Tiaras are Forever

by Skandranon

Chptr 4

The next day at school, Tiara seemed like her same old self, better than everypony around her
attitude, but there was something different about her that her classmates couldn't quite put
a hoof on. Maybe that her comments lacked the underlying insults like usual some started to
think to themselves.

At recess Tiara and Silver Spoon were walking along and chatting, when up ahead the cutie
mark crusaders rounded a corner and were headed right towards them. As they got closer
Sweetie Belle and Scootaloo tensed up, dreading the approaching duo. They both stopped
in surprise and were left mouth's hanging open as Tiara just kept going pass them without
saying anything. Silver Spoon had to speed up as she had been caught by surprise too, when
her friend didn't stop as she had expected her to.

"What just happened?"Sweetie Belle asked her friends in surprise.
"Nothing worth worrying about",Apple Bloom said,"c'mon are we gonna go and get are tree
climbing cutie marks or not?"she shouted running towards some trees on the edge of the
schoolyard.
Her friends looked at each other, then shrugged and ran after her.

When she thought Tiara wasn't looking, Silver Spoon looked over and gave her friend a proud
smile. Tiara did see it though and seeing how much Silver Spoon had dreaded all their teasing
activities, she promised herself she'd never force her friend into doing something she wasn't
comfortable with again.
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A week had gone by since she had visited her mother with the Apples, since then she had
visited Applejack twice to hang out and hear stories of her mother's visits to the Apple farm.
The time spent there was nice but she longed for more so here she was standing nervously
in front of Rarity's boutique working up the courage to go in. Finally she took a deep breath
and marched up to the front door and knocked.
"I'm open, c'mon in!"a voice shouted from inside.

Tiara opened the door and carefully made her way to the main room where she saw Rarity
telekinetically rearranging ribbons on a dress. As Tiara entered she finished and looked up
to see who had come in,"Oh! hi there your............Diamond Tiara right?"at Tiara's nod Rarity
continued,"I'm sorry but Sweetie Belle isn't here right now, she's off crusading with her friends
but I can let her know you stopped by".
"I didn't come to see Sweetie Belle, I came to see you."Tiara said in a hesitant voice.
"Me?"Rarity asked in confusion.
"Yeah, I was hoping you could tell me about your time with my mother"Tiara said, a little
more confidence in her voice.
"Your mother, that would be Sapphire Tiara right?"Rarity said as her voice softened as she
looked down and saw the pink filly nod her head in the affirmative. "What do you want to
know?"
"Maybe you could start with how you met her."Tiara said hopefully.

"Yes I suppose the beginning would be a good place to start, I remember it clearly the
first time I saw her, she had come down from Manehattan for a week to visit her sister, my
mother. I'd never seen a pony before with such..........class, I immediately knew this had
been what I'd always wanted to be like. I'd always rebelled against my parents and their ways
but didn't know why. Looking at her though, the graceful way she walked, the polite and
sophisticated way she talked, It was a revelation to me and I knew this was what a pony
should aspire to be. After that I followed her all over and she was so kind, instead of being
put off and trying to get me to give her time to be alone, she would encourage me and
seemed delighted to spend time with me. I asked her all about high class live and what
it was like and she would tell me in that wonderfully sweet voice of hers. For hours with her
and on my own, I'd practice my enunciation and we'd both get excited together whenever I
pronounced the words perfectly".

Rarity stopped for a minute smiling fondly at the memories,"about a week after she showed
up, she'd been asked by my parents and I to stay longer and had happily agreed, I soon
found I had competition for your mother's attention. Filthy Rich had seen her at his store and
had immediately fallen in love, he constantly stopped by and courted my aunt. Soon the both
of us were fighting for her attention and although it sometimes got intense, we never resented
each other and knew that our little back and forth plots were all just harmless pranks without
any actual malicious or hated intent towards each other. I think that's why your aunt never put
a stop to it, she of course could tell what we were both doing and I think she thought it was
cute."Rarity was chuckling to herself and Tiara found herself smiling too.

