It was late evening, shortly after Jonathan’s first lesson and two large alicorns were sitting together in a room in Canterlot Castle.
“To be honest, Luna, I’m a little worried about our new alicorn. He says he comes from a land of little magic, and as such, he is quite far behind where he should be for a pony of his age. He knows no written Ponish and lacks any magical ability. Not even that which comes instinctual to most ponies.”
“Oh Celestia! Quit your petty worrying! If anypony can get him up to speed, it’s you. Remember, you already run the most prestigious magic school in Equestia. And remember how much you have helped me adjust to modern Equestria!”
Celestia winced slightly at that part.
“I suppose you’re right. But while I can help him adjust to our society, teach him our history and help him learn our written language, I fear that I’m out of my depth when it comes to how to handle his magic. I tried every trick in the book, that lesson, Luna; every trick in the book and nothing has worked! He’s like a newborn foal, he knows nothing of his own powers, or even those that should normally come instinctually to ponies. Luna, he doesn’t even know how to pick things up with his hooves!”
“Sister, remember how low his magical reserves have been. I’m sure it’ll come to him in time, he probably just needs to recharge.”
“But even then, all the ponies I’ve taught magic already had a great magical potential or were already highly proficient in magic from a young age. Jonathan is barely a foal anymore. What will I do when his magic reaches capacity? I fear that I will have to call on outside help for this.”
“Hmm? So who do you have in mind, Twilight Sparkle?”
“Actually, no. Not this time. While Twilight does have near unrivalled knowledge of magic, I fear she may simply run into the same problems as me. You know how she has a tendency to overcomplicate things… I believe our niece, Mi Amore Cadenza will have a better shot at this. If you recall, she was originally a pegasus before she ascended. I know you weren’t there, but seeing her attempts at getting a grasp on her new horn was quite the sight. If anypony knows what it’s like to suddenly have unicorn magic for the first time, it would be her.”
“Of course! She would be perfect for the job, we should write to her at once! Although do you plan on telling Twilight, still?”
“I had already let Cadence know of Jonathan the first time I saw him and confirmed him a true alicorn. She visits next week with Shining and Flurry, although I haven’t yet updated her on the situation as it stands. As for Twilight… I fear what would happen if we were to tell her that an alicorn had suddenly appeared out of nowhere, right here in Canterlot. As much as I trust her, I do not think that Jonthan is quite ready to face the bearers of harmony… Therefore I shall simply inform her that we have a special guest from a foreign country.”
“Tia, when do you actually plan on announcing the presence of our new alicorn in Equestria. I hear that rumours have already started to spread throughout the castle staff, it is only so long until word escapes the castle. You’re not going to be keeping him locked up this whole time are you?”
“I had hoped to keep his status secret for as long as possible, or at least until he can get a proper handle on his magic. Although I do not plan on keeping him ‘locked up’ as you say. A solution is already in the works that will allow him to leave the castle without exposing his alicorn status. Although, I still fear what would happen if word of this reached the Canterlot nobility.”
Luna shuddered at the thought.
“Agreed. He is so not ready for that…”
There was a short pause, in which Celestia quietly sipped on her tea. Luna broke the quiet.
“Say, isn’t Jonathan and Flurry around about the same age now? Do you think that they may become friends?”
“Your right Luna! They are the same age. I do hope they get along when they meet. So, Luna, any progress with finding out more about our young alicorn through the dreamscape?”
“Unfortunately, it seems his magical core hasn’t yet stabilised. I was unable to find his dreamscape at all the first night, due to his low magic levels. And last night, his dreams were unstable. I put what magic I could into it to strengthen them, but they just wouldn’t stabilise and were utterly nonsensical. I do hope that tonight will be different and that I’ll finally be able to find out something from his dreams. His magic levels have nearly recovered.”
“Very well. I wish you good luck in your endeavours dear sister.”
Celestia let out a yawn as she got up on her hooves.
“And I, you. Sleep well dear sister! Sleep well.”
And with that, the two sisters separated for the night.
You’ll have to now have Alternate Universe tag since you have Flurry as the same age as him and Twilight not being the sole ruler of Equestria like the show.
I don’t mind you creating a different take of Equestria since fans are divided how it ended. I guess the M6 will be a little older maybe they have children on their own who probably is like CMC age or younger?
Oh boy forgot Pumpkin and Pound Cake will be the same age to. You have a lot to explore with different ages and stuff.
When I read you have Flurry his age makes me wonder if she’ll take the role to teach him to be a pony? Sorry about to show off an idea I had for a story concept so I always thought it would be a neat fanfic of Flurry heart feeling lonely as a young Alicorn since really there isn’t anyone that is like her. Sure, she definitely will have friends from ponies, yaks, dragons, but having a friend just like her would be special. Your welcome to take the idea for your own after all sharing is nice. If you are thinking of shipping them I would recommend building that over time… maybe friendship and him being nervous around her would be a good idea unless you want to rush it or build it.
I can see Flurry being really excited that there’s another Alicorn her age. Probably accidentally crush him since well her strength is still growing for an Alicorn.
oh i hate the concept of luna so casually invading someone's most sacred privacy
Rushed? Yes.
I like it; not because it is rushed but it really advances the plot.
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I suppose I should make this a point of conflict then. Luna usually justifies this with defending against nightmares. But you raise a valid point. She shouldn't be invading one's privacy just to find out more about them. Hopefully it didn't impact too much on your reading experience, but I will try to incorporate this into the story and have it addressed.
I wonder who was watching him in the previous chapter if Luna couldn't reach his dreams? He definitely mentioned someone was there.
