In a tender and heartfelt tale, follow the journey of two mares, Vinyl and Octavia, as they navigate the intricate melodies of life and love. As their shared passion for music intertwines their destinies, they face unexpected challenges that test the limits of their bond. Through moments of joy, sorrow, and profound connection, they discover the enduring power of music to heal and transcend the boundaries of time. This is a story that explores the beauty of human connection, the resilience of their spirits, and the transformative nature of love in the face of life's obstacles.
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I haven’t read it yet, but YES!!!
Only criticism I have is, where the hell were her kids or their grand kids during vinyl's funeral?
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They'd be adults by then, and away from the parents;
As I don't know how fast news travel in the MLP Universe, I don't know how I'd address that.
This was a pretty good story. You tried to do quite a lot with this and tackle some heavy things, but I'd say your execution was pretty solid. Your pacing was good, given the style you were going for, and you managed to be heartfelt without straying into sappy territory. I will say that you had some mechanical issues here and there, and that your dialogue often felt stiff and awkward, but that didn't detract from the final product too much. Good job overall!
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Thank you Very Much
Can you give me some hints?
Keep in mind that my first language isn't English.
And in the part where : Vinyl says "She's late, There will be no class today, You can go home" it's lost and out of context on purpose.
I'm back in writing after years of pause.
I don't even know why I decided to do write again.
Nowadays, I no longer read as much literature as I used to.
I'm considering a full re-write;
The overall story would remain the same but I'd like to add depth and details.
as well as something "before" this chapter of their lives start.