AN: No this is not part of the Ponyfall Series and I had this idea way before the pony fall series. So please do not compare this story with the other,
Alex is a typical Brony who lives in Branchberg. He has an average life until one night, someone...or somepony winds up in his backyard. Now he must find out how they got here and try to find a way back home before something else happens to them, Join Alex on a search that has love, action, adventure and even comedy. This is Ponies Trapped on Earth!
AN: This story has been forming around my head for a while and I finally have been getting around to it. Anyway give it a shot before turning it down.I will add character tags when neccessary. There will be a lot going on.
Chapters (3)
not bad... the story has potential. I like it.
Looks interesting, waiting for more. Pony on Earth stories are hard to write believably, I hope you can pull it off.
Just a quick note about your description before I read the story.
I've never read Ponyfall, so obviously I can't make any comparisons. Unfortunately, when you write a story that's similar to another, comparisons will be made, even if you had the idea first.
Also, shameless self-inserts are usually a bad sign because they're oh-so-often done poorly. Advertising it will only discourage others from reading your story, even if it is well-written. Giving yourself a pseudonym doesn't help.
Anywho, I'll have more to say once I finish reading.
Oh my...
1) Slow. Down. Build a scene, build the character, and build suspense. Especially at the beginning. Right now you're just dumping stuff.
2) Show, don't tell. In the first paragraph you just tell us a bunch of stuff about yourself. That's boring. Show us who you are through your actions and the way you interact with others. That's interesting.
3) Some grammar stuff, not too much.
4) Specifics:
-Oh did I forget to mention I am a brony.
Um... no, you just said that in the previous sentence. "I watch MLP." Kinda gives it away, especially to a brony audience.
-Now some of you are wondering "how do I have a girl friend."
Um... no, we're all bronies and pegasisters ourselves, so we don't think bronies are antisocial rejects or whatever. We all know MLP fans are capable of normal human relationships.
-Well she is a pegasister and has a lot in common with me. So deal with it.
We're not surprised or offended... so what is there to deal with? Also, that first sentence would be a good opportunity to apply my second point up there.
-I followed the trail the shooting star left and found…an alien with a ray gun and C4 explosives! JK. It was Twilight Sparkle
First, IMspeak shouldn't be in a story unless it's written from the point of view of a teenager who doesn't know the difference between text language and English. And even that would be pushing it. Second, what's with the psych-out? Third, why didn't you make this suspenseful? It's like technicolor ponies just fall out of the sky every day in Alex's world.
-Remember, I hate clop.
Funny, I don't recall you ever mentioning that. Makes it a bit difficult to remember.
-Yea Kyle I trust you
Looks like you missed one when you replaced that name with Alex.
Yeah, not much else I have to say. The concept is interesting enough, but I thought the execution was lacking a little. Hope this helps!
1216717 Thank you for thinking it is interesting
1216839 I hope I can pull it off too. I know where I am going with it but it is going to be hard.
1217141 1) well Alex's mindset is fast and not conformed. It is really scattered. I will try to edit this first chapter after the second one.
2) Okay I can do that. It is just I am the type of guy who likes to give details but too much can be a problem.
3) Using Word really helps with grammar and spelling problems.
4) People can watch the show and still not be a brony. I see where you are going with that thought.
It is not to you guys but it is a more of the hater group I am refering to who says that Bronies have no girl friends and are gay. So it is not directed at you...maybe I should make it clearer and say hater instead.
On this note I said Alex suffers from insomnia and his brain can be a little fried when he is sleep deprived. So saying random stuff like an alien with a C4 can sometimes pops into his head at the moment.
Okay get rid of remember.
Previously the character's name was going to be Kyle and then I realized that there are too many Kyle's who are popular on the site. I changed them all to Alex so that way it wouldn't get confusing when refering to the story.
I like all types of critizsm...as I told someone to tear it up with a chainsaw, so no worries
Note: I suck at writing. My major is in design which doesn't help me when it comes to writing. If you see my other stories then you can see how aweful this can be.
1220755 Wait till the next chapter. More shit will happen.
Well chapter 2 is done. Anyway If you guys like it then leave a like and a favorite. If not then tell me what to do to make it better. Also check out my other stories and leave a watch if you want to hear me talk about random things about ponies. Also I need Proof readers for...a lot of my stories and possibly anyone who wants to help me create a group to help troubled writers. If you want to know more than leave me a PM. Anyway Yuki Harima is out!
Moar plz
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MOAR!!!!!! Oh wait why am I asking for more. Well since Pinki Pie insists.
I really liked the talk from behind the door ideea thingy. I think it is the first time I see it being used in a fic of this genre.
Anyway great start, keep it up!
1304389 thank you...the next chapter might take a while since I am creating another story. I am half way done with it in oder to be published
Take your time bro.:)
1423278 thanks you for favoriting it
...I really want to try to write several stories but I am spreading myself thin, also I can't focus when I write as my mind jumps around for different subjects
Good things are worth waiting for,
Excited to see what happens next. 
1486674 thanks...just prepare for some freaking out...
Haha can't wait.
1487012 thanks