Princess Luna, longing for some real company, decides to befriend a young, introverted stallion who she feels is very much like she is herself. Things seem to go well... but could anything go wrong from a Princess befriending a commoner?
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Aww, how cute! I can already tell this will be wonderful!
Wow
First I wanted to say something along the end, but then I thought I understand him again, good job.
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Oh, it will be! Despite there being a bit of conflict with a particular character later...
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I'm grateful for your Wow!
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Thank you!
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I can imagine... Thought, could you imagine Aversion being a member of Luna's guard?
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Possibly... but he might be a little too hesitant and timid, unless he was really willing to condition himself!
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I had said luna could encourage him. Or he has his own personal guard, given what relashionship he will have with her. Either way, I'd say his bully would then think twice about talking bad about him again
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Oh, for sure! In fact... Luna just might end up doing something about Brutus later on! No spoilers, though!
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Oh this will be fun for sure!
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If you includ a guard following him, don't make it one of those controlling once, that are kind of the main chars nanny or attack everyone as soon as they say "hello". Maybe also no ninja guard stuff?
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If I do follow through with the suggestion from Bronycommander, I'm sure Luna would be extremely selective of the guard(s) and instruct them exactly what they should do only if Aversion is in any (imminent) danger.
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well I trust you with it, but you probably know where this can lead to, which is why I thought it would be better to mention it.
I think many things could be actually good if it would be written properly sometimes.
I had a different idea first, but then I only thought, it would be interessting to see, how you would let Aversion react to noticing Luna having a crush on him or really liking him. I guess in a friendship way, this will happen anyway, but I suddenly had to image that our main char probably has problems to understand that she actually likes him if I judge him right.
I will never now how deep you let his problems affect him unless the story is finished, but I think I understand him so far.
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yes
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I dunno. The bully would probably just call him out as a parasitical coward hiding behind someone else's hired muscle. Maybe add some taunts about how he's Luna's boytoy/pet? That he brings nothing to the table with Luna and that as soon as she's tired with him, he'll back to serving drinks? Maybe something about how all it'll take is for Luna to find someone she pities more and Aversion will be booted back out onto the street. That he's a nobody and will always be a nobody no matter how much unearned luxury he surrounds himself with. Bullies can be so cruel with their words.
Seriously, though. Aversion had better make something of the opportunity that dropped into his lap and not just turn into Luna's concubine. He's got the chance now to get some higher education, develop skills, establish contacts, and/or squeeze some investing money out of this relationship. He should make something of himself.
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Ask the Author about this, not me
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Well, for all we know, Luna may end up dealing with Brutus in a much more subtle way... but I won't give away what I've got planned. All I'll say is... Prince Blueblood is going to be an even bigger problem for Aversion.
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I can already see where this is going...
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Do you, now? Well, it will get quite interesting, that much I can assure you...