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After defeated Xehanort and brought Sora back. He, Donald, & Goofy will continue their adventure at Equestria, where they meet new friends, new magical places, discover ancient secrets and facing new villains.

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I'm not into Kingdom Hearts, so I can't help you with that, but your grammar is shockingly poor. For example:

After defeated Xehanort and brought Sora back.

After who defeated Xehanort?

Have you considered getting an editor?

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Well, Sora and his friends defeated him

10167064 A better way to word the description would be this:

After Xehanort was defeated and Sora was brought back, he, Donald, & Goofy continue their adventures in Equestria, where they will meet new friends, find new magical places, discover ancient secrets, and face new villains.

Thanks wave your the best.

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I should thanking you, your ideas are awesome

This is pretty good. I like it.

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