"She licked her lips and raised her head, rubbing her cheeks and nose over his sheath and heavy balls, inhaling his particular scent with deep, greedy breaths..."
1128214 Fleur didn't get much screen time, but she was an interesting anomaly, and Fancypants struck me as a decent fellow, so it seemed that he'd probably be with Fleur for more than her looks. So here we are. : D
1128352 Glad you liked it. I feel like there isn't much interesting kink portrayed in ponyfic, so I tried to do my part to rectify that.
1128482 She doesn't bother beating around the bush, haha.
1128522 Fleur specifically requested that he use her as a toy for his pleasure. It was her submission fantasy which determined the scene they played, and which she took great pleasure in. Fancypants was performing the Dominant role she requested he play. Kink does not equal misogyny.
"Fleur specifically requested that he use her as a toy for his pleasure. It was her submission fantasy which determined the scene they played, and which she took great pleasure in. Fancypants was performing the Dominant role she requested he play. Kink does not equal misogyny."
Fair enough. The willing submission fantasy was never my cup of tea, but you pulled it off quite well for those who enjoy it.
I think this was the most realistic piece of smut I've ever read. It was well written, and you didn't try to create some half-assed storyline around it. However, what I really like is the high degree of realism, as far as realism goes in a story about rutting unicorns. You rarely see a safety word in other stories on this site, but the limits, and the aftercare made it pretty believable.
1128865 Haha, it made me laugh while I was writing it, too. It was an image that popped into my head, and I figured I may as well use it since it wasn't going away. And yeah, you totally should. I'd love to see you coming down to play. I miss reading your stuff.
1132607 Well, it was originally written with a time limit in mind, so I wanted to get down to business. Also, I enjoy the idea that she can just, y'know, say she'd like some sex, and he rolls with it.
1132839 It's a pairing I like too. They seemed to have good chemistry in their brief appearance together, and there's something to be said for shipping two good-looking ponies together.
1133331 Ponies are people too. There are a fair few canonical examples of un-punned pronouns, such as "girls," "children," "everyone," and so on. I'm perfectly comfortable thinking that ponies would think of themselves as "people," just like we don't normally refer to ourselves as humans: "I'm going to the beach with a few humans." It's silly. : D
Awwwww. Fleur and Fancy having a little fantasy playtime. Much like Bronystories up there, the doormat fantasy has never been much on my list of things. But these two cutie kinksters get at least a bit of a pass. I love the pairing, and you capture everything well. You get a thumbs up and a mustache.
1133939 I think Fancy and Rarity just don't go well with each other. Ponies say that Spike's too young for her, but I say that Fancy seems too OLD for Rarity. Seriously, he looks like he's probably twice her age, or probably in his 40's. Also Fleur and Fancy were together throughout most of the episode.
1134932 Fancy/Rarity makes sense to me for the same reasons it probably makes sense to other folks: they got along well, Rarity seemed to find him appealing, and then of course in the season finale, he was shown with her, and Fleur was nowhere in sight. Also, as a matter of characterization, Fancypants is a pretty appealing partner from Rarity's perspective, as he is famous, apparently very important, fairly obviously wealthy, and moves in the upper crust of Canterlot society. So I can totally see where the pairing comes from.
For this story, mainly I just think Fleur is forgotten about too often, and Rarity stars in a lot of clopfics, so 2 + 2 = Fleur/Fancy. : D
1134988 That's also entirely possible. I dunno, I'm a low-intensity shipper. I'm willing to accept any ship as long as the author sells me on it. When I'm writing a story, the ship I choose is the one that'll make the most interesting story. Here, I felt that I had more room to work with Fleur than I did with Rarity in terms of selling the reader on her kinky sexuality, as well as the factors I mentioned before, therefore I chose Fleur. No OTPing was involved in the making of this story. : D
Exactly what it says on the package, prime quality, perfect length and just the right amount of everything. Nothing outstanding, but everything definitely good. A standard, but a standard of excellent quality. Not a story to remember fondly for years, not one to return in our dreams, but I wish more of them came like that. I can imagine coming into clop shop, and the shopkeeper reaching to the upper shelf: "You won't be disappointed in this one, sir. Excellent vintage."
Finally so many pairings with Rarity I was beginning to think Fleur just stop existing like her existance card got revoked or something.
Read this on 60MP, and I must say, you've captured their similar tastes, as you call it, splendidly.
You, sir, are a boss. *bows*
Well done. As a married man, I can relate quite a bit...
Daaaaaaaaaammnn.
One of the best examples of short, well-written consensual kink I've seen. Love it, faved, watched.
Damn you, first words said by Fleur.... eh. I almost choked with my own tea!
When I read "deep, greedy breaths" all I could think of was:
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Congratulations! Your boner is now dead!
"Redolent: full of a specified fragrance."
I learned a new word today!
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It's not hypocritical if I admit that I'm also guilty of it.
Final thought: Very well-written. At times the sexual metaphors involving oars and such were a little too flowery for my tastes.
Overall, a fine read.
