Prologue
Some time has passed since the changeling invasion of Canterlot. Five weeks, to be exact.
"I'm heading off to work, Lyra!"
In that time, stray changelings have been discovered hiding amongst the population, for various reasons.
"Alright, I'll stay here. I gotta practice on my lyre for tomorrow, after all!"
All of the discovered changelings were summarily dealt with, but most ponies stay on edge, anyway.
"I'm happy you were invited to play at the Gala, but I still don't know why you were picked. You're not a changeling, are you?"
Still, things have returned to normal, for the most part. Life goes on...
"Of course not, you know that!"
But, even in this time of uneventful peace...
"Alright, then, I'll see you later today!"
There are some strange things happening...
"Bye, Bon-Bon!"
And sometimes, these things are hidden in plain sight.
After Bon-Bon left the house, Lyra started heading to her room. Just as she got to the bottom of the stairs, however, there was a knock at the door. The green unicorn heads back, opening the door. Standing there is Derpy, the town's mailmare, but something seemed off about her. She was shaking a bit, and her face held a forced-looking smile. But most worryingly of all, her normally skewed eyes were actually straight.
"Derpy? Are you alright?"
"Y- Yeah, Lyra, I'm just f-fine." She didn't stop shaking, and Lyra was worried.
"Would you like to come inside?"
"S- Sure, that would be good." As Derpy walked into the house behind Lyra, the unicorn started towards the kitchen.
"Would you like anything to eat, Derpy?"
The grey pegasus pauses before answering. "Y- Yes, I am very hungry."
When Derpy's voice changed mid-sentence, Lyra whirled around just in time to see the pegasus lunge at her, revealing herself to be a changeling in mid-air. It had been starved of love for the past week, and it was desperate enough to take a more direct approach to feeding.
After only the first bite into her neck, Lyra was gone.
As the changeling continued trying to feed, there was a loud electronic noise behind it as a second Lyra faded into the room. The changeling paid the noise no mind, however. The second Lyra is enveloped in a reddish cloud of smoke, lasting for a couple of seconds. When the smoke dissipates, a red-suited masked figure is standing in Lyra's place. silently, he takes out a revolver from his suit. He walks behind the changeling and places the barrel to the back of its head, causing it to stop moving.
"You know," the masked man speaks in a thick French accent, "if you want to have a career in deception..."
He pulls back the hammer of the revolver.
"...you need to work on your technique in Hell."
BANG
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Dear god, that's an epic one-liner. Following this.
1119148 Yeah, very few better revolver shooting one liners. Only beaten by the New Vegas Intro
"From where your standing, this must seem like a stroke of bad luck, but in realality, the game was rigged from the start" BANG
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That lyre is a spy!
HUHOWNED.
dat one liner
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silently, he takes out a revolver from his suit.
INSERT MEET THE SPY!
1394694 Various reasons I beleve:
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1) Casino Royale had an AWESOME opening!
2) Jame Bond is a spy (that loved
3) Casino Royale started the opening credits 5 seconds after a great one liner
4) see #1
I read this chapter while playing with my butterfly knife, slightly sad the spy didn't use his.
Onwards to the next chap!
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That one liner
dat Deadringer watch
Hehehehe That Lyra Is a Spy!
I read it perfectly in the spy's voice. I'm so gonna read this.
That's a win. That's a spy trolling a changeling with a dead-ringer win! [in masculine voice] Win!
Roll the next clip Steven!
For no reason, without any heads-up, the story goes into present tense. Why did you have to make that mistake? It's the most obvious, most jarring, most avoidable error in writing if someone reads it.
The only problem I have with this here is the tensing. Really, it switches from present to past to present and back again so fast. Its jarring to read like that. Its better to pick a tense ahead of writing and just stick with that the whole way through. Changing it for Flashbacks and stuff like that is acceptable, because those happened in the past. Doing it constantly though. . . not so much.
Still, the concept is good, very good. I'll keep pressing on. Allons-y!
1119148
Following with the passion of a hunting pack of wolves!
That line... Is going in my hall-of-fame of quotes.
1818780 Dead Ringer
SPAH IS BEST PONI!
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2549866 20 points on spy's part :D
*Mentally plays the 'Meet The Team' ending riff*
"You got blood on my suit."
Valve should have made that a spy domination line, TOO DAMN EPIC! And also, *Imitates demoman* DOMINATED YA SKIN HOLED WEASEL!
That Lyra is a spy!
That one-liner just sold the story to me.
That one liner sold it for me, im reading this whole thing today!
1119291
Actually, in the New Vegas intro, you were shot with a 9-Millimeter named Maria, not a revolver.
Ehem gentlemen
6588079 Mentlegen?
6794125 Mentlegen.