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I forgot what I read in this chapter that gives in a few ideas I never really thought of since chapter 1. Do you recall how some of us or I talked about the concerns he will face with the Nobels? well, I missed this but since he is a young teenager, he is an orphan in this land because I don’t recall if you had pointed that out yet in the story if he has family or not. Since he is trying to figure out how he got here maybe like in the Pokémon Mystery Dungeon games where the human will over time recall memories in the journey.
So, I would bet there would be a battle to adopt him since we know Celestia is setting up him as a foreign visitor but since he is young and if he doesn’t recall he has a family Celestia will have to act for his sake. Like there is a chance that maybe the mare that has been helping him is from Child Services since we barely know her so far. I am sorry I keep forgetting the names anyways I do think they are protecting him so far, but Nobels might find loopholes to get him adopted by somepony... That sounds like an interesting situation.
Another form of love idea would be sisterly love meaning Cadence would adopt the alicorn giving Flurry a sibling since I think she would have wanted to be a big sister all her life like how her dad and aunt are siblings.
Man, Twilight will for sure hear about him and learn English it's what will complete this story lol.
I sense a future Crusaders forming.
Having Cadence steward a new Alicorn vs Twilight doing it is kinda legit. And, as people have already mentioned, the dynamic with Flurry will be very original, I imagine. I don't usually praise Interludes, but I like this one.
Give Moondancer or Sunburst a teaching job.
i wonder what she is going to find out in the dream realm
maybe dream about minecraft
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I like that the author is doing Cadence instead of Twilight. Like it almost sounds like we might not see the M6 for a while which would be a new thing for fimfics. Flurry will be interesting what will happen I think she would be really happy to have an alicorn friend her age.
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Luna peaks into his dreams again and sees Celestia Being Deep.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dmVWvOC_2HU
Or UN Owen Was Ronald
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ViGOQeo3Vt0
Or Gigyas was Ronald.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6P_BvrtuxAI
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yes its a good idea to implement.
i just have a strong view on it that spans over many story's and lunas cannon and non canon behavior.
no impackt on my reading experience what so ever :D
ps: other then im hungry for more
love the storyconcept and the world you are building
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Gah, why I didn’t think of that! That sounds so much fun with a CMC Teenage crusader like duo finding their cutie mark.
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Finally a good game besides Fall Out. What’s with humans in Equestria dreaming of Bethesda games and not anything else
I don't know if Cadence will be the best. Jonathan may have to deal with her trying to setup him with Flurry. She know that one day Shining will be on more. So trying to push Jonathan to Flurry would prevent heart break.. and she is Cadence; the fanon is she is a shipper.
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I seen a fic that had a history of Op-out of her help, but that people forgot about it over the 1000 years.
I think it was a dreamcatcher was how ponies would op-out of her help.
On the other hand a lot see them as goddesses. So who is going to tell off a goddess that can giving you nightmares forever, or a goddess that could burn you and your whole town from a 1000 miles away.
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The author doesn’t have to follow the idea of Cadence being a shipper just because the fandom likes it. I don’t believe that’s what the author is planning since Celestia believes that since Cadance wasn’t a unicorn she would help which I do agree it makes more sense for Cadence to take him in like her own personal student.
There’s plenty of stories that she isn’t like what’s popular when the comics and show don’t really show her acting like that and I don’t think she would setup her daughter with him. Probably Flurry would go to her if she develops love towards Jonathan to get advice.
But ultimately it’s the authors choice on what their story wants to be. The author shouldn’t be force to follow fandom ideals rather make their own story while having fun.
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Luna was the one who attempted to watch him the second night. The dreamscape just wasn't stable enough to gain much from the dream.
1st Night > arrival, no dreams
2nd Night > between meeting and tour, unstable dreams (Luna tried to stabilise it with magic, but Jonathan's own magic core wasn't stable enough to properly support it.)
3rd Night > unexplained magic surge
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Ah, that makes sense. I was starting to wonder if there would be some sort of evil dream creature.
I'm gonna guess that he's still going to freak out when he realizes Luna can see his dreams. :)
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I'll be honest with you, I was looking through the comments to see if someone would reference my story
Also, for the 578th time, noone is forced to marry anyone UNLESS he stallion proposes.
Oh I really hope Flurry is going through her Goth phase!
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And it's a great story. I look forward to seeing how it and this story turn out.
I am surprised their are no talks of finding this place he comes from and maby return him, for all they know his parents are looking for him.
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Very good point, I hadn't considered it. I should probably take that into account.
My thoughts on this chapter…
“As you already know.”
Well if she already knows, why the fuck are you repeating it?
I can’t help but think this is some of the worst, most stilted, unnatural dialogue I’ve read so far.
I get the need to check back in with Sun-Butt and Mooncheeks, but this needs an editing pass. Nobody talks like this outside of a courtroom. And even there this is clunky and expository.
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Thank you for the feedback. I can definitely say that dialogue is not one of my strong points and that dialogue heavy areas may experience a drop in quality.
Although may I ask what your opinions might be on the story as a whole so far? Is it good, bad, just "okay"?
I think I might do as you say and add this to the edit queue alongside Ch:09.
I like how you told so much about their world with this one sentence.
He clearly came past the last episode of the show, but events didn't went the same and this Celestia wasn't as stupid as she's big and white, so she didn't threw the crown at clearly not ready Twilight yet or gave it only temporary to go on vacation. I mean, she deserves one hell of a vacation considering how long she had to deal with it alone, but retirement wasn't really an option yet.
At this stage, other worlds are not unprecedented.