because they're trying to warn you to not come back."

"Well, how do I tell them i'm not their killer, because I tried to tell that to them, and it didn't work!", Grape said, hoping for a good answer.

So, this is your "explanation"? This isn't really stupid or dumb like you first thought!?

Because, you do realize that this is exactly what I actually said and theorized on why they wrongfully think Grape🍇 is the Killer, just because of his coincidentally slight purple skin appearance?


And it's also the same explanation of why the original five ghost kids wrongfully attacked the other night guards in the original FNAF series. Just because He is coincidentally also wears a night guard uniform while using his Spring Bonnie suit.

History is literally repeating itself?

But it seems those prayers fell on deaf ears, as this night would prove to be the most difficult one yet...

Welp, I did warn him not to tempt Murphy.

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To answer each question (In no particular order):

I hope the Mane Five feel like total A-holes when they finally realized that Grape is just innocent this whole time. While the real killer is actually possessing poor Pinkie.

And have a epiphany, thinking they are probably no better than him for tormenting innocent victims.

I'm actually brainstorming the dialogue for that scene as we speak.

Where the Hell is Luna?

She cannot interfere with these dreams due to their paranormal nature. Even if she tried to, the dream has a barrier to prevent anyone from interrupting it. (Can you tell i'm making some of these explanations on the fly yet?)

I'm actually surprised that Grape only revealed all of this to this OC Ghost Hunter? But not actually informing the Mane Five's own family, and other friends/acquaintances like the three alicorn princesses, Spike, Discord, Starlight, Trixie, etc.....?

He either doesn't know about them, or hasn't thought of contacting them, Atleast not yet. Also, how the hell would he even contact the Princesseses as just a normal-ass guy? And also, how would you feel if some guy suddenly called you up and said: "Hey uhhh i know what happened to your daughter, uh she got killed and is currently possessing a robot", like, would you believe that? (Sorry if this one came off as rude, that was not my intention)

So, this is your "explanation"? This isn't really stupid or dumb like you first thought!?

Because, you do realize that this is exactly what I actually said and theorized on why they wrongfully think Grape🍇 is the Killer, just because of his coincidentally slight purple skin appearance?

It is not because of his skin/coat. It's because of something else. And yes, looking back, i was kinda harsh on myself.

Pony Ghostbusters?

Yes! Glad you caught that reference. They didn't have the guns though. :/

Edit: I'm done. And Happy Mother's Day. 💐 ❤️ 🤗

This confused Grape. Did she already know the Animatronics were possessed? Why didn't she tell him earlier? He had so many questions he'd ask Pinkie. It was hard for him to keep count of them all.

Yeah, it's a bit of a long story.

Quickly, he pulled back the curtains to the corner she was supposed to be in. There was nothing in there. And then, he remembered something about the room. It had two doors, one that led to the Main Party Room, and one that led to the Stage. He had entered through the one from the Party Room, and that door was now locked. Suddenly, he realized what just happened. They had tricked him into trapping himself.

Damn! Hate to say it, but that was actually really clever. IF only it was the Real Murder that fell for this.

"AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHH!" , Grape screamed, before Twilight punched him right in the face, knocking him out.

At least, he didn't get bitten in the head, and lose his frontal lobe as a over cliche.

"N-no i swear! I didn't do it!", Grape pleaded. "I never killed anyone! In fact, why do you all think i'm the killer anyway? What exactly about me gives you that idea?"

"Your... eyes...", Fluttershy responded.

"...W-what?", he asked, confused by that response.

"Ya have the same eyes as our killer...", Applejack said. "That same shade of... purple..."

"Wh-what?!", Grape said. He couldn't believe what he just heard. "You do realize there's other purple-eyed ponies out there, right?!"

"Well yes, Darling...", Rarity responded. "But for what reason a purple-eyed pony would want to work here... other than to admire their twisted handiwork...?"

Grape was speechless. Were they seriously so blinded by their rage that they'd completely dismiss anything he said as lies? He didn't know how to feel. Angry? Scared? Confused? A mixture of all three?

"Do you even realize what you are saying?!", he asked, angrily. "I'm telling you! I'm not the killer! I never killed any-"

Seriously, it was actually the eyes!?

I thought it was just his purple color in his body this entire time?

And he is rightfully pissed about this very terrible misunderstanding.

"Ummm... can we please try something a little less... brutal...?", Fluttershy asked.

