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Get drunk => Confess Love => Adopt a Foal
Ok, now this, this comes of as rushed.
1306034 lol have you read Turmoil?
This chapter is between "Memories" and "Child", these happens several years after the events of Discovery and they decided to adopt a foal by the end of "Memories"
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read it after leaving the comment, well, some of it.
Stopped when ireached this part, didn't think it was as good as the first part, too rushed, story felt disconnected and i didn't like the way Raritys parents were charaterized, also, not a fan of homophobia in mlp fics.
1307288 That's me I'm just projecting how I felt when I first started telling people I was gay I thought people were more homophobic than they are. And yes it is rushed but the foal is like two years after they get together the plot just skipped past those years.
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Understandable, but i just get sick with so much bigotry shoehorned into the MLP verse, some here and there, fine and understandable, but it's way too prominent imo.
Also, i really dislike it being stuffed into canon characters, especially ones who, in their one appearance, showed nothing but unconditional love for their daughters.
1308872 not his only appearance
1308872 plus this is my first time really writing anything outside of school so I wouldn't expect perfect plot development or character introduction.
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Rarity's parents appeared in more than one episode?
Drawing a blank here, was it during season 2 ending? i seem to never have time to watch it at length, i know the basic plot, but haven't watched the whole thing (i fail as a brony
1308919 sorry my bad I mistook your sentence and yes I know but some people are like that they think their children are perfect and when they find out something bad especially about their sexuality they can lose it I've seen it happen before so it's that far out of a possibility.
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That's what the critique is for, not saying you need to follow everything people tell you to do (now there's a certain recipy for disaster), but without critique, artists can't really advance.
And i doubt i could write anything better (i don't write), but i do read a lot.
The timeskip was the main issue in storytelling, it came out of nowhere, and there was so much more for the story to say before it would have been necessary, especially after the thing with Rarity's parents.
Although the main reason i dropped the story was that i disliked the treatment of Rarity's parents, the timeskip did not help, as any possibly aftershocks and fallout from the "incident" was not dealt with, and in my opinion, something so big would deserve more exploration.
Now, it can be explored later, either through flashbacks or as a delayed reaction, but doing so can loose you readers (like you did with me).
1308945 Mhm I understand and I knew you weren't just trying to be mean or whatever and I do appreciate your opinions.