My Little Pony: Friendship is Heaven

This is an alternative story to Friendship is Fate. I absolutely recommend you start there first. Friendship is Fate

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the other sans

the other sans #1 · Sep 10th, 2012 · · ·

but I thought it couldn’t be wrong if doctor said it.
I swore that oat as a foal.
Certainly, if nobody knows that you are a Master
But if other Servants are bear, Servants are able to sense them
I didn’t even realize Rarity’s real identity, and she foes to the same school as I do
but it’s “risk but certain” according to Saber

1. Forgot to capitalise.
2. Oath.
3. Nopony.
4. Near.
5. Goes.
6. Uhh... Risky but certain perhaps?

Magnum the Critic

Magnum the Critic #2 · Sep 10th, 2012 · · ·

the word count....It's.....it's......

Thespurgin

Thespurgin #3 · Sep 13th, 2012 · · ·

1252587 So? I've chewed on a 15K word chapter before, and I think I even had a 20K chapter once.

I like this story, but I have to say that your descriptions of who's speaking can get a bit convoluted and hard to follow. Just my opinion, but something to watch for later. Wait... why is this not faved... AH! you sly weasel. You branched the storyline!

Kujo Blaze