"What...?", Rarity asked, confused.

"It's just... maybe we shouldn't make him suffer too much...", she replied.

"Fluttershy... he killed you...!", Rainbow Dash said. "How could you even say such a thing...?"

"Well yes...", she replied, somewhat sheepishly. "But i thought... maybe there could be a less brutal way... to kill him..."

Wow, Fluttershy. Even if Grape 🍇 isn't really the real killer.

You still want to give him a merciful death? Wow, you're Kindness is really something.


Although, if she all finally knows the truth, and officially met the REAL Killer.

I mean, if you all have known what he actually did back on Earth, especially to the poor kids from the very beginning, other characters getting caught in a crossfire from the various games, Vanessa, etc....


Fluttershy, I won't blame you if you have no remorse for him anymore. Because somebody's kindness against a really, really, pure evil, and dark heartless being like him, should have a limit, right?

"Well Fluttershy... there's not a lot of options...", Appleack said.

"I have an idea...", Twilight said, as she turned towards a shelf filled with spare endoskeleton heads.

"And that is...?", Rarity asked.

"He shall suffer the same fate... AS US...!", Twilight responded, levitating one of the spare heads with her magic.

Grape tried to say "What?!" in confusion, but because his mouth was held shut, it came out as a "Hmmmph?!". He could only watch as Twilight approached with the spare head.

"Don't worry...", Twilight said. ""This won't hurt a bit... I promise..."

Wait a minute, this is actually WAY MORE BRUTAL to to die, considering all the FNAF Deaths.

So what you basically did is lying to Fluttershy, and make her option of a "merciful death" very redundant.

Sheesh Twilight, your anger has truly been blinding you, especially that Grape 🍇 is the wrong pony stallion.

"Pinkie...?! You're... still alive...?!", Twilight asked, as she dropped the spare endo head on the ground.

"Yes! It's me, Pinkie! Now please, let him go! He's not the one who killed you!", Pinkie said.

"Wait... Did he lie to you too... saying he wasn't... the killer...?", Dash asked.

"What?! No! He didn't lie to me!"

"Then how do you know... he's not the killer...?", Applejack asked

"BECAUSE I KNOW WHO DID IT, AND IT'S NOT HIM!"

At this, everyone in the room looked at Pinkie, dumbfounded by her words. Grape in particular was the most surprised by this. He couldn't believe what he just heard.

"So does this mean... we've been tormenting... the wrong pony... the whole time...?", asked Rarity, slowly realizing what this meant.

"You were... tormenting him?!", Pinkie said, horrified at the thought.

The room fell silent. The five mares came to a realization. They had tormented an innocent pony, and tried to kill him for five nights, thinking he was a murderer.

"Oh... Oh Celestia... what are we doing...?!", Twilight said, guilt overcoming her.

"So... i guess he wasn't lying... after all...", Rainbow Dash said, looking back at Grape.

"Oh... we've been awful to him...", Fluttershy said meekly.

"How could we've been so blind...? Oh... we're so sorry... dear... here... let me untie you...", Rarity said, as she started to unravel Grape's restraints.

"I'll help too...", Applejack said. "It's the least i can do... to help ya..."

"Oh... And before i forget..., Twilight said, as she released Grape's mouth, allowing him to speak again. "I hope this can count as an apology..."

"I'll... uhhh... think about it.", he said, a bit of uneasiness still in his voice.

Well, well, well.

They finally learned the truth, and glad that they realize that they screwed up very badly.

Making them think that they are no better than the previous MLP Villains/Baddies they have faced in the past.

As for Grape, I hope that he won't forgive them so easily. Considering the nightmares and the many terrible nights.

The Animatronic Mane Five really need to make it up to him.

Everyone was shocked. No one could believe what they had heard. Even if it wasn't of her own free will, the thought that Pinkie, one of the friendliest ponies in all of Ponyville, would kill somepony, was downright preposterous.

Sheesh, you're lucky you all haven't seen Cupcake then. Or other MLP Horror/Creepypastas concerning about Pinkie Pie or even your dark/evil selves.

"Now... Where was I? Ah yes!"[/color

Before anyone could react, he stabbed Pinkie Pie right in the chest.

You forgot to fix the color text.

Also, you got me kidding me, he finally got Pinkie too!? :facehoof:

"NO!" , Grape yelled, as he regained his senses. He quickly rushed to Pinkie's aid, trying to help her, but it was too late. Pinkie was dead.

