Winners Finish Last

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Anachronymph

Anachronymph #1 · Nov 27th, 2019 · 2 · · Epilogue ·

This is quite the study in build-up. The payoff was excellent too.

That said, the fact that there's no chapter between 4 and the epilogue hurts. It sounded like a fun time.

semillon

semillon #2 · Nov 27th, 2019 · 3 · · 1 - Round Three ·

THIS
IS
PERFECTION

semillon

semillon #3 · Nov 27th, 2019 · 3 · · Epilogue ·

A smashing ending, great Ocellus. The sensory description of emotion is super fun.

The first chapter has to be my favorite—the teasing about their little side-crushes and the whole fantasy with November Rain that Sandbar was describing...god, it's so hot

I love the way you get desperation across too with the no touching rule later on.

I'm certainly biased because I'm totally whipped for your writing but this was great. I'm gonna be coming back to this one again and again and again

CGen

CGen #4 · Nov 28th, 2019 · 2 · · Epilogue ·

You did a very good job portraying their relationship through all the rampant sex they're doing.

I should take some notes.

Though I must say Sandbar's orgasm last chapter was a bit extensive for me. He's no Zebra...but I'll chalk that up to the words in between start to end. Makes things feel dragged out sometimes.

Kam3e433