"Eventually Rich got a little ahead of me when Sapphire accepted his proposal. It was a
wonderful wedding, your mother was absolutely radiant in her wedding dress, they had
already decided they would live in pony ville so I was able to visit her whenever I wanted.
He may of been her husband but I was there so often that I felt like I was more her daughter
than my actual mothers, we would talk and I'd show her my dress ideas and she'd
excitedly show me what jewels and accessories would look good with them. Rich was more
than satisfied to let our affection competition continue, I later found out that besides him of
course liking me too, treating almost like a daughter, there was another reason he was glad
I still spent as much time as possible with his wife. He loved to see her happy but unknown to
me Sapphire always wanted a filly of her own and as Rich and her tried often to get one there
seemed to be something wrong and she started feeling depressed wondering if she would
ever have a daughter of her own. I was kind of a substitute daughter and always brought joy to
her, even if I had known that I would have felt no different not caring why she loved to spend
time with me, just loving that she did. So your father was more than happy to let me compete
for her attention, but when you came along we both didn't have a chance anymore."Rarity
paused for a moment looking down at her attentive audience and smiled.

"As soon as she knew she was pregnant her and Rich came over and told my parents and
I, she was so excited, she was practically jumping around the room. The following weeks your
father and I doted on her as she got bigger and bigger. When you were finally born you could
see her in eyes her dreams had been achieved, she always called you her miracle and I have
yet to see a mare that loved her filly more. At first I'd still come over but more of her attention
was focused on you till she didn't have much time for me anymore. I felt some resentment but
for the most part I couldn't be too upset as loved to see how happy she was and I was soon
busy too as that year I opened shop on my boutique, your father as a birthday gift and thank
you for all I'd done for his wife helped me pay the down payment on this building"Rarity was
smiling as she recounted it all but a slight sadness crept into her voice.

"I still saw your mother now and then but only a few times a week, she promised that we could
see each other more when you started school but then she got sick. Well I'll skip over that we
both lost a great pony that day and I know she'll never be forgotten."Rarity finished.

"Thank you Rarity, I never knew that much about my mom before she had me, would you mind
if I came by tomorrow and hear more about her? I'd like to hear about the contest between you
and my dad and about what my mom taught you"Tiara asked hopefully.
"Of course darling, I'd always have time for her daughter, come over whenever you want".
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Days became weeks and weeks months, Tiara was seen constantly together as the older pony
would tell her stories and they would both work on Rarity's latest designs, Tiara helping with the
accessories and advice on appearance. The two quickly seemed as if they had always been the
closest of sisters. Tiara was happy and content, no longer needing to lash out at others and
feeling a complete sense of completeness with her world that she knew would never end.

The End
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well that finishes it, I hope you liked it. I'll try to fix up the first chapter later on but for now I;m
busy getting another story out of my head, one I hope will be my best. If people request it of me
in the future I might come back and continue this story, there's a little more I could do concerning
Sweetie Belle and how she might feel with how Tiara seems to have taken up her spot as Rarity's
sister. So lmk if any of you want me to pursue that later on and please lmk what you liked and
didn't like about my story, thanks.

Comments

[thewaffler]

This was a good story. I enjoyed the whole bully redemption, self discovery plot you had throughout the story. The grammar is handled well, the formatting is nice and as a whole it's well made, but now that the praise is over her comes the Red Pen or criticisms.

There were several plot points that you brought up only to drop them. There are a lot of missed opportunities. You bring up that Filthy Rich emotionally distances himself from his daughter, yet you never bring it up again or resolve the issue. You have Diamond befriend the Apple family and once more that never comes up again, unless you count Applebloom's one line. There is her lack of bullying the CMC that could be brought up and expanded upon. The fact that Sweetie Belle is Diamond's blood relative (cousin) is never discussed in the fic. One would figure that she would know the name of her close relatives. It feels like a movie where scenes were cut to meet a certain running time and as a result it feels a tad incomplete.

Like I said this is a good story, but with all it's missed opportunities and unresolved issues, it is held back from being a great story.

On a rating scale it would get a 3 out 5.
*** / *****

[Skandranon]

1329116
Thank you, your red pen is appreciated. I especially like how on each of my mistakes you clearly say how
I messed up so I know how I can improve in the future. This was originally just a short story I was doing
because
a.when an idea gets in my head it won't leave till I write it down
b.I wanted something to take a break and do while my next story was coming together in my head
A few of the unresolved you mentioned I did intend to address in the continuation of the story when I came
back to this, others I missed and am glad they were pointed out so I'll also be able to resolve them too
I will keep all this in mind and I believe it will help me in my next story and I would appreciate thewaffler
if when I start my next story if you would read it with the same amount of critism and alert me of any mistakes
I make.
Lastly since somethings sometimes are construed wrong in words let me be sure that you know none of the
above is sarcasm, I truly do appreciate your input, thank you