1128214 Fleur didn't get much screen time, but she was an interesting anomaly, and Fancypants struck me as a decent fellow, so it seemed that he'd probably be with Fleur for more than her looks. So here we are. : D
1128309 1128339 Well thank you, sirs.
1128352 Glad you liked it. I feel like there isn't much interesting kink portrayed in ponyfic, so I tried to do my part to rectify that.
1128482 She doesn't bother beating around the bush, haha.
1128522 Fleur specifically requested that he use her as a toy for his pleasure. It was her submission fantasy which determined the scene they played, and which she took great pleasure in. Fancypants was performing the Dominant role she requested he play. Kink does not equal misogyny.
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Fair enough.
The willing submission fantasy was never my cup of tea, but you pulled it off quite well for those who enjoy it.
I think this was the most realistic piece of smut I've ever read. It was well written, and you didn't try to create some half-assed storyline around it.
However, what I really like is the high degree of realism, as far as realism goes in a story about rutting unicorns. You rarely see a safety word in other stories on this site, but the limits, and the aftercare made it pretty believable.
Not even bothering with a story, huh?
Ah, something new and different.
Jolly good show sir!
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1132607
It's a clopfic, shut up and clop.
Finally a FleurDePants fic I really like. I always thought Fancy was better off with Fleur.
HOT HOT HOT HOT
The only thing I could find in this story was the following line: "His appreciation for her as a person..." Believe you meant "pony."
Other than that, this was wonderful, and seeing as how I'm a huge fan of married couples doing their thing, I'll definitely be tracking this.
Hot hot hot! Just imagining that deep throat,,, uagh! Thumbs up!
1128813 Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
1128865 Haha, it made me laugh while I was writing it, too. It was an image that popped into my head, and I figured I may as well use it since it wasn't going away. And yeah, you totally should. I'd love to see you coming down to play. I miss reading your stuff.
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1132607 Well, it was originally written with a time limit in mind, so I wanted to get down to business. Also, I enjoy the idea that she can just, y'know, say she'd like some sex, and he rolls with it.
1132616 Why thank you, my good sir.
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1132839 It's a pairing I like too. They seemed to have good chemistry in their brief appearance together, and there's something to be said for shipping two good-looking ponies together.
1133222 Glad you enjoyed it.
1133331 Ponies are people too. There are a fair few canonical examples of un-punned pronouns, such as "girls," "children," "everyone," and so on. I'm perfectly comfortable thinking that ponies would think of themselves as "people," just like we don't normally refer to ourselves as humans: "I'm going to the beach with a few humans." It's silly. : D
1133855 I know, right?
Awwwww. Fleur and Fancy having a little fantasy playtime. Much like Bronystories up there, the doormat fantasy has never been much on my list of things. But these two cutie kinksters get at least a bit of a pass. I love the pairing, and you capture everything well. You get a thumbs up and a mustache.
1133939 I think Fancy and Rarity just don't go well with each other. Ponies say that Spike's too young for her, but I say that Fancy seems too OLD for Rarity. Seriously, he looks like he's probably twice her age, or probably in his 40's. Also Fleur and Fancy were together throughout most of the episode.
1134932 Fancy/Rarity makes sense to me for the same reasons it probably makes sense to other folks: they got along well, Rarity seemed to find him appealing, and then of course in the season finale, he was shown with her, and Fleur was nowhere in sight. Also, as a matter of characterization, Fancypants is a pretty appealing partner from Rarity's perspective, as he is famous, apparently very important, fairly obviously wealthy, and moves in the upper crust of Canterlot society. So I can totally see where the pairing comes from.
For this story, mainly I just think Fleur is forgotten about too often, and Rarity stars in a lot of clopfics, so 2 + 2 = Fleur/Fancy. : D
1134953 Granted Fancy did treat Rarity well and all, but I think these two are strictly friends and nothing more.
1134988 That's also entirely possible. I dunno, I'm a low-intensity shipper. I'm willing to accept any ship as long as the author sells me on it. When I'm writing a story, the ship I choose is the one that'll make the most interesting story. Here, I felt that I had more room to work with Fleur than I did with Rarity in terms of selling the reader on her kinky sexuality, as well as the factors I mentioned before, therefore I chose Fleur. No OTPing was involved in the making of this story. : D
1135045 Well I hope to see more of Fleur's kinkiness with Fancy soon. This is already a good story and can't wait for more.
This is where I knew it was going to be glorious!
You sir, are one classy mofo!
-Glassed
1142907 Allow me to lift a snifter of brandy to you, my good sir.
Quite the delightful story.
Exactly what it says on the package, prime quality, perfect length and just the right amount of everything. Nothing outstanding, but everything definitely good. A standard, but a standard of excellent quality. Not a story to remember fondly for years, not one to return in our dreams, but I wish more of them came like that. I can imagine coming into clop shop, and the shopkeeper reaching to the upper shelf: "You won't be disappointed in this one, sir. Excellent vintage."
This? In sixty minutes? Win.
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This is nice and romantic I would like to see more.
...Reads chapter 2...
Well I asked for more and I got it
Chuckfinley recommended, and i wasn't disappointed. This was delicious.