This is quite the study in build-up. The payoff was excellent too.

That said, the fact that there's no chapter between 4 and the epilogue hurts. It sounded like a fun time.

A smashing ending, great Ocellus. The sensory description of emotion is super fun.

The first chapter has to be my favorite—the teasing about their little side-crushes and the whole fantasy with November Rain that Sandbar was describing...god, it's so hot

I love the way you get desperation across too with the no touching rule later on.

I'm certainly biased because I'm totally whipped for your writing but this was great. I'm gonna be coming back to this one again and again and again

You did a very good job portraying their relationship through all the rampant sex they're doing.

I should take some notes.

Though I must say Sandbar's orgasm last chapter was a bit extensive for me. He's no Zebra...but I'll chalk that up to the words in between start to end. Makes things feel dragged out sometimes.

This was so cute and hot.

So cute, well done.