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neet
ALSO FUCKING CARIBOU!!!!!! SCUM!!!!
RRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!
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I agree, but I want to see a story where the caribou aren't dicks.
First, even though Shining Armor is dead, the event of the wedding is still coming and I already now why. Second which I forgot to say some chapters ago, sense that basterd of the Caribou came, it's going to be fun for the end, I hope.
9253761
yes there will be a war with the caribou but I am planning that for when tirek comes and Talion will be away so it will follow the show on how he is beaten
9253761
also look forward to twilights turning into a alicorn that is when I will reveal the identify of the alicorn mare under Tartarus
9253761
I have something big planed
Tiene razón esto va muy rápido
You know a wedding takes a long time to plan right.
So proposing and marrying can not happen in the space of 2 weeks
9239888
Good luck finding that.
My dude the concept of the story is unique and interesting, but you missed a lot of good conflicts and development. The relationship between the female dimond dog and tempest have developed quite nicely but the relation between the main 6 is just ridiculous, not because he has the whole main 6 but how it happens. Development of friendship into relationships is quite entertaining to read. Luna and the Dragon are also poorly approached.
Another conflicts you could have created could be a rivalry between Celestina and Talion, you know because they are two completely different powerful rulers with different morals and set views in black magic. And then the relation of Luna and Talion would have been more complex and exiting. But all this are ideas you could have approach for you next story try not to rush when developing an ark. Please take this as constructive criticism and not as a hate full comment because I do enjoy your story.
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I agree, this story has some pretty gaping flaws in places, but where else can you find a story about a ringwraith that is unbearably hot to basically all carnivores, befriended The tempest shadow in the first chapter, [almost] killed discord and is going to war with sexist caribous?
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