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The saga of the Twilight Lands

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The sun hasn't moved for ages, trapping the world in a morbid dichotomy. Caught between the burning, parched land of Day and the dark, frozen land of Night, there remains only a thin strip of liveable land. This is the story of these lands and their inhabitants, the Lands of Twilight.

I apologize in advance but English is not my first language.

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Proofread by Sebastian99, many thanks to him

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Calliope Pony

Calliope Pony #1 · Nov 16th, 2021 · · ·

It is difficult to write in a language that is not your first. You have a very good basis for a story here, but there are some places where it is a little hard to read. You might want to find an editor to help you with some of the grammar and vocabulary. I like what you have written, it just needs a little editing.

Oliver tree

Oliver tree #2 · Nov 16th, 2021 · · ·

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Thanks for your comment
Indeed, an editor would be a good idea. Do you know who and how to ask for one?

Chibalt

Chibalt #3 · Nov 16th, 2021 · · ·

A good concept for sure, but it really needs an editor. A lot of strange wordings, repetitions, lack of specification as to who's doing or saying what, the like.

Calliope Pony