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For Shy and Dash

Fluttershy's prepared for the biggest challenge to tell Rainbow Dash how she really feels . . . how could that go?

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Starswirl the Beardless

Starswirl the Beardless #1 · Sep 23rd, 2022 · · ·

I'm going to assume that this is your first story, and if so, congratulations. That being said, this does feel like a first story. This felt very fast-paced, not helped by the large number of short sentences you used. I really think you should have slowed this down, added more detail, and spent some more time proofreading on this. If you had done that, I think this could have been pretty good.