Everyone has a back-story, including our worst enemies. But what is their back story? What causes them to act this way and why?
Lily Sapphire Rose Rich was next in line to the key to unlock her wildest dreams. But that key was stolen by someone who would later become everything she wanted to be. Disappointed and blinded by jealousy, Lily takes her anger to the next level and decides to avenge her rightful position. A decision that would leave Equestria in shreds and scars that would never heal.
Twilight Sparkle, the now-announced personal protoege of Princess Celestia, had more than her fair share of dreams coming true. But with these dreams came a terrible price she would have to pay, and a person she would come to fear for the rest of her life.
I looked at this again, and realized there a few mistakes I had to fix. That's done. By the way, for those of you who didn't get the reference, E-Notes Parsley= Elvis Presley
This has been an enjoyable read so far—it flows really nicely, the lore is solid and so are the characters. What could be a bit better is grammar and spelling as there has been quite a lot of typos, missing words, weirdly placed commas and hyphens, and some roughly worded sentences. Still, while these were noticeable, they didn’t really lower the story’s readability. Probably the biggest issue that bothered me was that Twilight was nervously waiting for the test that seemed to start within a few minutes or so, yet she suddenly ran away with Clutterstep for what I presume to be hours.
Anyway, thank you for this read. I shall keep tracking and looking forward to when you come back from hiatus.
Well, it escalated really quickly from the enchanting lullaby to the cliffhanger at the end. Glad to see this story’s not dead!
Ahh! Sorry! This site drives me crazy sometimes---
I'm not done with the chapter yet!
Hope you enjoyed what was there. I'm going to continue now. Thanks for the comment!
Hello,
Some mistakes here and there, but a good read.
I know what you're doing. I know EXACKLY what you're doing. I know. . . .
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Gahh! Again!?
This site! I'm not done with the chapter!
Glad you enjoyed it so far. I'm going to continue now.
Oh, but it just leaves off there? How criminal!
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Haha! No. I just haven't gotten a chance to post the next chapter yet, but its coming, I assure you.
I hope you enjoyed it!
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Hell yeah gamer