Really looking forward to how far this goes. Has the potential to keep going for a long time. Even more so since the fic seems to get slowly better as more chapters come out.
10168365 I hope to keep it for a while but not too too long unless there is a reason. I know there will be more and more creatures who will come to challenge Spike and Emerald and both will come to see the darker side of some ponies kind of like how Rarity did in the fashion world. I like this chapter a lot because I got to add a bit on how to accept criticism. Basically a few writing lessons from me will be in this story haha.
10168439 Yeah I mean she's like an aunt to him so I see him wanting to make something to impress her.
Hmm that's a good question as Chrysalis would have definitely noticed the love intake and may try to use this to her advantage. Thorax is king by this time though and has his channeling. We may see him in the next five ish chapters,
10168443 I see I just love their interaction and bond pretty much \ovo/
Would be hilarious if Chrysalis got interested in the author especially with what intimate stuff she would see in the book. Heck I can see Ocellus enjoying the book a lot(and being adorable and embarrassed and such when its brought up or something. Yeah she strikes me as adorably bugghorse and stuff)
10168452 That or she would try ponynapping him to make him write only for her haha
Hmm I'm not sure about the school being created yet, but Ocellus being the one that brings the book to the rest of the hive would be a good way to include her and yeah she does seem to be that type!
My biggest problem is the strange intimate scenes. While enticing and enjoyable, they seemed to have been written in a way that may have revealed that the author may yet have had intercourse as there were several parts where the reactions were quite right.
This indicates that Luna thinks he HAS had sex. I think that you may have meant
My biggest problem is the strange intimate scenes. While enticing and enjoyable, they seemed to have been written in a way that may have revealed that the author may yet....TO..... have had intercourse as there were several parts where the reactions were....NOT.... quite right.
10168557 Hmm I may go back and fix that tomorrow. I fully believe that Celestia has done the do but Luna is debatable. Maybe she has but I'll go with no snd we'll see more of what she thinks. I think she was trying to not offend him. I'll fix it though thanks!
10168577 Well true I intended it to be one way but everyone makes a story a bit there and to be honest my mind is a jumbled mess so even my reasoning for things isn't always sound.
10168465 Is it a bit strange that I ship Spike with Luna/Nightmare Moon and Chrysalis the most? I just like those 2 shippings(well, technically 3) a lot.
I can see Thorax's reactions about the book would be hilarious as well.
10168971 Yeah, I wished those 2 shippings(technically 3) got more attention :0
Would be hilarious in Thorax tries to act serious but someone even mentioning the book would cause him to have a bug wingboner and act all adorable shy he usually is(well he does strike me as a shy buggo pretty much).
So we can add Applejack, Fluttershy, the CMC, and possibly Twilight to the mix of his eventual harem. Now to see whether Rarity, Pinkie, and Rainbow will join them or not.
10169100 Twilight and Starlight will have a bit of a conflict with Spike and Emerald. I was thinking Rainbow and Rarity liking Emerald, one he's famous and kind, two he has wing and can try to challenge Rainbow. Pinkie is one I haven't decided yet.
10169103 Interesting since Spike too is famous and kind, and he has wings as well. So this will most likely create a conflict between Rarity and Rainbow over who they like more; Spike or Emerald. Unless Spike does reveal himself and they both see the truth.
10168557 Of course Spike has had sex... with EVERYONE!! Even Discord! I HAVE THE PHOTOGRAPHIC EVIDENCE!! ... and by that I mean I've visited Derpibooru.
10170692 Thanks! I am trying to give focus to Spike and Emerald evenly and show that Spike does have ponies that already care for him but everyone seems to hide their feelings.
HOW DID I MISSED THIS!?
10168353
Rabid squirrel?
Really looking forward to how far this goes. Has the potential to keep going for a long time. Even more so since the fic seems to get slowly better as more chapters come out.
Edit: Also congrats, the story got featured!
10168353
Haha it was one of my newer titles.
10168365
I hope to keep it for a while but not too too long unless there is a reason. I know there will be more and more creatures who will come to challenge Spike and Emerald and both will come to see the darker side of some ponies kind of like how Rarity did in the fashion world. I like this chapter a lot because I got to add a bit on how to accept criticism. Basically a few writing lessons from me will be in this story haha.
IT DID?!
Can't wait to see how Luna interacts with him. Certainly liked that Spike admired her and such.
Wonder how changelings like Chrysalis reacted to the book. :0
10168439
Yeah I mean she's like an aunt to him so I see him wanting to make something to impress her.