Dang it, I thought she wasn't going to die!? :fluttercry: :flutterrage:

But, I guess she would be rejoin her friends like this. :pinkiesad2:

"Oh no..." , Twilight said.

Wrong color, you're using Pinkie's color.

Pinkie's body started to change. Her once light pink coat, turning into a sickly purple, her puffy mane "deflating", and turning a shade of violet, then her guts suddenly went back inside her, and the gaping slash wound in her torso closed. Then, her eyes opened, and rolled back into her sockets, as they became pitch black. Then, her body stood up, as "she" started standing on her hind legs. Then her eyes rolled back into place, revealing two, glowing white pupils. And then, "she" smiled, with an unnatural, wide, toothless grin, that nopony, not even Pinkie herself, could pull off. Her Cutie Mark had also changed. Instead of Three Balloons, two blue, one yellow, it was now a purple circle, with two white dots, and a small, black, semicircle. It looked like some sort of face. "Pinkie...?", Twilight asked. Then, he spoke...

"I'm... back..."

Wait........

Aw Hell Naw!!!! :twilightangry2:

"I'd rather *explain* this to you somewhere else..." , she said. "But my friends deserve to know the truth as well. *Sigh* ... Here goes nothing..."

"WHAT?!", everyone said in unison.

This is a lot better.

Suddenly, a figure started to materialize from the fog. It was a tall figure, standing upright, with claw like fingers on it's hands, and completely featureless feet. It's eyes were white with black veins, and the colors of it's irises was black, with white pupils. It had a strange, purple, badge-like symbol on the left side of it's chest, and a wide, toothless mouth, which glowed purple.

Here he is: The Man behind the slaughter.

WILLIAM FREAKING AFTON!!!!!!!!

Poe Dameron: Somehow, He has come back. AGAIN!

Before Pinkie could finish, the murderer caught her by the throat, and lifted her up into the air. His eyes started glowing purple, confirming once and for all, he *IS* the killer.

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Thanks for pointing that out! I'll fix it once i get home. (I'm at school right now)

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There. It should be fixed now.

By the way, can i ask you something?

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Should i start a blog for people to share fanart? If thats even possible on this site, that is. Also, when i'm done, should i make a blog that is basically a "Director's commentary", where i relate my thought process and reveal some behind the scenes stuff?

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I think you can share different fanart stuff.

But, I don't know about "Director's Commentary" Blog? Never seen that before with other stories?

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Its more of me just explaining how exactly it got to this point. Like, what inspired me to create this fic, the many ideas i came up with for it, some scrapped content, you know?

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Alright, it seems likes you can do that as well in a Blog.

It's just this is probably the first time I seen a author make their stories' "Director's Cut/Commentary" in a Blog? Or if I do not remember?

Usually, other's done it in their Author's Notes or something similar.

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Yeah, just give me some time to wrote my responses to the last two chapters you have recently just made.

I'm busy with real world stuff.

"Ah... I see... Anyways... the reason why you can't move on... is because he is not dead yet..."

I fixed it.

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Thanks for pointing that out! It should be fixed now

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The Director's Commentary is out! Check it out once you have the time.

Tough read of all time though.... colors are the worst... had to keep switching between dark mode and light mode... it's awful.... for the story it's decent.

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Do you want me to edit the colors to make it easier for orhers to read?

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it's the best course of action. sometimes people do use color for color blind but what's the point if white mode is black and dark mode is white... it just doesn't make any sense to use color...

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I originally did it to help distinguish who was speaking/thinking. But i guess you're right

Cool story
Wonder if there's gonna be a sequel (well its probably "when there's a sequel" but sometimes fics don't make a sequel even if they make a sequel hook ) but this is likely to make a sequel just have a gut feeling with this one
Admittedly it feels a bit rushed in some parts but the epilouge was the best part

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Yeah that's exactly how i feel about it in some parts. As for the sequel part, since im currently working on a different story, it'll probably be a while before i write it. If you want to see my ideas for a sequel, check out the director's commentary.

Excellent story lad! I can't wait for the sequel! If I may inquire, but what is the rarity's music box music? Keep up the good work!

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I imagined it to be Swan Lake, like the one from that FNaF 3 minigame. And the music box that plays before the jumpscare in chapter 8 would be a music box rendition of the MLP theme song

Oh, God...
Coloured text! The spookiest thing of them all!

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