This fiction is first written in Chinese, and later translated into English by Nova Twinkle.
Sweetie Belle was tired of bullying and mocking, so she decided to master teleportation spell to retaliate. Sometimes you just can't speed things up, and usually there's a price to pay.
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Now that it has been translated, it would definitely benefit from a new editing pass by someone who’s first language is English, just to catch some more of the grammatical errors. Seems solid though, so probably going to read it during spring break
I second Roger's notion. It could use some more polish from an English-speaking editor.
Anyway, the story was a bit predictable. I also feel like you could've gone further into Twilight's thoughts as she realized Sweetie's fate.
Nevertheless, I certainly enjoyed it, and in the end, that's what really counts.
Have a Like. :)
Owch.
yeah. I agree. This story should be polished by more English readers. It can be better~
as TheAncientPolitzanian said, the stories is a bit predictable, so maybe there can be more changes?