Great chapter, two mares certainly are working diligently to gain Rose Tints favor.
This chapter shows again how difficult just popping into existence is, but for the time being he will be fine.
After the Changeling invasion however...

“Rose, these are my kin, Applebloom, Applejack, and Big Macintosh.“(——

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Applejack is the one talking <:3

I love how much more comfortable the story goes. Don't get me wrong, I liked the first version, but it always felt like, even at calm moments, that the MC was being chased by something, not quite rushed, but just a tiny bit faster than it should. Here, it feels comfortable to read, not just in the sense of pacing, but how Rose is integrating into the whole new world at his own pace like a sheet of plastic in a basin of amber. If that makes no sense, then blame it on the old German literature, that stuff has corrupted my sense of metaphors.

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thanks! I've worked very hard to try to bring the pacing to heel as well as make my writing wander a bit less while keeping he prose impactful ^^

I am happy that you separated the two different stories, your rewrite and the original; it was a very good chapter of this one.

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Glad you're enjoying! And yeah, I decided now was the time, since the first chapter of this version has now been seen more than the final chapter of the last one. Seemed a good arbitrary milestone.

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They are just doing the right thing! And let's not discredit the pink boys hustle >:3

And we will see when the time comes

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I am sure he will be able to run a fair bit...

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I'm not sure what this means but he is at least in decent shape, since his body is at Factory Defaults

As it turns out, they can carry me pretty damn fast! At least they can in comparison to my old body. I was never that far out of shape in my old life, but whatever they did with this new body when they sent me here, they sure tuned it up nicely for me!

To heavily paraphrase Smiling Jack from Vampire: The Masquerade - Bloodlines,

Now. all Equestrians -that's, uh, our word for the Ponies in general- have some things in common. Things that would set them right above humans at the top of the food chain. Like sharper senses, a body that can take a beating, and -if you play your cards right- a potentially VERY long life. It's no sure bet, of course, but living for centuries doesn't sound too bad, to me. And that's just for starters! Fringe benefits for joining the club.

The table is set, adorned with a floral tablecloth, and laden with all manner of delicious-looking dishes mainly consisting, of course, of apples.

There’s Pie, of course, hot and steamy with a slice or two already gone to show that glamorous money shot of the gooey interior. There are some flaky, lovely-looking turnovers with cream cheese icing. There are even just a few plain ol apples straight-up baked and glazed with honey.

But there are plenty of creative savory dishes incorporating the fruit as well. Baked beans, a savory variation on applesauce, and something like a stew with a heavily spiced aroma that reminds me of a nice curry, accompanied by a pot of brown rice, all stood out to me as wonderful offerings.

Brings tio mind part of the Garfield Christmas special.

"Mom, pass the potatoes, please."
"Scallopped, fried, baked or boiled?"
"Mom! You ALWAYS make too much food!"
"I know, I know. Now what would you like?"
"I.... can't decide! Just cut me a piece of pie."
"Apple, peach, blueberry, pumpkin or banana cream?"

Applejack is here, of course. The orange mare gives me an encouraging smile and occasionally glances at the two other ponies at the table. She adjusts her hat before gesturing to them as she begins speaking. “Rose, these are my kin, Applebloom, and Big Macintosh.

ister, shaking her head. “Sorry Rose, she don’t mean nothin’ by it.”

“It sounds like he met Miss Cheerilee, too. I thought he looked kinda familiar,” Applebloom says, scratching at her chin. “I remember seein' ya go up to the schoolhouse after we all got outta class for the day. You really can’t read, mister?”

Apple Bloom is two words. Says so right on the Wiki. Two words.

“I was a pretty good student back home when it came to literature, science, and mathematics. Miss Cheerilee was nice enough to volunteer to help me learn how to read Equuish script after school hours and tutor me on some things that I didn’t get to learn about due to my er, upbringing. Speaking of which, I actually performed magic for the first time today!” I say excitedly, quickly weaning together the spell I had learned.

Weaving, maybe?

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I appreciate that you are enjoying my story enough to leave feedback, Thank you for reading.

If you are that invested that you want to correct errors In the material, you should join my discord and participate in my beta reader program, which lets you read chapters as they are being written and offer feedback, rather than pollute my comments section with multiple posts correcting my spelling and grammar