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SulliedInk


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Long ago, in the faraway land of Equestria, at a time when harmony did not exist, at an age when warfare and discord swept the land, two alicorn Princesses commissioned six young ponies, whose bonds with each other seemed unbreakable, to fix the broken, violent nature of the land. After exploring the far reaches of Equestria, they are inspired to create something grand in honor of their own bond. Together, they will have to prove their worth to the Princesses, the gods, and the people. They are the only ones who can make the ideal of peace a reality. They are the only ones who can forge the Elements of Harmony.

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 1 )

Ch1, Pg1, Para2, must capitalize "twilight." Same page, Para6, was that, not "is that."

Ch1, Pg2, Para2, change "squishy, and" to "squishy and." Same para, change "would've" to "would." Same para, change "it" to "that." Change "are " to were, "throwing over" to overthrowing. Next para, "vefore" to before, "so to speak" to "I suppose."

Ch1, Pg2, Para6, "in." to it.

Nice job, over all. Is Crystal Rarity?

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