Hmm that's a good question as Chrysalis would have definitely noticed the love intake and may try to use this to her advantage. Thorax is king by this time though and has his channeling. We may see him in the next five ish chapters,
10168443
I see
I just love their interaction and bond pretty much \ovo/
Would be hilarious if Chrysalis got interested in the author especially with what intimate stuff she would see in the book.
Heck I can see Ocellus enjoying the book a lot(and being adorable and embarrassed and such when its brought up or something. Yeah she strikes me as adorably bugghorse and stuff)
10168452
That or she would try ponynapping him to make him write only for her haha
Hmm I'm not sure about the school being created yet, but Ocellus being the one that brings the book to the rest of the hive would be a good way to include her and yeah she does seem to be that type!
I cant believe they didn't take him to the hospital.
10168516
I love that scene haha but in their defense yeah the hospital would have told Twilight and they were pretty useless last time.
This indicates that Luna thinks he HAS had sex. I think that you may have meant
My biggest problem is the strange intimate scenes. While enticing and enjoyable, they seemed to have been written in a way that may have revealed that the author may yet....TO..... have had intercourse as there were several parts where the reactions were....NOT.... quite right.
10168557
Hmm I may go back and fix that tomorrow. I fully believe that Celestia has done the do but Luna is debatable. Maybe she has but I'll go with no snd we'll see more of what she thinks. I think she was trying to not offend him. I'll fix it though thanks!
10168576
You're the author. At the end of the day, you are the only one who can say
"What did you mean by that?"
Well, this is an entertaining read so far. Keep it up.
10168595
thank you!
10168577
Well true I intended it to be one way but everyone makes a story a bit there and to be honest my mind is a jumbled mess so even my reasoning for things isn't always sound.
Looks love all three CMC ,AJ and Fluttershy are into him good for him.
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Yep but as we see oblivious dragon is real bad in my story heh
10168465
Is it a bit strange that I ship Spike with Luna/Nightmare Moon and Chrysalis the most? I just like those 2 shippings(well, technically 3) a lot.
I can see Thorax's reactions about the book would be hilarious as well.
10168952
we all have weird ships I just wish those couples had more.
Yeah they will, he's always fun.
10168971
Yeah, I wished those 2 shippings(technically 3) got more attention :0
Would be hilarious in Thorax tries to act serious but someone even mentioning the book would cause him to have a bug wingboner and act all adorable shy he usually is(well he does strike me as a shy buggo pretty much).
So we can add Applejack, Fluttershy, the CMC, and possibly Twilight to the mix of his eventual harem. Now to see whether Rarity, Pinkie, and Rainbow will join them or not.
10169100
Twilight and Starlight will have a bit of a conflict with Spike and Emerald. I was thinking Rainbow and Rarity liking Emerald, one he's famous and kind, two he has wing and can try to challenge Rainbow. Pinkie is one I haven't decided yet.
10169103
Interesting since Spike too is famous and kind, and he has wings as well. So this will most likely create a conflict between Rarity and Rainbow over who they like more; Spike or Emerald. Unless Spike does reveal himself and they both see the truth.
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i will say since I have the idea of what leads to it that Spike will not reveal himself to the girls unless forced.
10169144
Ah, I see. Well we'll see if Celestia can be the first to force his hand.
This was a great chappie. Can not wait for the next one!!!
10168557 Of course Spike has had sex... with EVERYONE!! Even Discord! I HAVE THE PHOTOGRAPHIC EVIDENCE!! ... and by that I mean I've visited Derpibooru.
10170020
According to them, EVERYONE has had sex, even Yona
10170020
Ahh you are a trooper then to have escaped with your life my friend
Very in character and a really fun chapter. Makes me very happy to see Spike be who he is. You did an amazing job. Excited for more.
10170699
Very nice. I plan to write today as well hopefully.
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Thanks! I am trying to give focus to Spike and Emerald evenly and show that Spike does have ponies that already care for him but everyone seems to hide their feelings.
10170713
I can understand that. Just don't make them out of character.
10170721
I'll do my best!
10170840
Cool.
So, Emerald Flare (Spike in disguise), Will meet Celestia and Luna next chapter? How interesting the next chapter will go. I look forward to it.
10170033
Yona broke Sandbar's hips.
10170080 Bah, that's a light-weight site. I HAVE SEEN e621!!!
10172324
You she see what she did to Anon
Okay, this is bloody wonderful!
In fact, I can only express my appreciation of it in one way!
Yee, and I cannot stress this enough, Haw!
10172325
How do you live?
10177095
Well thank you! I'm so glad you're enjoying the story so far!
10177229 I do not live. I am a zomblarg demon from the Pine Barrens of NJ. Like everyone else from the Pine Barrens of New Jersey.